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From ANON - leann on January 24, 2004
yea! can't wait for more...poor will
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From ANON - .the.Rowan on January 24, 2004
eep! Run William run! well, as far as your chain will allow!

Hehe, anyway, was waiting nearly eons for this next bit and whoosh! It hath arrived! Not that I mind waiting, plenty of other stories to read, but a good favorite cannot helped but longing for! -wry grin- 'Twas a bit shorter than I thought it would be but no care! But -wink wink nudge nudge hint hint- longer /is/ better savvy?
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From ANON - sparx on January 24, 2004
Oh you are not seriously leaving it there!! *screams and begs for more*
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From ANON - Leah on January 23, 2004
Oh no! You can't stop there!!!!!!!!! Please update soon. This is one of my favorite stories from POTC, and I've been reading it since the beginning. It's very well-written, and really stands out. Keep up the good work!

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From ANON - Meg on January 23, 2004
Ah, you cruel bastard! This is so deliciously sick and twisted, not to mention well written. Now if I have to bloody wait any longer I'll start getting violent!
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From ANON - NEWENIT on January 23, 2004
YOU ARE EVIL!!! POSITIVELY EVIL I TELL YOU!!!! How can you do that to us? Just leave us like that WAITING on Barbossa's next move.....

I do hope you will update soon.

NEWENIT
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From ANON - Wilwarin on January 20, 2004
Yes! Jack in a corset! *giggles*

great fic! mmm, jack/will. *drool*

please update this soon
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From ANON - Anon on January 19, 2004
HEY!!!!! come on you got do some more
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From ANON - Julie-Rae / Yakkorat on January 17, 2004
You KNOW how much I love this story.
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From ANON - Julie-Rae / Yakkorat on January 17, 2004
"Jack smirked, eyes glinting, but rememering Barbossa's earlier threat, didn't say a word. He reached a hand under the covers to stroke over Will's closest knee." -- That he still doesn't say anything... it just breaks my heart.
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"Com'on lad, better here, than up there." Jack whispered, rubbing Will's arm, and keeping wary eyes on the captain. -- The ever defiant Will... God, I love him.
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"Jasmine, I thifor for the boy." -- I already said how much I like this. Each of them has a particular scent that Barbossa likes them to use. Just another "you're my plaything" moment, or more subtle conditioning? You decide. *wink* LOL. I also want to take the opportunity to address what a voyeristic bastard Barbossa is. Hehehe...
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"pulling Will out of the water, and running a searching, and invasive hand down the slick body, while his tongue invaded the mouth, walked Will backward to the bed before pushing him down,and then hooked the latch onto his collar." -- I don't know why this catches the breath in my throat, why it seems so much worse than some of the other things he's done, but it does.
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"There's nothin' to be done 'bout that, lad. Don't tell him that, he's likely to pass ye to the crew, if'n ye tell him to not touch ye." Jack said solemnly. -- Oh God, you can FEEL how much he hates having to say that. You can tell just from the words that all he wants to do is wrap his arms around Will and say "I won't let him hurt you..." But he can't. He't,'t, and he knows it, which is all the more tragic.
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They are so cute. Will is all shy and timid and Jack is protective and gentle and it's all just so sweet that they can be that affectionate in the middle of all this horror.
You've done a marvelous job. Don't stop now!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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From ANON - Julie-Rae / Yakkorat on January 17, 2004
"Jack swallowed hard at the sight. Two golden necklaces- no, collars!- lay inside." -- Oh dear God. When I first read it, I gasped, my hand flew to my mouth. How very very perfect. And the fact that the collars are golden only adds to my suggestion of adorning them later. You know, getting them special skimpy clothes or earrings or other jewelry. The jewelry would work exceptionally well on Will because his features are so effeminate. I can see him with a jeweled earring, and an slim anklet, perhaps maybe a bracelet. Of course as much as Jack would think Will was beautiful with it, he would also hate that Barbossa had decorated him. It would be interesting to play with. OH PLEASE WRITE SOME MORE!
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"Will, poised to jump back up, slowly sank down, glowering unhappily." -- You can just see it... He realizes exactly what implications his actions have before Barbossa says a bloody thing.
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Barbossa stroked his long nails down Jack's tanned, collared throat. "Ye'll be doing exactly what I say, or Jack'll be payin' the price." He leanedn sln slightly and licked Captain Sparrow from jaw to temple, an eye on the blacksmith. -- I could divide this paragraph into its sentences and comment on each individually, but I'll just do it like this. First of all, even though you didn't specify, in my mind he used the back of his nails, and then fingered the collar a bit. It's almost a more intimate gesture than the sex was. And the dialogue... chills! He's such an awful awful man... vile is the word that comes to mind. And licking Jack? It's such a powerfully disrespectful statement, again, driving it home: I own you. It was just an amazing exchange.
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"If you don't Will, he shall." Jack nodded, eyes fixed firmly on his young friend. -- I wouldn't have envisioned Jack using the word "shall," at least not there. It seems just a bit out of place, though the line is spectacular. He pulls out that low no-nonsense voice that he seldom uses.
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"The same thing I've done to Jack." Will swallowed hard, a shudder racing down his spine. -- That is a very powerful line. It's the bomb dropping for Will, Will's first look at just how deep the trouble they're in is. Plus, he realizes in that one second that Jack has most definitely been raped, that he's about to receive the same treatment, and that the only one who could save him is sitting 5 feet away in the same predicament. And all in 6 words. Beautifully written.
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SO *sniff* sweet.... Jack will try anything to save Will. Think about it. If Will had actually gotten away, can you even IMAGINE what Barbossa would have done to Jack?
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"Ye say one more thing, Cap'n Sparrow, an' I'll tie the whelp to the fuckin' mast!" He jerked the chair upright before grabbing a rag to gag him, tieing it tight. -- Well, "tieing" should be "tying" for starters, but... what a threat. I can hear Barbossa saying it and feel Jack'ash ash of terror, overtaken by the fury at Barbossa spread-eagling Will to the bed to be violated.
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You do these angsty chapters SO well!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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From ANON - Julie-Rae / Yakkorat on January 17, 2004
I would have liked in this opening scene for Will to have even a one-line reflection that shows that he had feelings for Jack. It just kind of seems to pop up out owherwhere. And I would have liked a bit more detail on the swordfight.
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Nice job handling Will's partial realization.
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I'm a little curious as to why Will was the first thing that crossed Ana and Gibbs's mind when they realize that Barbossa has Jack. I don't understand why he's their first thought. I think if they're thinking that Barbossa wants him relating to the curse, that needed to be said.
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Not the very best chapter, but far from bad. :) KEEP WRITING.
Love,
Julie-Rae
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From ANON - Julie-Rae / Yakkorat on January 16, 2004
You're breaking my heart here!!! OH my LORD...
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I actually meant to review as I went but I can't breathe. But oh my GOD... seeing Jack and Will go through that, seeing them used against each other like that... I... Oh...
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BLOODY HELL, PEOPLE!!!
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Maybe... MAYBE now that I've read the whole thing through twice I can actually go back and review the way I like to review... Picking out the best bits and pointing out things that could be stronger. But that's TWICE now that I've intended to do that and have been so caught up in the story from WORD ONE that I couldn't do it.
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DemonicLittleGirl sent me this'a way and I will have to thank her profusely for the next 20 years of my life! This is just amazing. Everything from the collars to Will and Jack's quiet trust of each other, to Barbossa's hideousness... It's all wonderful. I can not TELL you how much I am enjoying this fic, nor can I BEG you enough to give me more! Babes in bondage. How much better can it get? What would I like to see more of? Well, I'd like to see the story progress. I'm interested in the corset idea. Actually, I'm intrigued by what the corset was doing in the Dutch captain's quarters anyway... might be a chance for an original character to make an appearance. I'd like to see how Jack plans on getting them out of this... but mostly I'd have to admit, I want to see more of the same. I love the forced compliance. Really, though, as a suggestion... Barbossa keeps threatening to turn one or both of them over to the whole crew. I'd like to see it happen. And really, as far as Barbossa is concerned, he thinks he has Jack broken, but Will I'm not so sure of. I'd like to see what kind of turture he would devise that wouldn't injure him too badly, that wouldn't marr his beauty.
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Ideas... Barbossa could adorn them both, piercing their ears, giving them rings, whatever makes them "prettier" to his eyes. Eventually, he could have them around the ship with him, once he's sufficiently assured of their obedience. I think Barbossa picking out Jasimine for Will was a brilliant idea and I'd like to see it go farther. Jasmine for Will, something different for Jack, and they'd be scents the two men would gto dto despise. Eventually, Barbossa could lend one of them out. It might be interesting play with the one left behind, especially if they could hear the other one unhappy.
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In conclusion, the whole thing is just masterfully written, and I'm going to try to go back and read/review it together now. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write more!!!!
Love,
Julie-Rae
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From ANON - Anon on January 11, 2004
Meh, cute ^^;. rawr... okie, so it is really cute. and i can't review well, so...uh...cute?
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From ANON - Yersi Fanel on January 07, 2004
I Like it, I love Jack, that is why I love see him in danger jajajaj, Continue, savvy?
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