Click Here!

  • 1

Reviews for The Lamontra massacre

By : RosesBlack
  • From Amonte on December 19, 2005
    Didn't seem out of character for Baby at all. By the way you nailed spaulding in the first chapter. Let's see.. about that summary...

    The road to fame can be long and hard, but none of them were expecting the detour through Hell's half acre. Now stranded, a young woman faced with incredible odds as the infamous family indangers an unborn victim.

    Not the best in the world, but I'm sure you can tweek it to your liking. Well I had fun reading your 3 chapters so far, keep'm come'n!
    Report Review

  • From Amonte on December 19, 2005
    nice twist there with the pregnant girl. question though, could you maybe give an age indicator? Just describe more I guess, love how you keep them short and to the point.
    Report Review

  • From Amonte on December 19, 2005
    reframe from arguing should be "refrain from arguing" -just an fyi
    I noticed your comment about the bad summary, and I intend on reading your story and writing one out for you. -If that's ok.

    Nice start, I like'm short and sweet. Good edge on the band trying their luck at survival here, I'll read more.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Candy on November 04, 2005
    Some typos here and there, but other than that...this is pretty cool. It has really good plot, too. I want more. >_>
    Report Review

  • 1
T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!