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September 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was actually very good and extreamly erotic! I hope you do continue!
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September 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey the gaps made it easier to read, and nice job on the "lemon" scene
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September 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yeah!! Good! Keep it up!
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September 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep it up! Pretty please!!
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September 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I haven't been able to find that many predator fanfics. So I was glad that I found some here. So far I like the different predator characters personalities. I can't wait to read more of your story. And can't wait till find out what graves is up too? Update soon please.
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool! I can't wait to see what happens next.
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep it up! Good! Put in some bestiality!
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice story! Please update soon... I can't wait what is going to happen next. =)
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You should definately continue this . It is an interesting idea and it was fun to read. There were a couple of spelling errors , but it didn't distract me from the story. Hurry with the next chapter please.
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September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like your story very much. Just work on the grammer and spelling, and mabye add spaces between the paragraphs. Good job and keep going (Smiles)