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By : infinitehelix
  • From ANON - Cricket on October 16, 2009
    I totally love your predator story Heat! You have a gift for imagery and I hope you finish the story!!!!!

    Peace out,
    Cricket
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  • From blackshiro on September 04, 2009
    Hummm pretty nice story :D Waiting for more baby! ^__~
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  • From bloodravyn on August 25, 2009
    this is really awesome so far!
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  • From DeathGodDist on August 25, 2009
    Wow, very very hot. You've written quite the couple here. I love how you write about their curiosities regarding one another, Laila in particular. A'apep certainly knows how to please, in every possible way it seems. I'm looking foward a lot to reading more about these two. And again, all the little details that you provide in the background are what really makes this story shine. Can't wait for the next part!

    -DGD
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  • From girlyhero on August 16, 2009
    I do like what you've done with it. Lots of smexxy and the Paya thing has me intrigued. And I don't if this would help but from my understanding of the comics, Yautja weren't against the use of cryogenics, though they didn't really need them. They only found them useful when in scenarios with humans as a "healing" sort of thing. Just throwing that tid-bit out there since Aapep was questioning her survival incase you needed some ideas. I don't know if you'd have the humans using that at this point, cause I'm not sure if Yautja would just have cryo-chambers lying collecting dust or not. Yay, complexity. Loves it though just as much as I did the first time I read your work...if not more!!! :3
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  • From ginstar3 on August 14, 2009
    mmmmmm....ridges....(: oh sorry got a little lost there. Very excellent story so far. Ritual cannibalism? Are you refering to the ingesting of Yaujta flesh and blood to extend human life? If yes, then go for it. And, if it works, I want some too....LOL. I love how you made Leila steely, a strong mate for a strong hunter. I would like to see him protect her by killing some unknown beastie in Yaujta-in-shining-armor style and then she fucks the shit out of him right there, blowing his mind, then flirtingly says "that's for protecting me" which makes him puff out his chest in true proud Yaujta style....(giggle) -Ginstar3
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  • From butterflies1974 on August 13, 2009
    This chapter was very good and I wouldn't be bothered by a part with the ritual cann. That is what a predator does and who would deny a predator that? I think that this chapter was a good one especially with her getting to check him out. That was really cool.
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  • From ANON - a guy on August 13, 2009
    violent and sexy. I wish it didn't have an end. I really appreciated the voyeurism near the end. Honestly, i cannot think of anything to criticize, aside from some grammatical errors which are, suffice to say, not at the front of my mind.
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  • From butterflies1974 on August 11, 2009
    I love this story and the changes you made were good. Can't wait for another chapter.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 11, 2009
    It's spelled "entomologist".
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  • From ANON - aquamum on August 05, 2009
    This is a great story !!!!!
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  • From Dawn2009 on July 25, 2009
    Please update soon.
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  • From girlyhero on July 21, 2009
    Wow. I really really enjoy this story. You have a wonderful writing skill and I really like the characters. I hope you continue because I would love to see what happens if she finds out that he's not human. Also, the military issue could be fun. And sex. More sex. XD You can write a great sex scene. Keep on truckin'.
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  • From DeathGodDist on July 14, 2009
    Hey now, this totally came out of left field, but I really am liking what I've read here. Formatting aside (hopefully that can be cleaned up), this is very well written and I can see just how much thought and effort you've put into researching things. All the little details like with Bes the beetle in his little Terrarium really make this one stand out. I also love the way you've written Laila as a civillian interacting with military personel and it actually does come out well.

    Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing where you might be taking this. There is definitely a lot of good potential here, but what I've read so far has been quite entertaining indeed. :)

    -DGD
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  • From mareepoole on July 14, 2009
    update soon
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