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Reviews for Fear Not

By : websurffer
  • From george4bob2 on June 21, 2010
    why wasnt the real story like this one
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  • From on August 01, 2009
    Kawaii means 'cute' Kowaii means 'scary'
    ("Aren't you cute of me?" .......??)

    Very good otherwise, though!
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  • From Anata on October 09, 2007
    Not bad. A bit out of character, but overall not bad. I think the end was rather abrupt, and would definitely be far satisfying if you filled it out with a bit more detail.
    I'm not quite sure why it was there (a beta? I've noticed that they like to do that), but the inclusion of "~Yaoiomgsohotiloveyaoiyum~" was highly distracting. I suggest doing without it. In addition, statements such as "At some point they had both lost their pants" are more comedic than descriptive.

    As a side note to both you and the person who reviewed before me: kawaii (two "i"s at the end) is, indeed, cute/adorable. Kowai (one "i" at the end) is scary/frightening or scared/frightened. For this, I would have said "kowakunai?" (lit: you're not frightened?) or "kowakune?" (a more masculine way of saying "kowakunai?").

    I hope you decide to come back and rewrite this at some point; I would definitely love to see what you can do with this piece!
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  • From Nanashigurl01 on July 25, 2007
    Hey, really good. Just one mistake, Kawaii means cute, Kowaii means afraid, scary.
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