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Reviews for Kayla's Revenge

By : ZenRose
  • From ANON - Nahau on August 30, 2007
    I am so glad you updated. I can't wait for the next chapter. You always write an awesome chapter. I just can't help but wonder who killed Kayla. But I'm sure that's how you want it to be. Thank for updating.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 29, 2007
    Hey! I LOVE your stories! But I am starting to get really really confused! I can't keep up with all the characters and children and stuff... maybe you can draw up a character tree or something... I am not trying to be mean at all but I really do need one! lol ._. Love your work, keep it up!
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  • From DeathGodDist on August 29, 2007
    Oh Pahel definitely knows something, I would think being Kayla's doctor he'd know all about her children when he births them (DNA and all).

    I'm torn on my feelings for Sh'lok, on the one hand, I'm disappointed that he allowed this to happen, on the other hand, I think the fact that Ba'naj is still alive in the present shows that he maybe never knew at all (otherwise I'm sure one of them would be dead too) about the affair. Oh well, I'll be waiting with baited breath for the next chapter, you're awesome circle! :)

    Oh, and I completely left out the siblings and Jasmine in my last comments. I love the cohesion you have between them, and how they all carry different attributes of their parents. Ta'noj is definitely going to have to do something to make up for the situation though. :)
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  • From ANON - LovyDovy on August 29, 2007
    So worth waiting for. Thanks for not making us starved readers wait long this time.
    Kulvir found out and told his mate didn't he. That jealous hussy...sorry. I don't like her much.
    Shlok making the same mistakes or was it a misunderstanding? Why were they not getting along? If he loved her why deny her or was it the other way around? Can't wait to find out.
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  • From ANON - shortest_warrior on August 29, 2007
    That was hot. Both with Ta'noj and Jasmine, and Ba'naj and Kayla.

    "I will not use the work 'f....' for the remainder of the day." YEAH RIGHT!!! Now that would be a thing to see. He would probably use pork or root, something to do with sex. I'm sure he'd find a way to slip a word in here and there. LOL

    Great Chappie Circle.
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  • From ANON - mal'fan on August 29, 2007
    Wow another great chapter!.
    The little story about Kayla and the food was funny. I like that fact that she didn't accept 'everything' about them.
    Kuja character almost remind me of Kayla, but more reserved. Will Su'tara (I think that's how it's spelled) be in the story as well?
    So Kayla gave into Ba'naj and they have kids together (green and brown do not make blue!)will it ever come out that it is his kids?
    Ugh, once again I cannot wait for another installment.
    Oh and I have a feeling that Pahel knows something. How would he know what haunts Ba'naj?

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  • From ZenRose on August 28, 2007
    Oh thank you for the reviews, and I know what you mean about the desertion. I too hope the movie will stir a few more people to write, or start writing again.
    Kayla and Sh'lok relationship will be explained here and there...
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  • From DeathGodDist on August 28, 2007
    Wow, I'm still in awe every time I read another chapter.

    I dunno what it is about Kayla and Ba'naj and why it just seems so much more powerful than most other pairings I've read. Maybe it was the big build up to it, or the fact that its so "forbidden" (maybe it's Ba'naj's potty mouth :o) but again, it's just so damn hot when they do their thing. Actually a request on that, I've always envisioned those two to be quite the raunchy pair during sex, (certainly more so than any of Kayla's other lovers) so maybe you could up the ante on their "coupling" for their next encounters (I'm still hoping to read about how their "trial" went back on the homeworld). I especially like it when Ba'naj cusses during their encounters. :)

    Still, it makes me wonder just what went wrong with Kayla and Sh'lok since the end of Book 2 when they supposedly made up? Kayla in the flashbacks seems to indicate that Sh'lok is no longer paying her attention (and not even mating with her) and perhaps is again more attentive to Leena (of course, this all can go back on Kaylas shoulders for starting that whole thing in the first place). It also sounds like (inferring from Kuja's remark about some of her siblings eyes) that Kayla perhaps sired several children from Ba'naj which would indicate this little "tryst" isn't so little at all and goes on for years. I also am eager to now read more about the final events leading up to the murder and of course, Kayla's last moments.

    Oh well, I've rambled long enough. Just please, keep on writing, you're work is so awesome! :)

    On another note, this place has felt somewhat deserted recently. Maybe the Alien vs Predator 2 movie will bring people back?
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  • From ANON - chancelor22 on August 28, 2007
    OMG! I can't believe that she actually gave in! What the hell was she thinking? Now I'm really curious to see who actually killed her. I'm thinking maybe it could have been done out of jealousy...

    Can't wait for the next installment. Keep up the great work!! =D
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  • From ANON - mal'fan on August 14, 2007
    Can I just say that Ta'noj went from punk to hunk! I love his character now. He's a evil guy with just enough patience to care for someone. Very good!
    I didn't expect to read about Kayla brutal fighting. I love how this time you write more about how others feel and see her instead of her point of view. She has more flaws now and I like that, her major flaw is Ba'naj. She cheated plain and it was wrong, but I love how she tried to resist. This is your best yet. Keep it coming!
    Oh, and kill Sou'sha, lol
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  • From Nahaujaret on August 13, 2007
    I am so happy that you updated. I couldn't wait to find out what will, you came out with another great chapter. Please update.
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  • From karmaxp on August 10, 2007
    I was upset that you killed off Kayla but I have to say that I do love a good mystery.
    So continue please.
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  • From DeathGodDist on August 09, 2007
    Wow, where to begin?

    It was actually quite fortunate timing that I was just finishing re-reading through Book 2 as this new chapter went up. It's really amazing how well you've grown your characters and their personalities and comparing them from then to now. But that's what makes you such an exceptional writer.

    Down to business. Quite interesting that ol pervy-yautja Ba'naj suddenly grew such affection towards Kayla (in Book 2, he treated her just as an amusing fascination) and even cares for her more than his own mates. I guess Kayla and Sh'lok were going through another bad time in their relationship, but I guess that's to be expected when Kayla especially is living far longer than is normal. Plus I agree that it sounds plausible that Stef'na might have had a hand in that after what happened with the deaths of both Kul'vir and Ro'Shan. And damn, that Sou'sha is annoying, and I don't really trust that guard of hers, even if his story is true. It was kind of interesting watching Ba'naj and his father argue, where you wouldn't think that he's as old as he's been talked of with the way he pines after Kayla. Ta'noj and Jasmine are becoming a very amusing couple and Jasmine's quirky innocence is really funny, so is of course her continued interactions with Mi'tra and Kuja.

    Again, I've gone on long enough, but this was just such an awesome chapter. The scene with Ba'naj and Kayla was so hot, even though it was short, but you've been doing such a great lead-up to that moment ever since Book 2, it felt quite momentous. I hope we'll be able to learn of what transpired during their elder "fight". :) Also will be interesting to see if Sh'lok actually knew about it all or if he'll find out.

    So whenever you have the time to write another spectacular chapter, please do, I for one will be waiting with unbridled anticipation. :)
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  • From ANON - Lina on August 09, 2007
    YES A NEW AWESOME CHAPTER!!!! CONTINUE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - LovyDovy on August 09, 2007
    Masterful storytelling. I was litterally on the edge of my seat. Banaj was in love?

    What is shlok like with his remaining mates? Was Stephna trying to drive that wedge between Kayla and Shlok over jealousy and Kulvir?

    Ineresting developments here.

    It was well worth the wait! More sooner please.
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