Click Here!

Reviews for Breathe

By : elfchic02
  • From on August 18, 2003
    >>To my silent lurkers: review! I really wanna hear your thoughts on this!!!! :-P
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Heart of Darkness on August 18, 2003
    Heh, I saw this story on fanfiction.net, but you wouldn't except an anonymous reviewer. Please continue your story I am enjoying it.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - ShinigamiGirl on August 17, 2003
    U r pure evil!!!!!!! Will AND Jack better live!!!!!!! i hope u continue this soon! Can't wait till you do!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - dark vampire on August 17, 2003
    ahh!! evil!! hurry! this is really exciting!! we want more more more!! please please!! *kisses* thank you so much!! this is awesome... though i wish it were slash.... but i can deal... *sigh* *smirk* *more kisses* thanx again!!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Alkvingiel on August 17, 2003
    Grrrrr....*unseaths sword quickly and points it at ur heart* HOW COULD U LEAVE IT THERE!!!!!!! THERE IS NO WAY JACK WILL LET WILL DIE!!!! U CAN'T KILL JACK!!!! I WILL KILL U IF U DO!!!! DON'T EVEN FREAKING THINK ABOUT IT!!! update soon please...grrrr...thank u.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Almasy on August 16, 2003
    So far so good. Keep going. Don't leave us hangin! ~waits~ Good story idea...
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Sparx on August 16, 2003
    If you kill Will I will hunt you down and haunt you til the end of your days!!!!!

    If you kill Jack I will hunt you down and haunt you til the end of your days!!!!!
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Pyper on August 16, 2003
    A logical problem: If Will was not breathing when Jack grabbed him, he would never survive the struggle to the island. How long do you imagine it takes Jack to get to shore? Ten, twenty minutes? As humans cannot survive without breathing for more than five minutes, Will would be dead by the time they got to land.

    The solution: Sometimes when people lose unconsciousness underwater, they reflexively do not breathe. This could have happened to Will, allowing him to survive until Jack pulled him above water, where he would begin breathing again.

    Also, watch your use of tense. Sometimes you switch into present, when you are telling the story in the past. Otherwise, I'm interested in what direction you are taking this story.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - D on August 16, 2003
    I'm really enjoying your story so far. I love the cliffhangers, but I hate them, so I guess just keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to reading more cuz there aren't really very many PotC stories out there yet and this is one of the best!!

    D
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Smiigel on August 16, 2003
    EVIL! You are an evil little troll!

    You rule!

    Hahaha. Cliffhangers are lotsa fun to write, ain't they? I love to employ their evilness. Torturing both the characters and the audience is fun. Keep it up! (I like torture. I'm a nasty little masochist... although I do dabble in the sadism from time to time. Not THAT way, mind you. *gasp* I can't believe you even thought that! You perverted little... how dare you think such naughty, naughty thoughts!) >:)
    Report Review

  • From ANON - ressress Goku on August 15, 2003
    OMG, your evil!!! ^_^ What a cliffy! You'd better update fast or I'm gonna pull my hair out! Awesome job with this, I'm really enjoying it. I just know my sexy Jack Sparrow (Captain) is going to save the day, right? If poor Will dies maybe Jack can go 'comfort' Elizabeth. Somebody's gonna have to AND help her take revenge, savvy?
    *boy is that an ever popular word* lol Can't wait for the next chapie...^_^
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Alyssa on August 15, 2003
    I want both Jack and Will to live. And if they do there is that island.(Big shove) Sorry I like the two of them together. They make a cute couple. Not that I would tell Jack that of course.
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Cait on August 15, 2003
    NOOOOOOOO! Don't let either of them die. (But if one must die, make it Jack)
    Thanks for the Orlando Clone, I will take great pleasure in him. hehehe
    I understand what its like to work at night and be busy 24/7 so take your time, but upgrade asap.
    TTYL! :)
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Cait on August 12, 2003
    Heyy I'm backk. Dont worry i won't let my heart be troubled......much lol I liked the 3rd chapter but I'm curious to noe if/when Will shall reach the surface. Please let him reach it!
    Upgrade asap, can't wait for it! ttyl
    Report Review

  • From ANON - Sparx on August 11, 2003
    Jack went to save him! I know it! I know he did!!! Or at least I hope he did lol. Sigh. Poor Will. Continue soon!
    Report Review

T.O.S. | Content Guidelines | DMCA Info | F.A.Q. | Facebook | Tumblr | Abuse | Support | Contact | Donate

Click Here!