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Reviews for Innocence: Union

By : PrincessLemon
  • From KiraJenLove on December 01, 2008
    Princess Lemon - since your current e-mail address doesn't work, and your homepage link doesn't work, I wanted to leave a message for you here. I just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed your "Innocence:Union" story so much, that it inspired me to write a "morning-after" vignette based on your story! (Just one page.) Drop me an e-mail and I'll send you a copy; let me know what you think! I will not post the vignette (unless you think I should), but maybe it will inspire you to finish "Innocence:Jen" and "Innocence:Kira". Hope you write soon!
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  • From KiraJenLove on August 27, 2008
    Wow, that is the best Gelfling sex I've ever read! I hope they get pregnant and have lots of Gelfling babies! I'd love to read the two upcoming ideas you have. Only one thing, though - your story is filled with misspellings and typos. If you like, I would be happy to re-write your story fixing all the errors for you. This will make the reading flow much more smoothly.
    Oh, and one more thing - when you were describing Jen and Kira's bodies, I think you left out two important things. For one, it is highly likely that Jen is uncircumcised. You should probably make note of this when Kira is going down on him. Secondly, where are Kira's wings? No mention was made even once of them, and yet those would be rather prominent during Gelfling lovemaking. In fact, in Henson's notes about Gelflings, it is said that Gelflings must use a female-on-top position (or doggie-style) to prevent damaging the wings. It also says that the female does a "mating dance" for the male using her wings, which makes him putty in her hands. Just thought I'd give you some background information on Gelfling biology and culture.
    I have also written Jen/Kira "shipper" stories involving sex for www.fanfiction.net, but I had to tone them down a bit, because they don't do "porno" there.
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  • From ANON - Sailor Aurora on September 16, 2004
    Awww, how sweet... thier first time together. ^_^

    now this is something I'd enjoy thly..ly... please do write some more. ^_~
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