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by BlueBastard

schedule November 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I Love this story i always liked this pairing the best in the Star Wars movies so good job ^_^ i also really like your writing style it feels like im really there. So ya i cant wait for the next chapter!!!!and i hope you continue!!!
person Casmut
schedule October 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
omg! this is incredibly great! and not to mention sexy. ~grin~ i love it! please update soon!
person IamGrey
schedule October 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
write more please
schedule October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very nice. Very hot. I like the interplay between them. I hope there's more somewhere. I'd love to see how it all comes together.
person anonymous_fan
schedule October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow. this pairing is very interesting. I think its the first of its kind i've seen.
Also this story is very well set out too :-) I am looking forward to seeing where your heading with it :-P
Lemme know when u have an update pl0x???? with sugar-coated cherries on vanilla icecream ???
person RyuaAlba
schedule October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I am so ecstatically glad you've done another chapter! Very hot. Lots of delicious tension.... Oooooooh, I like this story.
person calileane
schedule October 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i was surprised as how good this pairing seems. It's the first ever slash i read on star wars. As it is my favorite movie i didn't want anything other than the original in my head. As it is i found your story and the summary made me curious. So here i am.

I loved those three chapters. The idea is really original.
person ChaosProphet
schedule October 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
win, win, and more win! ive been anticipating an update to this story, and i wasnt disappointed. the back and forth between kenobi and maul was great, both in the dialogue and the power dynamic. i dont like fics where obi-wan gives in without a fight, or maul becomes a jedi. these two seem to me to be very closely matched, which makes the stories much more fun. the dream link is a cool angle and im looking forward to see how you build on it, as well as how maul makes kenobi 'his'.

my only dislike/nitpick was some grammar and spelling errors. if you are working on a word processor, please use spell check. if you are working on a notepad-type program, please use a dictionary or get a friend to proof/beta for you. i mean this only as constructive criticism, as both a reader and an author. having the words spelled right and the sentences put together properly makes for better flow, better comprehension, and a much more enjoyable read. cant wait for the next chapter!
schedule October 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ya I love this pairing there is so passion. I'll love to see obe wan give into the passion! Cant wait for the next chapter.
schedule September 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting start, I look forward to the next part, keep it up!

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