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Reviews for Ashes of Sunlight

By : JAngelDreams
  • From Shellbean on September 29, 2023

    I just found Adult Fan Fiction and thus just found your story. I hope you have plans to continue this fic it's coming along nicely. I like it when the boys get all protective of their girl! Sincerely thanks for writing. Shellbean:)


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  • From ANON - Violet on July 22, 2015
    This is a great story. I know it's been awhile before you added anything new, but I hope you do.
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  • From ANON - Megan on December 10, 2014
    This is an awesome story I would love it to continue.
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  • From ANON - Megan on August 25, 2013
    Love it! Please continue :)
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  • From ANON - LostChick on December 03, 2012
    Love it! more please
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  • From ANON - brandy on June 12, 2012
    i love this story can you write more soon.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 22, 2011
    Oh look. Another story with the author inserts a Mary Sue OC to ship off with all the boys and become the immediately center of attention. *roles eyes* I'm beginning to think there ARE no other stories for the Lost Boys on here--at least, that stars a female lead. And lord help us if she's an OC...
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  • From ANON - moonshadow on July 16, 2010
    Love it! More more more!!!!
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  • From ANON - Briar Rose on June 10, 2010
    Just finished reading part five. In fact I came looking for a story after just watching the movie again ^_^ You wanted a review so I thought I'd do what I could as I was reading! So far, I like the story, the feel of it and where its going. The only thing I would work on is your transitions. Its a little choppy as she's going from the hotel and around town. Hot dog, window shopping bathroom... things could flow a little more. Like maybe she dropped her hot dog and as she went to throw it away the sign with all the missing people was next to the trash can? (Sorry! I always feel wierd giving critisizm because I don't want people to think I'm' being rude!)

    I'm hooked on the story so far and I am dying to see what happens with David. The last few lines we enticing and perfect in my opinion. Begs the reader to come back for more! " Well, it looked like she'd just jumped out of the pot and into the fire. Now she just had to find out how badley she'd get burned."

    "...the slightly cruel smile." Oooh, I've already got the tingles and I'm squirming to see where this goes. Perfect intro for his character. It's like, yes, he's charming you with those looks, but something about his smile tears you in two. You want the delicious promise there but it also spikes your instincts that something is amiss.


    Oops, that was kind of long... I hope that helps?? Feel free to email me if you'd like!
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  • From CarolineAnderson on January 12, 2010
    Great story so far, can't wait for the next chapter :D
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  • From CarolineAnderson on January 09, 2010
    i love this story and hope that you continuee writing more chapters :D
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  • From CarolineAnderson on November 07, 2009
    i love this story and can't wait for the next chapter :D
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  • From ANON - Tiff on October 03, 2009
    Hey nice story so far
    Could you email me when you update next? Thanks ^_^
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  • From on August 18, 2009
    First thing....absolutely wonderful story!!!I hope to see a wild ending of Gavin if you allow the boys to handle it in thier own wonderful style. Keep up...if I think of more to talk about I will surely let you know. Brava!
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  • From CarolineAnderson on July 31, 2009
    i love this story and hope you update soon :)
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