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for Power of the Sparrow

by hellborne

person Apollo
schedule September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
--giggles evilly-- Well, you did say you wanted reviews in turn for posting chapter 18, no? I gave you reviews!

Ah well, on to the real review....

First off, I read the entire thing all in one sitting - Not a first for me, but it does take a good story for me to do so...Then again I did have the day off...Nah, it's cause it was a good story.

I adore the way you wrote the BDSM parts, very interesting. They are some of the better scenes I've seen written here on AFF. I'll admit that the discription in some could have been a little better so as to better create the scene in my mind...But then again, I've always been a big one on visualizations.

The way that Jack responds differently to one Turner than the other, an interesting development. I can't say that I've seen, IRL alot of instances where someone who enjoys pain as much as Jack does responds just as passionatly to the softer side of things. One thing that did surprise me was Jack being the bottom, I have always seen him as a top, but you did an excellent job of setting why he was.

Now, as to the Pearl, that an interesting turn honestly, her being able to visit like that. I can't say I enjoyed the het part, but it was an interesting development.

Now here's my question...HOW MANY MORE TIMES ARE YE GONNA KILL JACK? or try to kill him? I swear you are going to give me a heart attack with how you are going on.

Now a rant....HOW could you have cut off his hand???? THAT was evil! How's he suppose to captain a ship and sail it correctly? And even more importantly, how's he gonna fully pleasure Jack? I mean the one hand on manhood, a finger probing his insides....Think about ALL the pleasure our boi's are going to miss because of what you did? And what about a hand to pleasure Jack and another to hold his hip to steady himself as he pounds into Jack? HUH? Huh?? did you think of THAT? Well...I'm waiting............

^.^
person Jenny
schedule August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved it, loved it...please keep updating..loved Pearl love triangle too what a great idea...Thank you!
person aCharmedOne
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting story. Have to read some more chapters. but thougt i write a review now.

bye aCharmedOne
person aCharmedOne
schedule August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh you evil evi evil thing, how can you write such a cliffhanger? That is so mean!!!!

Update PLAESEEEEEE!!!! and fast.... lest I die of anticipation.

Bye aCharmedOne
person Aleerah
schedule July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YOU CAN NOT UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCE KILL JACK SPARROW! Tht would mean tht Pearl would get wht she wants and poor Will would be all alone.
person Stardust
schedule May 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Just came upon this story and read all of it (thus far) in a single sitting. The story is highly enjoyable and well written and I can't wait to read more. This is a wonderful contribution to the fandom.
person sallie
schedule April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
"So, will Jack go with Pearl? Or stay with Will? And what of Bill? Heck, do I know what I'm doing?!"

You know what your doing. I'll give you that much.
But how's your next chapter?



need SLAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSHHHHH!!
person littlebird
schedule April 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hopefully they are still in the dark, so that Jack will come to life again. Well, otherwise he'd have had a fitting and enjoyable death.
person sallie
schedule April 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!
You updated!
Great chapter. I love it to pieces.
What happened to Jack?
Has Billl struck again?
What will the Black Pearl come to?
person Rose_Petal
schedule April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More please more violince I love the Jack Bill torture sences. So please up date real soon.

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