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Reviews for False Dawn

By : Chriscent
  • From ANON - SJ on May 05, 2014
    i just loved this story!!! finally a good finished Riddick story! i teared up at the end, not gonna lie. great story. just loved it, cudnt stop reading it. i almost didnt read it bc it didnt say complete in the description, but it was, and im so glad i did! got soo many feels through the story.

    i hope u write more!!!!

    take care
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  • From on September 05, 2007
    I love this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1111 CAN I GET A SEQUAL???????????

    Kia
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  • From on September 04, 2007
    I really like this story.... so far.

    Kia
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  • From ANON - Jadeite on November 18, 2006
    I LOVE YOU! *Smooches your feet* Oh Good Lordy this was Awesome! I love the ending it was so sweet but still fit. Was it the end? Wheee!
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  • From ANON - Dee on November 17, 2006
    Awww, that was awesome! Beautiful ending. :)

    I loved how you progressed Chip into this sort of family-type thing. Jack, Riddick, Aiden, Chip and Trow; they were almost like a family. I really loved that.

    Loved the whole exposure thing and especially the declaration of Riddick as a free man. :) Yay for Riddick!

    The long lost mother was also a nice touch though I think the reunion needed a bit more conflict on Riddick's part. He's the type that wouldn't just make it easy for everyone just because they're his family. They'd need to accept him as himself. In the end he might give in realizing that he doesn't need to run anymore but he'd still be a little stubborn about it.

    I also see him as the type that would see a bit of sick humor in the whole situation... Maybe the part where his sisters are afraid of him. o_O

    The ending also made me smile and surprisingly it was the "baby" part that made me beieve that it was really Riddick saying "I love you" to Jack. I wonder if that's how Jack felt.

    Anyway, I loved it, all of it, and I'm happy that you've finally finished it. Thanks a bunch for the great read. ;) It's been awesome. I hope to see some other stuff from you. :)

    Ta ta! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Eryn on November 17, 2006
    wow- i never thought Riddick would say those three words. This was an incredible story, and what an ending! I must say though, I'm sorry it's over, it's been one of my favorites on this site.
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  • From ANON - Dee on November 15, 2006
    Wow. I don't know how to say this without sounding like a dork but when you replied back to me in your last chapter I just felt warm and fuzzy. :o) I do have to say that that was the first time anyone's ever taken the time to write a personalized response to my reviews.

    I feel special. :)

    With Treacherous, I don't think it would be my thing. When it comes to Pitch Black I can't see anyone else beside Riddick but Jack. I'll try to check it out though to tell you what I think about your characterization of Riddick.

    With VinXperience, I think I've been there though when I'm looking for good Diesel stories I tend to check at Art of Vin Diesel. It's not good on updates but it has a lot of great stories. Ardath Rekha (An amazing authoress!) has a lot of great stories posted there. Mostly for Pitch Black, though there is this other story by a different author called En Verano. That's for the Fast and the Furious. It's really awesome.

    Anyway, about this last chapter, I absolutely loved the poopy diaper part. That was a great touch. I just hope someone changes his diaper in the next chapter. It would be a shame if he ended up getting diaper rash... whatever that is... o_O

    Don't worry, I'm as inexperienced as you when it comes to how kids and babies act. Usually I just try and keep away from them. They're kind of a bit scary. I'm also pretty bad at estimating their age. That can get a bit funny at times but mostly it's a bit sad.

    With the zombie-type stuff, I loved your explanation. It kind of reminds me of an idea I have for an X-men fanfic, only it involves a character's blood instead of a virus. It's also not a human but a rabbit that is the zombie... o_O

    The part about the virus causing them to come back to life when they die is kind of the same, though, in that the blood that's already in the, er... bunny's system causes it's cells to reanimate.

    Yeah... I really have an unnatural obssession with zombies. Sometimes I scare myself. I even have a zombie survival guide website in my favorites. I seriously do need help...

    Anyway, I love this chapter. I can't wait until the next (And final!) chapter is up. You've done a great job. Even if your writing has matured since then I still think this is a great story and I'm glad that you've put it up. Afterall, if this is great now just think of what else you could write. ;)

    If you need any help or any suggestions feel free to contact me. I could even do some beta-ing. I'm good at catching grammatical errors. Plus I have a lot of free time. (What with my lack of life and all. Shh, don't tell anyone I'm a zombie. ^_~) I would love to hear from you again to see what else you come up with. :)
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  • From ANON - Dee on November 15, 2006
    Is Jack going to turn into a zombie now that she's been bitten. (I'm gonna refer to it as a zombie. Sorry if that's not what it it.) She could get him back for biting her. ^_~

    Great update, by the way. I do feel like Riddick was a bit too upfront when he asked her about the bite. I'm thinking he probably suspected that he ate it. Maybe a bit of flesh was stuck in his teeth... o_O

    Also the "baby" talk, even though it's been mentioned, was a bit heavy in this chapter.

    Anyway, totally awesome chapter. I can't wait until the next one. :)
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  • From ANON - Dee on November 12, 2006
    He's alive and back to normal, I just know it!

    Those key-hole thingies are just creepy. I hope you'll explain them in the next chapter.

    Awesome update! ;)
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  • From ANON - Dee on November 08, 2006
    It just so happens that I love zombies. (that is what Riddick is, right?)

    Anyway, I know it probably wasn't the reaction you were looking for but I just couldn't help finding the image of Riddick as a zombie amusing. Or at least my image of Riddick as a zombie...

    It's probably just me.

    If he is a zombie I hope you bring him back to life or something. It seems to me as if the whole thing would just fall apart if Riddick were to die. He was the main character in the movie afterall. I know Jack's a strong person and the main focus for this story but Riddick is a very important factor for her.

    It just seems cruel to me, though that could be because I think he's super awesome...

    Anyway, keep up the good work. It's good to hear from you again. :)
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  • From ANON - Ash on November 07, 2006
    Oh my God!!! Riddick's a fucking ZOMBIE!!! What the hell?!?
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  • From ANON - Brandi on November 05, 2006
    Wow... this story is damn good. Can't wait to read more. It reminds me a little of The Apprentice, by Ardath Rehka. Sounds like you'd probably really like that one. Can you send me an email when you update?
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  • From ANON - Ash on September 14, 2006
    This is such an awesome story, I absoulutely love it! I can't wait for the next update. I hope you get the chance to post a new chapter soon. ^_^
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  • From ANON - Doomsday on August 05, 2006
    I love this story! Thanks a bunch for writing it. I hope you're able to update more often now that the site's up and running. It was great how you would always post a new chapter every three days. It was kind of refreshing to have an author that was reliable.
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  • From ANON - tracy on July 12, 2006
    amazing. more more more. a little baby riddick. oh and how is riddick going to take the fact that trow spend monthes trying to seduce our jackie?
    stand back CI they come to get their baby back.

    i love the story and cant ait for the next chapter.

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