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Reviews for BAHIYYA 1853

By : Debs
  • From ANON - jane on November 30, -0001
    I enjoyed reading your story -- thanks for posting it. :)

    I do agree with some of the earlier comments, particularly about the girl's frame of mind. I got distracted from the scene because I kept wondering how she could possibly be *that* self-assure
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  • From ANON - BRP on November 30, -0001
    I laugh at reviewers that flame works in progress, don't have the balls to provide their names, don't write stories themselves, nor obviously ever get laid.
    Ironically, I do appreciate some of their comments.
    =LOL=


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  • From ANON - Blackrosephantom on November 30, -0001
    For the record,
    I wasn't poking fun at fave writers whom were kind enough to provide advise before me, in regards to this story.
    Or, at other writers whom also provide writing tips and express their opinions in polite, pleasant ways.

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  • From ANON - Blackrosephantom on November 30, -0001
    =LOL=
    I respect the opinions of favorite writers because I learn so much from them. I partially agree with them, including the wise Carpathian.
    Hear their advice, apply some or all of it, hold true to your beliefs, and keep on developing this promisin
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  • From ANON - Carpathian on November 30, -0001
    While BRP is right with your Erik should be your Erik - I think PMEL's points can only improve your writing. The ONLY one who knew how Erik really was is Leroux since he created him. But your story is rushed and the girl is way out of character for a hist
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  • From ANON - Blackrosephantom on November 30, -0001
    Your story is off to a great start.
    The heroine, Bahiya, is gentle, romantic, humble, compassionate, non-judgemental, and quietly takes charge.
    She shall be good for Erik. Please correct your grammar errors, such as "imagid." It is spelled "imagined."
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  • From ANON - Blackrosephantom on November 30, -0001
    Greetings Ms. Debs,
    Before I read your tale, I have something to say.
    1) I respect the opinions of the first two reviewers, since they are wonderful, talented writers.
    2) Although I'm a decent, humble writer still learning to be as good as they, I o
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  • From ANON - PhantomMiddleEarthLover on November 30, -0001
    You asked for constructive criticism so here it is. This is NOT a flame by any means. Your writing is good - punctuation, grammer, etc., however the story itself is VERY rushed. A couple of points then. Jenny_Wren is correct, unless you put a disclaimer o
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  • From Josephine1881 on November 30, -0001
    It is an interesting and well-written story. The only major complaint I have is Erik calling "Oh God!" and "Sweet Jesus!". He wouldn´t do that. He stopped believing in God when Father Mansard told him that his dog´s soul´wouldn´t go to Heaven. So it´
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  • From ANON - BRP on November 30, -0001
    Greetings,
    This is such a splendid Phantasy. Look forward to reading more of your works.


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  • From PhantomMiddleEarthLover on November 30, -0001
    *bows* Thank you for your lovely dedication, my dear :) Glad to see it up where everyone can enjoy it. Your obedient servant, PMEL
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  • From ANON - Kryss LaBryn on November 30, -0001
    Oooohh... Yum!

    Enjoyed it very much, thank you! I prefer Gaston Leroux's Erik myself (with Michael Crawford's take a close second!) but it's always fun to read other takes on him too.

    (Wasn't Phantom a good book?)

    One suggestion I would make
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