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Reviews for Perfect Enemy

By : BloodyHarliquin
  • From ANON - Anon on December 24, 2014
    I love this story so far and i hope you continue it
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  • From bloodravyn on February 23, 2011
    sexy, lol
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  • From DagdothFliesh on December 26, 2010
    Well, it was okay. The thing is, is that it doesn't really hold my attention. Atop of that, it's really awkward to read about demons and Yautja together. The predator genre doesn't particularly deal with medevil fantasy, so it's a turn off. One part you use the word "youkai" which by use is japanese for demon, and I understood that, but there really isn't a point to use that because the story doesn't deal with anything japanese. I would suggest rewriting it. Sorry, I'm just really picky when it comes to reading stories. To improve... I'd probably rewrite the main character as well, because she's very mary-sue. She instantly knows everything about where she is and why, and takes down full grown Yautja without blinking an eye. It would be more enjoyable if there was conflict beyond the fighting. I guess, that's all I have to say. I'm trying not to flame, and I hope you understand that.
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  • From bloodravyn on December 26, 2010
    i have one critism, spell check is needed here and there
    otherwise, i love it, already
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