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By : pewpew
  • From girlyhero on May 31, 2010
    I didn't actually find anything that made me unsure about your story. When I read the first segment, I thought "Oh no, not a threesome/moresome story." I rarely come across one that isn't awkward to me. But when I read yours, I really enjoyed it, and can't wait for the next chapter. I think your character development is great and intriguing. I'm truly drawn in and am on the edge of my seat.
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  • From ANON - Kurojin on May 29, 2010
    Chapter six was great I really like the cute and 'awww' factor that the animals brought. I was having a horrible week and this chapter was right on time. Apparently even reading about pets is a stress reliever for me, lol. I feel almost as excited as Amelia with the alien pet. Although it is an Yautjan domesticated animal I hope there won't be any incidents like with some people who try to keep lions, bears, or wolves as pets. I wonder what they will be named. I don't think I foresee Fluffy being used at all, lol.

    I love your style of writing and the depth the details bring; like pets lowing blood pressure/ raising longevity, Mah'sic wanting to do scans on her brain, the intellegence of the Yaut hound. I also enjoy the pacing. You're not taking things to fast or rushing Amelia's feelings for Raz'ha. Amelia is so down to earth, and I like how she seems to take the things in her life in stride. Being very understanding of how Yautja society views her and her place in society. It was great to see Raz'ha and even Mah'sic being so protective of Amelia. '...That is called prostitution and it is a crime.' was a line that made me laugh. I can't wait for more and I really apprieciate you writing this story. It brings me so much joy to read. Thanks!


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  • From girlyhero on May 28, 2010
    I really like this story. I wasn't sure at first, but you really drew me in. Raz'ha is so sweet!!
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  • From ANON - Unspoken Lores on May 28, 2010
    Ooh I hope Amelia and Raz'ha hook up - they're so cute!! Plus PUPPIES! I want an alien puppy! Keep writing - I want to read more!
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  • From HannaFO on May 25, 2010
    Very nice chapter.
    Good to see that she has a backbone XD
    The end was really sweet:)
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  • From DeathGodDist on May 24, 2010
    Love it! I just so love the way you write these chapters. It's a great sign of how good you are when you can make someone go "awwww" at the description and interactions of the doggy puppies and the alien puppy. And I just love how you keep such attention to detail, like Mah'sic continuously asking about her blood pressure (I can totally see her one day just snapping at him for that), or how you insert these funny anecdotes into things, like how you turned a covered gift into a hilarious joke about Santa Claus being a sex offender to be hunted down. :D

    Anyway, you've earned leeway with this drought on sex scenes. I'd much rather you write them when you feel inspired, rather than trying to force them out. Usually makes for better smut that way :D

    Again, great job! :)
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  • From hawthorne on May 23, 2010
    6... I enjoyed that chappy! I look forward to learning the puppys' names and more
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  • From torturequeen06 on May 23, 2010
    Aww, I love the little puppies. They're so cute. Even the little Yaut Hound. I actually think he's my favorite. I can't wait to read what's going to happen next. I hope Val'jek lets Amelia keep the puppies.
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  • From CaptDavyJonesLover on May 23, 2010
    I am loving this story. The puppy part is soo cute..more please!
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  • From HannaFO on May 19, 2010
    More please :D Really love this story :)
    And I did like tha last chapter, I am just way to lazy to write reviews most of the time sorry :)
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  • From ANON - KarenLioncourt on May 17, 2010
    Nice:) Hope she will like the puppies. I know I would^^
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  • From ANON - Cricket on May 15, 2010
    LOVE IT!! This has to be my fav chapter so far! I hope Am gets back and harasses Raz into letting her keep the Yaut hound too hahaha
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  • From ANON - Panpriestess on May 15, 2010
    It is nice to come back to new multi chapters :) The story is fleshing out nicely. I am now getting emotionally invested in the players. I think this is going to turn out to be an outstanding work of fanfiction.
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  • From DeathGodDist on May 15, 2010
    Heh, that was a cool chapter. That ended up being quite a task for poor Raz'ha who just wanted a single puppy. The poor guy is trying so hard. I had to read over it twice but I did get the whole bartering scene down and it did make sense. Infuriating though, but that was the point of course, since all he wanted was a puppy and was willing to give his precious dagger just for that. Too bad Yautja honor is really pervasive with their merchants (certainly the opposite of every human merchant). Amelia's reaction will be fun. Hopefully she gives the guy a bit more respect given how much annoyance he's enduring.

    Great job! Can't wait for more. :)
    -DGD
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  • From hawthorne on May 14, 2010
    I seemed to have missed the update of chapter 4 so I got to read 2 chapters... hahaha i have to laugh at the puppys references... and now i look forward to ch 6 and Amelies reaction... bet she is all over the injury lame pup
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