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From ANON - LovyDovy on November 11, 2007
Was it done to hurt Tanoj somehow? Did someone else kill whatshername son? Why did Kayla stop loving Shlok and he her?
I just can't see an emotionally attached human female sharing her mate. Why does he miss her when he ignored her when he had her? Does Shlok know or suspect who killed her?

One complaint. I wish Lex was wriiten like the experienced female she is not a newbie to their ways as she has been in so many other fics. There can be more than one strong female in a story.

I can't take it I need more! Pleeeaassssse.

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From DeathGodDist on November 08, 2007
I'll add to the growing chorus for an update. This section needs some kind of shot in the back to get it going again.
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From ANON - malfan on November 08, 2007
ok i have to agree........
we are in desperate need of an update
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From ANON - LovyDovy on November 04, 2007
kay? Why was so in love Shlok not mating with Kayla? Did he know about them all along? What does Shravan think about the role his father played in her choice?

So exciting and great reading, but please don't make us wait any longer..pleeeassse!
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From ANON - Stewie on October 19, 2007
This was awesome!
So now sa'tesh had reason for wanting her dead. Is he a suspect? I love the whole interaction between him and shravan. It was intense. This chapter gave me a glimpse of the old shravan. And poor Lex, finially understanding her once it was too late. This is a really great chapter circle!

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From DeathGodDist on October 14, 2007
Circle, you deserve all the critical acclaim here and so much more. Your story spanning multiple arcs is truly one of the most well-written works I've had the pleasure of reading. Indeed, everything you have written has been sheer joy to read and soak up. I know I'm in for a treat whenever I see an update to your stories, it truly is one of the highlights of the day whenever it occurs.

Keep up the exception work. :)
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From ZenRose on October 06, 2007
Wow, thanks so much for the reviews! I'm really glad you all like the story so far (so far) :)
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From ANON - LovyDovy on October 06, 2007
I apologize for being so hard on Shlok. It is hard for males, but he wasn't there, or was he? Maybe he lost sight of what mattered most.
I'll try not to take sides cause Kayla asked him to take on Leena. I read it again. It seemed that he had realized much too late that his heart belonged to Kayla. This story leaves me way too curious about his point of view of events.
I still don't like Stephna. Leena is still crazy. This story is still one of the best I've read.
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From ANON - Nahau on October 05, 2007
I'm so glad you updated, I've been waiting for a little while now. This chapter was absolutely amazing and I can't wait for the next chapter to be posted. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - persephone on October 04, 2007

poor kayla,

she must feel really bad with such a mate. it is really sad that he stayed with leena while kayla was fighting for her live. thats more than sad. i tink leena got a child often....

till the point he stayed with leena while kayla fought i thought, ok, he maybe loved kayla but he is only a male. and males are what they are. he is an alien male also. that means, he is different from human and he acts like an alien. because he do what he had learned from his father and so on. maybe if it would not had been leena he had taken another one as his second mate and would have acted the same way with her. maybe with stefna. who knows.....

but when i read that he don't stayed with kayla when she fought for her live I thought, ok, he really prefered leena. maybe he was jealous at kayla because she became elder and he not, like kayla said herself. maybe that was the point he decided to prefer his other mates, especially leena. whe don't know how he acted with stefna... i think in this story the male are above the females and the females look up at their males.
that was destroyed for him when kayla become elder.

before that i tought, ok, he never learned how to handle a human female. he is not really to blame for what he is doing. the yautja males in this story are very driven by their penisses (don't know to describe it otherwise). so, when leena or stefna are in heat, he fucks them till they are out of heat. they are different to kayla. they only take what he gives to them. they don't ask questions. they are submissive and thats much easier for him than a kayla, who has her own mind. they are born for mating and to bear children. nothing more. they don't want to be loved. its enough when he cares... poor live... or maybe not?

It was a big mistake of kayla to convince Sh'lok to take Leena as his second mate. I don't understand why she did that... She should have listen to Kulvir... he was right with all he said...

I ask myself how Sh'lok now fare without Kayla. With females that only care for him and not love him.... If he regret his actions? And I would like to know if Kayla still loved him at the end...

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From ANON - LovyDovy on October 03, 2007
Wow! So sad, yet informative. It bugs me that they forget humans are different from them. A human female requires much attentive behavior. It is in her nature as well to be possessive of a mate. Shlok admitted to Kayla that he wanted Leena beyond duty as a mate, so why would any of this surprise him? He gave permission, so technically...but my heart would have preferred his heart belonging to Kayla.

One pregnant mate, or your love possibly dying at that moment? I never thought Shlok would be so petty, but after his feelings strayed from Kayla to Leena it seems. I'm starting to think he didn't love Kayla after he mated Leena. Possibly Stephna made a wedge between them deepen? You don't tell the only female you've ever loved that you want another female. Did Kayla bring that back at him?

It is just human nature to want to be the only one. Why was he and Tanoj fighting? Did Tanoj or Kulvir talk to Shlok?
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From DeathGodDist on October 03, 2007
It definitely pays to read more than once (in my case at least) to get a full understanding of it all. I tend to rush/skim through more on my first read-through and I fail to see a lot of the points and details that were made.

For example, my first time reading through the Lex/Kayla flashback I so wanted to strangle Kayla for what i thought was her "dont blame me" and "how dare you bring up my past" attitude for what has happened. On my second reading though, I realized that she was actually taking all the blame for what has happened and said that comparisons with her past were wrong because this time, for real, it was her choice that has caused it all. Which does make it quite sad that this encounter turned out to be the last time they ever spoke to one another. I still don't get how Kayla could smell male scents but Lex couldn't (if age is the factor, since Lex was supposed to be "older" than Kayla IIRC).

This actually reminded me a bit of how Ba'naj and his father parted ways as well. Amazing how these two were alienating everyone who had been close to them in the past for eachother.

Oh well, once again, top-knotch storytelling from you circle. We await your next master class with baited breath. :)
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From ANON - Mal'fan on October 02, 2007
This is by far one of the best chapters yet! It was good with no sex, lol.
It opened up so many questions. How do Sa'tesh really feel about Kayla? I guess if he didn't like her he would have told her secret about her and Ba'naj, but then again maybe he was keeping the secret for Ba'naj since they were friends.
�And now here stands her eldest son, a half blooded ooman, with the great bravery of a full blooded Yautja and leader of a glorious vessel. He boldly stands before me, an elder, questioning his mother's death and my close friend's integrity. Did I make the right choice?�
WOW That part says it all. He didn't like her. He wanted her dead, and should he have actually killed her. So did he? omg, so many questions!
Then there's Lex. I am so happy that she understood Kayla, but it was sad that it was too late. Her relationship with Shra'van is so sweet. Now if Shra'van reacted violently about the news, how will Ta'noj react?
You nicely wrote how Shra'van killed that crazy girl, without really saying he did it. WTG!
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From DeathGodDist on October 01, 2007
Oh wow, what a chapter. Sure there was no sex, but damn there was a ton to digest.

As suspected, Kayla and Ba'naj were having this affair for decades (I'm not too sure on the details, but I believe they said what, 10 years before she became an elder (when Ba'naj talked to Sa'tesh) and 20 years since then (when Kayla talked to Lex)), and it sounds like it may have even gone on right until her death. It's amazing how it was kept so well from her family, that none of them knew. Lucky for Kayla she had some people who would keep her secret or she'd have been dead sooner (Lex, Sa'tesh and certainly Pahel who no doubt helped hide the identity of the father of some of her children). All what's left is to find out what exactly Kul'vir knew and how he handled things before he died.

Nice to see Shra'van in action, getting rid of that worm Sou'sha so quick and efficiently, and you really feel bad for him now that he knows the truth. Sounds like he's going to want to kill Ba'naj soon. And then there's Ta'noj, how will the poor guy take all this in? If Shra'van is hurtin this badly from the truth, it's only going to destroy him, and Sh'lok too, if he doesn't know already.

Again circle you just keep leaving us wanting more. You're truly a master. :)
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From ANON - chancelor22 on October 01, 2007
Woot! An update. I love it. I just can't wait to see where all this ends up. I'm so confused and enthralled at the same time. I don't know who to love and who to hate. Keep up the great work!
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