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Okay, so I like the idea behind this. Ice Age characters living in a Zootopia-like environment? That's actually a pretty neat idea with a lot of potential. My problem with the story though is the way it's written. There are times were I don't know which character is talking and that honestly gets confusing. My advice is that when a character starts talking, make it clear that that specific character is talking so that the reader knows who to listen to. Remember: when characters talk, they tell a story. Again, like the concept, but the execution could use some work.