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Reviews for Coming Along

By : Aithilin
  • From ANON - Nix on July 18, 2003
    Hi there!

    Just wanted to let you know how much I'm enjoying this fic. I've been playing around with a couple of ideas myself and am having a devilishly hard time getting Jack's "voice" right, so I'm really impressed that itome ome through so well in your work! And may I to tto that, *thank you* for not writing out accents and clipped speech. That always drives me batty.

    Favorite bits so far: I liked that you got Elizabeth out of the way without demonizing her. A lot of fics seem to have her running off with another guy (usually Norrington) and as much as I like the angst of her betraying Will, it does seem rather out of character. Also, at the beginning of Chapter 3, the bit about fixing Jack's problem. The hair, the clothes...//grins// In general, Jack's concern for Will. I like that he's protective. The first kiss! Of course. //smiles// Anamaria's "about damn time".

    Criticism: Nothing major, but you asked for more meaty reviews, so... I think Jack making Will his first mate straight off might have been moving a little fast. Wouldn't that create resentment among the more long standing crew? I'm interested to know if you had a plot-related reason for that (i.e., lessening the power difference between them.)

    Bits I'm *really* looking forward to: Will and Jack getting sweaty. //grins// The fireworks that are bound to fly when Bootstrap finds out just what Jack's relationship with Will is. Potentially, a reunion with Elizabeth to see what she thinks of Will's new love. Are you planning this? //hopefully// I understand if the story doesn't veer that way, but I'm one of those people who adore "reaction" scenes. //grins//

    And damn -- one of the notes at the bottom of on you your chapters just solved the major problem I was having with my one PotC plot bunny. Argh! I have two novels, and an epic fan fic already in the works. I can't start another one...but they're so pretty... See what you've done now? //grins//

    I look forward to the next installment!

    Nix
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  • From ANON - Mel on July 18, 2003
    Very nice again! I really like the interaction between Bootsrap and Jack.y'ry're friends... but not tooo friedly. Yeah, that made sense. -_- Oi! It's a rock but not too rocky! But you know what I mean? Tension; love that. And what's going to happen when Bootstrap learns of Jack/Will? ^_^V

    And the Jack/Will moments. Mm! Lovely.

    ...And AnaMarie. Very nice bit of comic relief there with that one. ^_^

    Your writting brilliance continues to amaze and awe me! ^_^V
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  • From on July 18, 2003
    Good chapter. I, of course, loved the brief interlude between Will and Jack. I hope Bill doesn't try to take Will away. That would be bad.
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  • From ANON - Nita on July 17, 2003
    You are so sweet! And I am seer girl! Is bootstrap going to be happy about the Will/Jack thing going on? SOme how I can picture the guy pointing a gun at Jack and screwing to kill him or castrate Jack if he hurts Will. Bootstrap, the very ghostly essence captured of him in the movie is perfect. You go girl

    I give that above profecy no. 2

    Your kisses is pulled off perfectly, Will got some action, go him!

    Just the whole Anamaria thing was absolutly wonderful, i can see her teasing him about it for ages. Hee hee

    Your Number 1 fan
    Nita!
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  • From ANON - SanelyChallenged on July 17, 2003
    You write on the yahoogroups piratefic board dont you? Me too. Experiment_no_666 at your service. Havent written anything of yet but this was a bloody well done story. I cant wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Finduilas on July 17, 2003
    Whee~! *huggles*
    That was a wonderful read. ^_^ (Espescially chapters 6and 7, by the way.) Please do continue, you've got some plot in there and slash; what could possibly be better? Well, besides some more slash, but that might just be me. ^_^;; Lovely writing. You'vetraytrayed the characters very well!

    Love,
    Finduilas
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  • From ANON - Cassandra on July 17, 2003
    This just ges better and better every day! I check for this story every morning, so I hope there'll be more tomorrow!
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  • From ANON - Mel on July 17, 2003
    Very nice; exceptional. ^_^ Love your portrayal of Bootstrap ^_^V Oi, it's early, else I'd make more intelligent comments. A very good read, in any case!
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  • From on July 17, 2003
    Good chapters. I liked the slash. I think you are doing a really good job with the personalities.
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  • From ANON - Geuna on July 17, 2003
    GAH!!! IT'S THE DAD!! HE'S ALIVE!!?!?!?!?

    Yove Gve GOT to update soon, good God! I can't wait!!!

    Geuna~
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  • From ANON - Datiye on July 17, 2003
    Oh god. Cliffhangers are so evil....
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  • From ANON - Insatiable on July 17, 2003
    Eeee! Bootstrap's here and I can just see the tension mounting, thickening the air. How's Jack going to deal with his new feelings for Will and his feelings for his long lost friend? Will Bootstrap kick Jack's arse for touching his son? How are Bootstrap and Will going to get along? Will Jack, Bootstrap and Will have a nummy threesome? Oh, the possibilities for endless angst and squick. Yum!!

    You lucky thing! I won't get to see POTC again until the weekend. I can't wait to see what you have in store for us.

    BTW I'm a bit surprised that Will would be OK with killing the most of the crew of the ships that they attack. Wouldn't that push at his morals a bit? Otherwise, everthing is wonderful. So far the best POTC I've read.

    =^.^= Aly
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  • From ANON - Pookie on July 16, 2003
    I love this story!

    almost as funny as the movie *bg*

    I especially love the bit at the beginning when Will said Elizabeth's corset drove her crazy, great stuff!

    I was reading it at work (at ff.net) and got weird looks while I was giggling, but it's so good!

    and you managed to throw in a bit of history! So I'm learning as I read! YAY!


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  • From ANON - miranda on July 16, 2003
    Hey did you stay to watch that last scene? After the credits at the end of the movie? The one with the monkey Jack taking a coin of the treasure? You could possibly weave that in somehow...I'm sure you're wonderous brilliance could find a way.
    How about Will making the Black Pearl a new type of cannons, much lighter, with a much longer range? A sort of secret weapon incase they ever need it. Just a thought.
    Please continue soon!
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  • From ANON - Chiri on July 16, 2003
    As for plot suggestion, hw about someone else taking an interest in Will? A Jealious Jack is alwas delicious! More! More!
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