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From ANON - LovyDovy on September 30, 2007
Typo Banaj was there for Kayla. Why would Shlok accept a third mate when he could barely juggle two? I think Kayla did what was expected of her not by how she truely felt.
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From ANON - LovyDovy on September 30, 2007
I think it is possible that Stephna hated Kayla over Kulvir's love of Kayla. She fought about it with Kulvir in their quarters, all the while putting on a fake face to eveyone else. When she found out Shlok was Kayla's mate Stephna's reaction was inappropriate in my opinion. Shlok frequently prepared Stephna, and she craved more than his scent according to Shlok mentioning he could have taken her anytime he'd have liked before he became her active mate.
Why would Kulvir change the selection of Gagan as Stephna's new mate upon his death. Especially since he knew what was going on with Kayla, and how she was over Shlok with Leena? Did stephna have a hand in his decision, afterall Kulvir knew what sharing Shlok did to Kayla? I can't see him being so cruel.
If Shlok put those others before the only female he supposedly loved...I can't say it. If anything she would have gotten the most attention. Besides he always favored Leena, so why not Stephna who probably didn't challenge his male ego either. He was probably mating them when Kayla was battling Biren. I mean he wasn't even with her then while Biren was, and that may have shifted Kayla's feelings. Of course I'm only speculating. This story is so good and engrossing! I just never liked Stephna since she never cared for Kulvir beyond his status, but she was not his first choice either. I just hope Shlok sees her for what she is. She was NEVER Kayla's friend.
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From ANON - Persephone on September 27, 2007
yes, maybe Stephna got Kulvir to watch her. So you really think she was jealous at Kayla? Ok, that could be of course. The question is, how intelligent is Stephna? Is she intelligent and hard-boiled enough to kill kayla and make a nice face to her son, so that he doesn't think she was able to kill his mother? Hm... to be honest, I don't think she killes her. But she was not a real friend. She talked bad about Kayla and she tried to find out about her and Banaj. A real friend would not akt like her. She tried to talk with Sh'lok about that. Thats not normal for a friend. She was not loyal.

I can imagine that he made the same mistakes again like with Leena. I'm pretty sure. He is a man and Stefna was new to him. New things are interesting.... And I'm sure that Kayla made the same mistakes too like with Leena.

You think Sh'lok betrayed Kayla with Stephna? You think that they had an affair before Kulvir died? It may be that Sh'lok mated with her after Kulvirs death. He was her active mate. They were allowed to mate. Maybe he don't told Kayla because he didn't want trouble. I think he told her really late about it. Months after Kulvir died.... And she reacted really calm. Why?

I was disappointed about Sh'lok too... Its not normal how he reacted.... But ok, they are not human....

But why was his interest in Leena and maybe Stefna stronger than in Kayla? What is different on them? Is it, because they are his own race? Or what is it?

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From ANON - LovyDovy on September 27, 2007
Stephna got kullvir to watch kayla. Why...Jealousy? I am supremly curious if Shlok made the same mistake with stephna when it came to Kayla.
Ignoring her heat as he took care of his other mates heats. Why would she leave her bed in middle of the night horny otherwise?
She might of found out that about the almost betrayals that Shlok avoided with Stephna, or did he? During their wait for the ritual did he give into Stephna who always had wanted him, while she was still grieving for kulvir, did he mate Stephna behind her back I wonder?
I don't think Shlok did it because he gave permission, and he was bedding other females.
I think Banaj's father or that other Elder may have arranged it cause she made Elder. Possibly a male she refused to mate? So many possibilities. I can't wait to read more about Shlok though. How could he not continue to seek out his love's killer? I was very disappointed by that.
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From ANON - Persephone on September 20, 2007
Yes, you are right. I think too, that they talked about her relationship with Banaj. I think she would not tell Kulvir that she was pregnant with Banaj's baby. But I'm pretty shure that their relationship started before Stef'na became Sh'lok's mate.

Hehe, no, I'm not confused.

But when they got Sh'loks permission, why did they handle their affair as a secret? OK, sure they hat not the permission to make babys...

Another thought of mine: What if Banaj wanted to fight for Kayla, to make her his mate. She said, she would kill him before that happen. What if she and him fight and he killed her by mistake?
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From ANON - stewie on September 19, 2007
Sorry my name was not on the last post. This is a snippet from the end of hunter 2
Ba�naj folded his arms as he watched her walking out of the females� restroom. �Are you ok?�

�Just a little upset stomach,� she smiled. Ba�naj walked closer to her, peering into her curious eyes. He bent down to whisper in her ear.

�Sh�lok gave us permission and you still owe me a fucking,� he purred. Kayla stared at him a moment longer and smiled shyly before walking away. Ba�naj sniffed the air and chuckled.

�I will take that as a yes,� Ba�naj grunted to himself.
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so from my point of view she was attracted to him then, but never said anything. I thought the part with Kul'vir saying in kayla's revenge that if she told someone then one of them will die, he was talking about her and banaj relationship. I could be wrong and maybe they were talking about the baby not being Sh'lock's, which means she was with him even before Sh'lok took Stef'na on as a mate... are you confused yet, lol
Looking over the story again I don't think Circle mentioned how long the affair was going on. Oh and I said Circle was a she. If you're a guy, my apology.
New chapter please!

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From ANON - Persephone on September 19, 2007
oops. i forgot to put my name into the latest post. sorry... . it was me, Persephone. I don't know why the system put another nickname in.
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From ANON - Anon on September 19, 2007
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�Did he hear anything?� Shra�van stood up.

�The only thing he heard was Kul�vir saying �if you tell Sh�lok someone will die�.�

�Tell my father what?� Shra�van tried to remain calm, but he needed more answers. His mother would never be unfaithful to his father.

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Do you talk about this? I think so.... Now there's only the question what Kayla and Kul'vir talked about and if she told Sh'lok. Maybe she wanted to tell him that she was pregnant, but not from Sh'lok. Or that she finally want to part from him and so the one who had to die was herself.
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From ANON - persephone on September 19, 2007
so it starts during "Human Hunter 2" when Leena appears?
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From ANON - Anon on September 18, 2007
I think Kayla was with Ba'naj before he was with Stef'na because in the beginning she mentioned something about Kulvir talking to Kayla about it. I think it's near the end of chapter two. Damn I know this story better than my school work!
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From ANON - Persephone on September 18, 2007
I forgot one question: when does that sexual relationship between Kayla and Ba�naj start? Was it before Sh'lok took Stef'na as his mate or after?

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From ANON - Persephone on September 18, 2007
I really like your stories and I read them all. I think, the second mate thing is the reason, why Kayla had to die. For me, Sh`lok killed her. He found out about her and Banjai. He killed her out of fury or jealousy or maybe because he was not able to take the disgrace. Maybe she wanted to leave him, who knows. I don't think that Banjai or Leena killed her. Leena was his inofficial first mate. She had all what she wanted. Banjai cared to much for Kayla to kill her. Sorry for my bad english.
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From DeathGodDist on September 17, 2007
Man, they should have just made Kayla the exception to the rule of no multiple mates for females, since everyone she gets close to just wants to be with her. Kul'vir, Ga'gan, Sh'lok, Maha'vin, and now Ba'naj. It really is interesting to hear a supposedly old guy like Ba'naj talk about Kayla in a way where he puts her above his own mates. I'm really itching to see how everyone's reaction will be once it all comes out about the affair (sounded like Shra'van was pretty close to that truth in the second to last chapter) and what they'll think of Kayla and the kids she had with Ba'naj then. Again, doesn't seem like Sh'lok knew, cause I think he'd have killed (or died trying to kill) Ba'naj if he found out, which is again, kind of sad, and makes it seem like the guy really was out of touch with Kayla, despite promising to be good to her.

Oh well, so much to discuss, but don't want to take up too much more space here. Again, this story is one of my favorites here for good reason and I can't wait for it to continue. :)
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From Rosei on September 10, 2007
Chapter 5

As great as the previous two stories!
Very intriguing and H-O-T.
I really liked Ta'noj, he was such a sweet kid.
(It still really shows here.)

Thanks,
R
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From ZenRose on August 30, 2007
Hey Anon. You're not being mean at all! Kayla has a lot of kids, even ones that haven't been mentioned yet so I can understand that the names can be confusing. It will get even more confusing when I start to mention Stef'na's kids, lol. If you e-mail me privately (circle.of.addictions at gmail dot com )I will attempt to make a character tree for you! The only way I know how to do it here is list the character, then all of their kids names, but some I would have to leave out since I haven't posted them yet....
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