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Reviews for Shattered

By : TarnishedArmour
  • From ANON - hawthorne on September 04, 2012
    awesome ... I cant wait for more!!!

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  • From ANON - hawthorne on August 21, 2012
    953 Rolls-Royce Silver Dawn Drophead Convertible... while an epically awesome car... doesnt have a back seat
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  • From ANON - jadedkyaria on August 14, 2012
    Please post more! Your writing is amazing. When I'm reading this I feel like it's really the second part of the movie. I can't wait for more.
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  • From StoryGirl on July 26, 2012
    I started this story a few hours ago and it sucked me right in. You really know how to weave an atmosphere for the reader that becomes rather addictive.

    HOWEVER, you lost me at the chapter in which the festival took place. I know the fun of fan fiction is to write the characters in any manner the author chooses but in my humble opinion, a truly good fan fiction makes you feel like you are still within the same universe the original story/movie created. I’m all for growing up the story for adult readers but there is a difference between maturing the story for a more adult audience and completely losing the feel of the original story altogether. Not all fan fiction writers or readers may agree with me, but hey like I said; its just my opinion.

    Shattered, while very provocative and enjoyable to read in parts, didn't really portray the world Jim Henson created in the movie. This confused me because you mentioned this story being an homage to Mr. Henson in your author's note. This story didn't at all have the feel of Jim Henson's original vision.

    For example, the goblins which Jareth is the king of, and are constantly around him in the movie, are hardly mentioned in this story at all. Instead, Shattered mostly talks of him ruling over normal people in a sort of midevil like kingdom that is hardly recognizable as the Labyrinth world of the movie. The whimsy and enchantment that are shown in the film is only briefly touched on in the beginning of Shattered, then it goes in a very different direction; one that seems nearly devoid of whimsy and enchantment altogether as the story goes on.

    Not to put too much of a fine point on it, but I personally think your portrayal of Sarah to be way off base. In the beginning she comes off as far too bookish, almost like a pseudo-intellectual that over thinks everything. Yes, two years were supposed to have passed but I don't see that character going that far off her original personality, even with the passing of time.

    Also, The part where Jareth brakes her spirit makes Sarah come off as just plain pathetic and more than a bit annoying. Seeing such a strong heroine being portrayed as nothing but a compliant little sex doll just doesn't jive with the character I grew up admiring. While I did admire and enjoy your general idea of the darker side of the labyrinth, it was just too much in my opinion.

    I will say that I did highly enjoy most of what I read up until the chapter that you lost me. You are a very talented writer and just because I didn’t enjoy all of Shattered doesn’t mean others won’t.
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  • From ANON - Cy like Sigh on July 20, 2012
    By far one of the BEST Labyrinth fanfics EVER.
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  • From Myna on July 19, 2012
    Beautiful begining! ..
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  • From ANON - Jane Hood on July 18, 2012
    Wonderful story just finished reading in one go. Hope there is more to come.
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  • From Eloradanin on July 06, 2012
    yay update! god I love this story can't wait for the next update ^_^
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  • From Vampiyaa on June 28, 2012
    WTF Jareth loves Sarah but is sleeping with Queen Mab?!?! EH?!!? DX is this an evil Jareth fic? so confuuusseedd!
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  • From AggressiveFilth on June 24, 2012
    This story is amazingly well written. I was pleasantly surprised when I began reading. Having read several Labyrinth-inspired stories over the past few weeks, I just expected another boring 'skip a paragraph' piece. The characters and dialogue flow quite well. The imagination and level of intricacy are admirable. It's obvious that a great deal of thought went in to this piece. I applaud your efforts and I must say that I demand more and anxiously look forward to it.
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  • From Eloradanin on June 20, 2012
    Love the story please update soon !!! ^_^
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  • From Davanyn on June 18, 2012
    oohh absolutely captivating! i cant wait for the next chapter!
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