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  • From obrienrose on March 21, 2008
    You have done a very, very sweet dirty story. Just a word more: BARBOSSA. Please!
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 25, 2006
    His lover has got to be.... DAVY JONES!!!!
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  • From ANON - Marjon on July 23, 2004
    WOW..hot, brilliant..great written!
    MORE PLEASE!
    I think, i KNOW for shure it's Barbossa, it's his style..his raw sensual teasing ravashing style LOL.
    Can't wait for the next chapter!
    I'm a fan, great stories you write! :)
    Greetings from Holland.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 05, 2004
    Barbossa? No, please. Don't. Sob

    No Barbossa. I hope it'll be Will, or Will's dad.

    just out of curiousity. Who do you think that person is?

    YYY

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  • From ANON - Riki on March 01, 2004
    I think it is Will AND Bootstrap...? And this is definetly a nightmare. I believe that Jack is afraid that he has same 'kind of' feelings towards Will than he had to Bootstrap, am I right?
    ...Maybe you should continue, huh?
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  • From ANON - Alisan on February 03, 2004
    Ponder...

    Will?; definitely a worthwhile pairing. I can agree that the boy might have a playful manner but while seeming the 'adventurous' type ( oh go ahead, take the pun) he's still proper and I hardly think young Turner could reduce Sparrow ( *Captain* o' course) to begging. ( The other way around, yeah. Probably)

    But, what about the *other* Turner? Bootstrap!, it's interesting and rarely done...and really, if that happened 'back when'...then Jack would be substituting one Turner for another..which is a little 'eh.' for lack of better term. Gah..who could it be!, I can't come to an answer! ....'right then. Iffin' I have t'come to a guess. Sticking with the latter. Bootstrap. Makes things interesting =p
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  • From ANON - yea on January 29, 2004
    It´s definitely bootstrap:). I don´t know why but...
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  • From ANON - Mercurial on January 21, 2004
    I think Jack has a little secret... and it encompasses far too many to name.

    Will/Bootstrap = Loved as one and the same?

    Anticipating an update,
    ~ Jenna.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 19, 2004
    i have no idea just it better not be Will maybe norri guy hmmmm i dont no
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  • From ANON - Jessie Seagull on January 19, 2004
    Although I don't actually think it's Norrington, it would be very cool if it was. Something about Jack lusting after the man who is supposed to be his nemisis is just neat.
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  • From Yakkorat on January 18, 2004
    Okay, little corrections first.
    "making Jack writh" -- "writhe"
    "twisting his hips only to recieve a sharp" -- "receive"
    "caused his arousel to increase" -- "arousal"
    "Damn you, move!" He growled" -- "Damn you, move!" he growled
    "Gods teeth, man!" -- "God's"
    "Anything, please!" He sobbed." -- "Anything, please!" he sobbed.
    "Please, let me come!" He sobbed" -- "Please, let me come!" he sobbed. (I also wouldn't have used "sobbed" again so close to the first time.)
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    These were all itty bitty errors, but if you'd like me to proofread in the future, all you have to do is ask. :)
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    I liked thightight from the first line. "Strong, sure hands" starts it all off. You're already painting the picture of a perfect lover.
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    "Jack cursed as the other slapped his hand away." -- It's so playful. I love it.
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    "What are you waiting for? Damn you, move!" -- Every single line of dialogue in this whole piece is just wonderful, and all for different reasons. This one establishes 's 's state of mind, that he's not under duress, that he's also playful. There's a banter between these two.
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    "Beg me. Tell me what you want." -- It was at this point when I began to hold my breath. I didn't KNOW right away that I was holding my breath... but I was.
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    "Gods teeth, man! Please! Just do it, please!" -- I love the "God's teeth." It's such a great curse for Jack. Nice choice. It keeps him in character.
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    "Tell me, Jack. Say the words." -- *leaning forward...* Trying to figure out who would have such an easy way with Jack and yet demand this of him.
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    "Fuck me! Please! Anything, please!" -- I have a constant problem with the term "Fuck" being used in the 1680s (In case you don't know, the film has to take place somewhere between 1678 and 1692. I can give you the historical reasoning behind that if you'd like.). It makes me cringe every time I read it. But I also have nothing better to offer, so I pretty much have to grin and bear it.
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    "He was rewarded with swift, hard thrusting, his lover kissing him again" -- It was at this p tha that I realized that I'd been holding my breatnce nce the words "Beg me." I started breathing again. Panting is more like it. You have a gift for using dialogue to build tension.
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    Very hard to say who it might have been. My first inclination would have been Will. Will might have teased him with the whole slapping his hand away and slapping his hip, and remaining still just to antagonize him, but I cansee see him reducing Jack to begging, not for any reason. So... scratch the idea of Will. But when looking at the other characters you've suggested it always comes back to that begging. Who *would* make Jack beg? Of the names you listed, only Barbossa. But I can't see Barbossa having that kind of easy candor, that teasing manner with him. So... I'm going to have to guen orn original character. One idea (to which I can not claim credit) is that possibly this was a part of his "bartering" passage off that little island Barbossa left him on. It was suggested in another fic I read (though don't ask me which) that since Jack had nothing left to barter with, he may have bartered himself. The dream could be with the captain of the rum runners' ship.
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    So who did YOU think it was?
    Love,
    Julie-Rae

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  • From ANON - Willow on September 30, 2003
    *grin* Oh it's Will. And a dream. And... yeah. No dream with Will could be a night,are. ^_^ Unless he dies... that would be sad..
    Stop rambling! Great stuff, 'ere.

    Peace,
    Willow
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  • From ANON - Kari on August 11, 2003
    i hope it's will... *knaws nervously on her thumb*
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  • From ANON - SanelyChallenged on August 11, 2003
    I think it was Norrington. Can i have a cookie?
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  • From Veritas on August 09, 2003
    OH MY GOD, that was HOT. *fans self* I loved this! Jack begging for it.... yummm.....
    Who do I think it is? Hmm..... prehaps Bootstrap? I'm DYING to find out!! *waitsatieatiently for next chapter*
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