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Reviews for Educating Sarah (the missing scene)

By : HachimansKitsune
  • From ANON - DaRKHellquin on May 06, 2013
    Up until now, I've been suprised though enjoyed The Ties That Bind Part 1 and 2. Though there were scenes where I felt the story was unfolding in a rather odd way, in so many was I couldn't relate to characters reactions to certain scenarios, the story was still wonderful, and enjoyable. Until I got to this. It was saddening, disheartening and completely unrealistic. When you've been violated, more than once in such a way, taking your power, causing pain, feeling so weak and defeated it is simply to far fetched to believe that simply because your master demands it of you, that you would so quickly, so trustingly, willingly give into the act again so quickly. In real life, and sadly speaking from experience, there would have been more than a brief moment of hesitation. Even with only viewing it as a dream after the use of the orb, it would have triggered anxiety, etc. Just as the scene of oral did. Her only giving in when it could be on her terms so that she could keep control, and find power in the act, in this there was no regaining of power over the fear. I was enjoying the story up until this point, but after this I simply can't bring myself to go any further, while I trudged through Sarah not only becoming submissive, but watching the essence of her in the form of her spiritedness being broken, and finding myself skeptical that even in there dom/sub relationship there would be no moment where sarah would have some form of power in or out of the bedroom, I kept on through the story, willing to bend my views, not every relationship is cookie cutter and there must be some somewhere where the submissive has no moments where they have atleast some little form of control. But this last straw broke the camels back. While I can't bring myself to read any more of the story, I do want to congratulate you on the telling of it up to this point. The writing was smooth, with excellent cadence and timing. Your words so discriptive that the imagery from the story will stick with me for some time. In a few simple words, your writing style kicks some major butt.
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  • From anamazami on September 21, 2012
    Oh God how I love this one... please tell me theres more and soon... i can't get enough of it ^_^
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  • From ANON - fierylioness on September 07, 2012
    Oh you evil wench~! Please, please please post more. I am thoroughly enamored of your writing, and how well you characterize Jareth, Sarah, and the machinations of the Fae courts. However, I understand the time-constraints the real world imposes on us. But... please... Don't leave your faithful (and lusty) readers hanging!!
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  • From ANON - Morgan la Fae on July 15, 2012
    So happy I finally read this chapter! Your writing always leaves me breathless. Please update soon!
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  • From CassiMac on June 06, 2012
    Awesome scene! I hope you transfer everything over before it gets removed. I will continue to follow you here if you do!
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  • From Shaery on June 05, 2012
    I'm so glad you finally updated. Last night I saw the messages that will restrict rather fanfiction.net fics I read, and reading your note I followed you here. When I finally start my blog updates will follow you there too. And I guarantee you will receive review every time I see you update. Because you deserve it and you are one of the best writers I've read fics. And I can assure that many because I spend every day several times a day to see if you go up more chapters.

    I have also thought about closing my unfinished fics because some of them are pretty raunchy and not want to have problems. The only problem is that they are in Spanish and I'm seeing that all fics that are posted on this page are in English. So maybe I wont use a translator and also step into English for you can read you too.

    Best regards,
    Shaery.
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