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By : AceMaxwell

From DuosAngel on December 16, 2007
Goodness, I was afraid you'd bailed out ater all. So glad to see you continuing. I was surprised to see the other pirate lords. I asume that will come up again. Surely Jack can one of them the title of pirate king? He doesn't need it. Then again this is Captain Jack Sparrow we're talking about. So what obsticals await on the island?
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From on December 09, 2007
i love it! im really looking forward to the next chapter.
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From SpufFan88 on December 07, 2007
Please, Please, Please, Please! Please update! I've been trying to be patient but I can only hold out so much!

I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From Finnel on November 14, 2007
You decided to continue!!!! ~glomps the author!!!!!~
Ohhh!!! the plot really is beginning to thicken...
What happened to the Pearl? thats the fluffy thing that climbed onto the dutchman???
I shall wait with baited breath for the next update!!!
Luck!!!
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From danglingdingle on November 13, 2007
Read the update once, got the "God, I've gone completely incapable of making any sense"- reaction, as was expected, read it the second time, and now I'm here again. Haven't fully recovered yet, so have a heart if there's bloopers.

Ok. First of all, you're very welcome...I'm flattered for being mentioned, so now there's 2 happy people 'round here.

Second...let me count the ways I love you:

You updated, you sweet, sweet, person you! *mwah*

You killed Barbossa. Now I can unload my pistol and cancel the flight tickets to Tortuga, since that's been taken care of. Oh, goodie.

The composition of this chapter was really well built. I have no means of knowing if you just happen to have the talent, or if you did it on purpose, have even studied writing, but going from leisure, hot-sweating-copulating-pirates to humor, to growing nervousness, to relief of nothing bad happening after all (*phew*), to another anxiety attack with bits of funny, and leaving us breathless waiting for more, asap, is a perfecly paced piece of literature.

Squid-y- part was hilarious and so well written that for a while, I wasn't sure if I was reading or watching it happen infront of my own eyes. Purrfection.

Description of Will's dive had me holding my breath with him.
Jack's curt cursing was the cherry on top. Again, could be just me, but it made me laugh. I could just hear his voice.
This right here, ladies and gentlemen, is how it's supposed to be done. A fine specimen indeed.

Now, being the prick that I am, I have to point out that there were two snakes in the Eden here. Inconsistances, that are probably very hard to spot when the visual of the text is in your head and you can't just step out of it to view it neutrally.

This is why I would take the opportunity to urge you to have them beta-read.
Altho, you did apologize for any mistakes in the beginning, so you are forgiven. Do not fret. :)

Time for me to crawl back to my cave and ponder what could possibly be happening next.
If you're going to separate Jack and Will, I'm curious about how you would portray Jack after that. I mean, losing The Pearl -and- Will would damn near make him go...well, sane, really. (cause hey, let's face it, is there really more room in the in- end of that train?)

And the furry character? Does it happen to carry a set of keys with it?

Questions, questions...

Just on a side note, I personally have nowt against the steamy sex being reduced. (*gasp* huh? Yeah, I said it.:P)
Tho I don't mind leaving a sheep-sized ball of foam behind be when I suddenly have the urge to go have a smoke, remarkably around the same time as J/W would, if they smoked, I don't think it's needed in every chapter.
You are right in putting a hold on that, and I for one will back you up against the "nice ficcy but where's the smut?"- comments. In case there will be any.
Now it's time to get a hold of our hats and take the ride we got the tickets for. That is, as it would seem, one hell of an adventure.

Placing rose petals on the path you tread on,
danglingdingle

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From DuosAngel on November 13, 2007
So glad your not giving up on this story. I would have been so sad if you had. I'm dying to know what the blac things are. And what they plan to do.
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From SpufFan88 on November 13, 2007
Yes! Yes, yes, yes, yes! I'm just so happy that you updated!

And I'm even more intrigued! A new evil? Is it a monster like the Krakken? Is it controlled by somebody like the Krakken was?

And no more smut? Does that mean something is gonna separate Jack and Will? Is something gonna happen to one of them? If so, I think it should be Will, cuz as much as I love him (and I really do!)A little bit of Will torture encourages Jack caring about and for him and I just love that!

But your story you do what you will, and I'm pretty sure I'll love it!

Can't wait for you to update!
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From LadyDraculea on November 13, 2007
For some strange reason, when I read the bit with the furry thing clamoring itself onto the Dutchman, I thought "Gremlin". XD Honestly, though, I have no idea what kind of creature this can be. Indeed, the Kraken is dead, plus a Kraken does not have fur. A rabid seal, maybe? No... Mermaid, grindylow, selkie, uh, bigfoot? *shakes head* I have no idea.

Anyways, I'm so glad you decided to keep going with this story. If you had chosen otherwise, I might have had to form a mob group and hunt you down! >:3

Lady D
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From danglingdingle on November 12, 2007
I know I reviewed before, but who's going to stop me from praising this again?

So far I�ve read this 4 times. Four times I've been left speechless, which is shit, cause I'd really want to give a comprehendable, actual review, with more than "j00 so g00d @ writing + n I lov3 t3h smut".
Now I'm going to try to calm down and make something of this, hoping it's more than blabbering idiocy...Sorry in advance :P

Having Will and Jack -both- in character is an achievement in itself, but making Elizardbeth drop her masks and show all her sides, and in the meantime have her in character, and not descend to the traditional "let's just get rid of her in the first three sentences"- ways, is brilliance of it's own.

Can't wait to see where the plot takes up. That is to say that the plot is great. Rare to have, so we must cherish it.

The one and only thing I can think of to give "constructive critisism" for, is the one or two occasions where I was lost of -where- some of the actions took place, but even that was cleared in the next bit, so I didn't have to wonder for long.

What really makes me tip my hat to you, is the fact that you did a post-AWE, and you didn't have to generate Alternative Anything! You didn't twist nor turn the movies... Wha' the hell be this? Which one's alter-ego are you, Rossio's or Elliott's? :D

You do realize that you have made slashers who've read this, get amazing kicks out of AWE, ontop of it being AWE in the first place, don't you? I mean, c'mon. For example, Davy Jones obviously knows about the love between Will and Jack, and Jack's face when he realized Will was going to die. That wasn't a face of a man who gave up immortality. That was a face who wanted to give it to a loved one! And afterwards, how terrified can a pirate be just for some random whelp? ...Riiight.
This being the point where it's safe to say that the amount of so-called fluff you write (Yes, men, and even pirates, are allowed to have feelings), is just about the same amount that is in the movie. (and now we come back to my Rossio/Elliott-theory ;))

It very possibly, and probably, sounds a bit daft, but I'm waiting for an update to this with the same anxiousness that I waited for the AWE dvd. Now I have it and am in trembling pile of fear, clutching the dvd as my only lifeline, fear, that you didn't threaten us in vain, but are infact not going to write more. Oh, please, don't let it be so...

Btw, I hope you don't mind, but I borrowed your Ascencion- scene when I watched AWE with an eight-year-old, and she insisted on knowing what happens to the souls and what is the purpose of the Flying Dutchman in all that. She was verrry happy with the explanation. So thanks :) (Yeah, I did tell her that "it was written", so I didn't take credit on it. Altho I didn't bloody well tell her -where- it was written. She's a little too young for that, as of yet :P)

Ok, now I�ll just shut up. Apologies, yet again, for the blabbering.

Anyone who might be wondering...Yeah, I am obsessed. So?

Greets,
Your n:o 1 fan :)
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From LadyDraculea on November 10, 2007
You *points* cannot stop writing! Writing should be for yourself, not for these lily-livered scallywags who don't know good stories when one hits them right in between the eyes. *nods* Pages views, reviews, whatever. If this is something you enjoy doing (it is what I enjoy reading) then screw the rest of the world and keep writing!

Now that that is said and done, I'd be sorely disappointed if you decided to stop writing. Really disappointed, 'cause this is one of a kind, I have yet to stumble upon a Will/Jack that follows the third movie! So, I'd be very sad and disappointed if you decide to abandon this lovely piece of literature.

Looking forward to the next update,
Lady D
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From ANON - Troy on November 07, 2007
This is such a great story. I think the plot is awesome and the way you portray Jack, Will and the connection between them is just lovely. You definitely have to update soon, i'm hooked on this! I don't usually post reviews for stories and such, but i liked this story so much, i just had to! I'm really eager to read the next chapter, i just hope it'll come soon! I'm sure many people would love an update. Don't keep us waiting too long! Oh and please don't discontinue this fic, i know many people would be unhappy about it, including myself. Well then, i think i've said quite enough. Cheers mate!
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From acr1228 on November 03, 2007
Great fic! I'm glad you didn't make elizabeth a randomly evil bitch. That's far too easy an out. For whatever reason, the PotC part of adultfanfiction.net has never been very active, not sure why. Makes me sad.
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From ANON - Night on November 02, 2007
Ha! Don't fear! I love this story! Specially since its incorporating the new stuff. . . I've been on a dry spell of Pirates since no one has really been writing anything since the 2nd movie came out. . . or even the first! So Eternity has been a blessing! :D I love the plot, love Jack and Will, love what you've done with the strumpet, and can't wait to read more!! :D
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From ANON - Sancta on October 31, 2007
Hello :waves: Here is your feedback, don't stop writing :jumps around: We do love it!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Cor on October 30, 2007
OK I think this story is fabulous! I've been with it since the beginning. I'm a bit of a lurker so I don't usually comment even though I should. This story is great. I really want to see where this is going especially between our two favorite pirates!-)Loved the insane jack...fighting with a support beam (only Jack)So thank you for this lovely story and I hope you keep it up.
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