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October 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I don’t know if I should laugh or cry with this story; it’s almost identical to your Spider-Man story, and has an even worse plot!
Anakin: Ok, so I’ve gone over to the Dark Side, slaughtered a whole shit load of other Jedi (including a room full of little kiddie Jedi, that was fun!), have a secret wife who’s pregnant, and I’m genuinely a nasty piece of work. But hey, I think you’re hot and I want to fuck you.
Serra: Oh you smooth talking Sith Lord you. I’m going to turn my back on a life time of training, ignore all the evil things you’ve done, drop to my knees and suck you off like a $10 whore in heat!
With all seriousness, at least TRY and come up with a plot line, even if it’s just a way to get two characters together in a believable way before you have them shagging like rabbits.
Anakin: Ok, so I’ve gone over to the Dark Side, slaughtered a whole shit load of other Jedi (including a room full of little kiddie Jedi, that was fun!), have a secret wife who’s pregnant, and I’m genuinely a nasty piece of work. But hey, I think you’re hot and I want to fuck you.
Serra: Oh you smooth talking Sith Lord you. I’m going to turn my back on a life time of training, ignore all the evil things you’ve done, drop to my knees and suck you off like a $10 whore in heat!
With all seriousness, at least TRY and come up with a plot line, even if it’s just a way to get two characters together in a believable way before you have them shagging like rabbits.
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February 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hey , don´t mind the two stars (vote) it was an awesome story.The end surprised me ......no ,not really ... :-)
keep it up
keep it up