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Reviews for Phoenix Song

By : PirateNatasha
  • From ANON - brooke on September 09, 2006
    e mail me when you have more it's super good can't wait
    to see what happens next!!!
    10/10
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 19, 2006
    You have a Mary-Sue. Sorry, but that's what she is. It's an especially pitiable case because your grammar, spelling, and punctuation are pretty decent (although your tense could use some work). The plot's an old one, but I hope you do something a little more original. We're only on the second chapter, after all.




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  • From ANON - Julianna on August 02, 2006
    Loved it! Loved it! Loved it! Have I mentioned how much I love this story?! lmao like I can't even described what's made me fall in love with this story! Anyways, that bit at the end of chapter 2 BETTER be CONTINUED FULLY in chapter 3!!!

    XOX J
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  • From ANON - anna on August 01, 2006
    you've got a very interesting plot going on. just have to "keep a sharp eye" on which tense you're using. And maybe do a little transition when you're switching between first person and third. Again I like the plot there's a lot that can be done with the story that you've set up and the background you've given your star character.

    yours truly,
    anna
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  • From ANON - Lorax on July 30, 2006
    The plot's intriguing, but beware run-on sentences and redundancies. Look forward to more.
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