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By : Aithilin

From ANON - Sandrine Black on July 25, 2003
For the fourth time you saw it??? I'm so jealous. I got all dressed and what not to go see it again, but my mom wouldn't drive me. 'It's not safe to go see a movie alone'. HA! Makes me regret deciding to wait to get my drivers license... (waiting until I'm 18, which is in about a month) So today I'm a very pissed off gal, and you've made the day a lil'more cheery with this fic. Thank you! Can't wait to hear Will's tale of getting free of the Interceptor. Seeing how I've only seen the movie once, I can't remember how he did it in the movie. Grr... ANYWAYS! Also, that AU that your talking about sound /super/ good. I really hope you decide to write about it, cause I would soooo read it! Looking forward to more of your fic, keep up the FABULOUS work!!

Obsessed about seeing the movie again,
Sandrine
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From ANON - Nita on July 25, 2003
Evil evil writer! -sucks lolli-

You...you...I can't believe you did that to Anamaria! Wait, yes I can. it's Captain Jack Sparrow. Hee hee, you brilliant thinker. He got Anamaria the ultimate revenge, I just can't wait to see what she'll do it retaliation, heh he...

I think I pity Jack now.

Will, on the other hand, was moire like....'rewarded' for his 'misdeeds' with 'punishment'. hey, I just like doing 'this'.

Now, if you don't mind me, I have to go make a mental picture of our favorite boys while hoping Cotton doesn't find a dead parrot in his bunk tommorrow
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From ANON - Madoushi Clef on July 25, 2003
Wow. I love you're plot. (Though I can't see where it'll go after they've met up, but somethin's gotta happen.) I love the parrot, his singing, really. The best way for Will to get over it is to just join in. Afterall, it's been declared that Will has a lovely singing voice.
I like your portrayal of Elizabeth. I kept hoping she bites it in the movie so Will and Jack could run off together and have pirate adventures, but this is good too. ^_^ I like her slapping Bootstrap. In fact, I like her in your story in general. She got a backbone, and isn't afraid to use it when necessary.
I love the way your Jack thinks. I love how he was seduced by memories of Bootstrap and Will's own 'stupidity'. The only thing I'd change is his speech. It needs ta be more piratey, mate. Ne'er have I heard Jack use such proper English. Ye need ta tweek it jus' a bit, luv. But other than that, yer Jack's a riot. His revenge is perfect on Ana. I say, 'poor will', but I think he'll enjoy himself.
Speaking of Will. Sometimes I think he's a bit... fluffly, for a man and blacksmith, but it goes so nicely against Jack I'd have a hard time thinking of a way to change his demeanor without affecting the development of their relationship. Thus I forgive the slightly submissive/girly Will. And how dare you stab him! Nearly gave me a heart-attack at the thought of you killing him off. One would think that a swordsman of his caliber would keep his weapon out until all the captives are under lock and key. A thrown dagger embedding itself in the stomache do't m't make for an easy recovery, if at all. Puncture the intestines and you're done for. *sniffel* Does this have a happy ending? Or is this going to be realistic and they all get hanged?
Moving right along, love the crew, can't believe Will gave Jack that list. Don't wanna know how he got it. Wow at the slight mutiny pending with the crew. We aren't going through that again, are we? Even Bootstrap said the reward money wasn't enough. But maybe Jack'll sail on the Pacific? That's a different ocean entirely, with lots of other cultures and treasure to be found...?
Anywho, Scribo Celeritis! Well, ye write fast enough, just... more chapters, please? And a wedding? I love weddings, drinks all around!
This review has been long enough, must go to work. Later~!
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From ANON - Mel on July 25, 2003
Leaves a bit to the imagination, eh? Always a good thing ^_^

Excellent all around. (I like to repeat myself constantly, apparently.)

Always a joy when you update! ^_^V
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From ANON - Jade on July 25, 2003
Wonderful! I luv this story!
Very Original, Who is gunna capture W & J?
I think it would be interesting if you ended the
story in a way no one would suspect, like Bootstrap
shooting at Jack & Will taking the bullet,
Of course then Jack kills Bootstrap &
Gets captured/trialed by Norrington
and almost hung... BUT
Elizabeth saves him w/ Anamarie
then Jack goes off into the sunset
missing Will, but holding him on a
pedestal, forever comparing his
Lovers to Will... *sigh*
OR jack gets hanged, and dies w/
his last thoughts of Will.
Ok, as you can see, I have tons
of plot bunnies but NO writing
talent that doesnt go w/ poetry!
:( Well,
Off to bed!
Jade
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From ANON - Sandrine Black on July 25, 2003
Ooo, kinky there at the end. ^_^ Nice punishment by the way! I thought it was pretty funny myself. Poor annamarie (prob. spelt wrong!), having to deal with the parrot. I wonder if either one is gunna make it out the night alive? Hehehe... Looking foward to more of your fabulous work!

Sandrine
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From ANON - Datiye on July 25, 2003
Ooh, how evil! You were right, I like very much. But how is that supposed to teach Will the lesson Jack wants? If I were Will that would teach me to do that again and again and again......
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From ANON - Pookie on July 24, 2003
*laughs so hard she cries*

that was fabulous!

I think at some point, the crew might end up with roasted parrot for dinner!

oh! I did think of the other thing I wanted to comment on, it wasn't a question, anywho, I'm happy that Jack and WIll aren't trying to hide their relationship from the crew. Although I imagine on a boat... ship... thatld bld be hard to do anyways.

thanks again for updating so much!
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From ANON - QteCuttlfish on July 24, 2003
I'm really enjoying this fic. I love how you didn't completely destroy Norrington or Elizabeth's characters for the sake of plot, as some writers have already done. I really liked their characters in the movie, and I like your portrayal of them.

LOL...I really love Jack and Will's relationship. Jack's revenge for Will's game is going to be *very* interesting. ~_^ I wonder what you are going to do about Bootstrap, though. Are he and his son going to be reunited in the end? That particular part of the part seems to be heading for angst, indeed. But since I am a strange person who enjoys angst, 'tis quite all right. ^_^

I hope you update soon!
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From ANON - Thursday on July 24, 2003
awww no smut? oh well the story is great without it, but anyways how exactly did bootstrap meat jack, i hope they weren't in the same type of relationship that jack and will have cuz that's just weird... great story and am eagerly awaiting more
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From ANON - Nita on July 24, 2003
Actually, you had the perfect amopunt of parrot in this. Enogh so that he pisses off will and still isn't hated by the reviewers.

On the Norrington note, let us never speak of that again.

Me, i published me first ficcy here with my cousin. we wrote The Pirates Code together. Silly lil thing but it makes me happy.

Anamaria...gosh...how many times can I say how much I adore her? She is so wonderful the way you pull her off in that slight tom boyish, captains best friend, anti sexism woman. YOu kept Elizabeth all cool and Mr. Swan all doting fatherly. She's pretty savvy but he parrot is still the saviest. Yes, i think its a word, if noshrushrugs- creative liscence.

It's early when im typing so i haven't much tim but lemme say Elizabeths slap was so...utterly Elizabeth. You can tell she would want to hit someone unless she was really mad or they hit first. Bootstrap is on his way to being just as realistic as everyone one else.

Oh, and the crates of rum? Nice touch.

Love -sucks lolli-
Nita!
PS I'll try my best on ff.net, alright?
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From ANON - Mel on July 24, 2003
Leading to something is always good! ^_^V And thanks for getting Gibbs in there! ^_^! I'm not sure why I like him, I just do...

As always (and to be expected^_-) very fine work. Love how you write AnaMaria... think I said something akin to that last time, b sti still do. ^_^ Superb!

^_^V
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From ANON - Paige on July 24, 2003
Weee! I get mentioned!
Why chocolate chip only of course ;) maybe with a hint of cinnamon and milk! But only if you’re good.

So what’s the history with Jack and Bootstrap? All the teasing…I can’t take it ;)

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From ANON - Datiye on July 24, 2003
Hmm... What could they be planning? Well, I guess I'll have to wait until the next chapter 'cause you got me stumped. You definatly have me curious, but that's just signs of a really good story. I'm anxiously awaiting your next chapter. Have fun writing!
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From ANON - Sandrine Black on July 24, 2003
YAY! I'm so glad to see another chapter. I'm also glad that I made you smile, it's only fair afterall. Considering how much I grin, or at least get /lots/ of enjoyment out of this fic your writing. I'm sad that you're not continueing this at ff.net, but oh well. I understand how things are, and I'm appreciative that you're still writing this! Looking forward to the next chapter, can't wait to see what Jack's gunna do. Keep up the FANTASTIC , an, and sick jack the moneky on any evil reviews!

-Sandrine
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