rate_review Reviews

Hi there! I just finished reading everything you've posted so far and I started this morning... I've had a busy day, not! haha, anyways, I'm truly surprised that you have so few hits on your story. It's very good. The plot and action scenes and characterization are all very good. I'm really enjoying it. I don't usually leave long reviews, but you seem as if you'd really like one :)

The only thing I want to comment on is the dialogue. What the characters are saying to each other is fine. What I mean is the structure of your paragraphs. I think that it could be formatted differently so that it is easier to understand what character is speaking. I don't know if you have anyone proof-reading this for you... or if you take any writing classes. Anyways, maybe even spacing out the dialogue would help.

I can't wait for an update :) I can't seem to find enough GOOD POTC fics!!

I think you're doing great all on your own!

Now stop praising me and making me blush!

No one has reviewed!!??

I love this story! I can't wait to see if Jack can tame the wild Oria.

Please, please give me more!