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September 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This story has a great beginning, and a potential to be a really darkly driven plot...Will u leave it like this or are u in the transition of adding another chapter?
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December 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
update soon
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March 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
interesting start to things, looking forward to seeing where you go with this
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February 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
please consider using a new line and spacing before a new paragraph.
also considering how dreadfully short this was please detail abit more development in Sarah's life before she becomes a crack whore stripper.
furthermore it is highly unlikely that any mirror in a stripclub would break due to having a shoe tossed at it... those things are build to take much more abuse without breakin... Ive seen them take the full force of a body thrown into them
but also a broken mirror would be useless as a device to call on citizens of the Labyrinth... in the same way a broken phone would be useless to call your friend.
also considering how dreadfully short this was please detail abit more development in Sarah's life before she becomes a crack whore stripper.
furthermore it is highly unlikely that any mirror in a stripclub would break due to having a shoe tossed at it... those things are build to take much more abuse without breakin... Ive seen them take the full force of a body thrown into them
but also a broken mirror would be useless as a device to call on citizens of the Labyrinth... in the same way a broken phone would be useless to call your friend.