rate_review Reviews

I love this. Hey, I'm the one that reminded you to put the last chapter to "Secrets" up at FF.net. And, I think that AFF would benefit from that story, because, a, there is a plot and b, you can put the naught parts up too. But alos, the Secret Window fandom has nothing but SHIT and I love your stoy.

This maybe the first slash you ever wrote but let' hope it wasn't the last! Did you ever write more? And if so, where are they? This was a lovely lovely story with a really awesome twist at the end. I loved the line about Sands getting to be the Mariachi next time. :-) Bravo

Very, very nice! The twist at the end - too marvy. And I love this line:

"Just remember the next time we play this game, it's my turn to be El Mariachi."

Hope you arell wll writing! Ever been here? www.livejournal.com/community/agentsands

Never enough fic.

Ohhh, it was so happily muat tat the end. Just...Awww. And so sexy, liquid, delicious. I love it.

The beginning is a little rough. Abrupt endings of speech/ interruptions should be accented with a hyphen: "Can I talk now? Wha-" Be careful of the verb tenses, make sure you stay in either past or present tense. The middle of the story is fabulous, and the // for the Mariachi's speech adds to it. Creative. I liked. The ending gets a little rough, also. Sands slips out of character just a tad. Otherwise, characzatization is good and the chemistry between the two is well-presented.

I really liked this, and with a little more tweaking, it would be near perfect. One of the best OUATIM fics I've read. And I'd love to see more. :)

Beautiful, truly beautiful. Keep on writing, slash or whatever you like. You are very good in what you put down on paper.

Very good. Very hot, and fantastic mental pictures... Great first slash fic!

Thanx for posting it..
It's really incredible...
Sad, it's tnly nly one OUTIc.. c.. I haveh't foun any other yet.. Hope there'll be some... Hope you'll write more.. :)

Yeay!
I've been looking everywhere for some OUATIM slash fics, this is the first I've found that's graphic in a way!
THANK YOU!
This was really great and I thought you got the who thing just right.
Congratulations and Well done

Hooray, you posted! I'm so glad you did. I think I've already said what needs to be said on this, but I'll say again how much I love it. I love the mix of darkness and playfulness. And I adore that line, "Next time it's my turn to be El Mariachi." Thanks so much for sharing this with us all.