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Reviews for Undertow

By : vanillalace
  • From Kytkattin on September 29, 2010
    I love it. Your writing style is amazing! I find myself holding my breath throughout the entire chapter, not exactly sure what will happen next.
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  • From DeathGodDist on September 12, 2010
    Still greatly enjoying this story. You did an awesome job giving off a sense of the pain and agony the poor girl was going through as she was tortured with that drug. And it is of course, very interesting how Eceri is trying to figure her out and juggle both his curiosity for her and of course his duty to getting the information from her.

    Bravo as always. Looking forward to the next one! :)

    -DGD
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  • From DeathGodDist on July 14, 2010
    I said wow. :0

    That was one of the most tension filled chapters I've ever read. Seriously, you haven't lost your touch at all during your hiatus, heck if anything, you've picked up a few things. I already love the dynamic that exists between the two of them and the intense friction built up. He, viewing her as something of interest, and her viewing him as something to loathe. What I love about your protagonist is she most certainly is not a Mary Sue at all. Her back-story and reactions are quite believable and realistic. I honestly have no idea where you will take this story and can't even guess upon future events, which is a great thing.

    All I can say is, I'm totally hooked. You've got me again Nalani. :)

    -DGD
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  • From ANON - Silver_Wing on July 14, 2010
    You really had me going there! Oh I hope you update soon. Stories like yours keep me from going insane here at base :D
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  • From butterflies1974 on July 14, 2010
    I am so hooked on this story and I can say that I missed some sleep when I saw that the next chapter was up...but it is so worth it and I can't wait for more.
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  • From girlyhero on July 13, 2010
    I like this story. It's well written, and that's rare on these sites. Keep it up-- I can't wait to read more!
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  • From ginstar3 on July 13, 2010
    wow my adrenaline was pumping just as much as Kate's was reading that chapter. awesome, awesome, awesome. can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Cricket on July 13, 2010
    You have a great story going!! Please add a new chapter soon!! :D
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  • From Kytkattin on July 12, 2010
    I want more!!! Keep up the great work.
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  • From ginstar3 on July 10, 2010
    Holy shit this story is loaded with detail and I'm totally hooked. You managed to put so much detail into this 1 chapter and yet the flow is spot on. Please update soon. Can't wait to read more.
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  • From ANON - Mel on July 03, 2010
    hey, good work on the story, looking forward to more
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  • From ANON - Ti-Ana Rivers on June 29, 2010
    I hate you. Cause now I have to wait for you to write more. This is way too well written to be on this little 'ol site. I really love how you have taken a pragmatic view on this story. Most of the time when people are writing a predator fiction they "romanticize" (considering the subject matter not the best word) the humans involved. You have made a down to earth girl and very plausible situation for her to be in. My only question is if they are going to capture her now why didn't they the first time? Is that a plot hole or did I just accidently skip that explanation?
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  • From butterflies1974 on June 26, 2010
    I am so looking forward to reading more of this story. I really like how this one is shaping up and I can't wait to read more expecially when they get her.
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  • From DeathGodDist on June 26, 2010
    Wow, it is so great to have you back Nalani! :)

    Your writing has been greatly missed, and I daresay that even with your absence, your quality and detail does not appear to have diminished one bit, for there is no greater proof of that then the fact that I'm already hooked on this new story of yours from the get go. Already there are some very interesting characters and situations that are occurring, and I am looking forward to seeing how it is going to develop. As was the case in your previous stories, you are so great with details that it's easy to imagine and visualize what has been written.

    Once again, great to have you back. Hope you'll stay! :)

    -DGD
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  • From ANON - Silver_Wing1987 on June 26, 2010
    Good story nice plot going I hope you continue
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