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By : Zellezra

From Zellezra on October 22, 2008
Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad that you've enjoyed the story so far. Yeah, I couldn't quite understand that guy, either. After all, it's called fan fiction for a reason. *Shrugs*

I've actually been thinking about continuing with the story, a lot lately. It's strange that I should finally get a comment after the thought got stuck in my head. :P

I believe I will continue with the story. Now my only problem is finding the time to do so.

Thank you for your encouraging words, Divina. ^^
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From Divinatwila on September 24, 2008
I just read the whole battle of the reviews that went on with the crazy dude. It made me laugh so hard. People become so savage over the most trivial of things. The story is very nice and descriptive. It's realistic in the sense that Yautja are supposed to act honorable. I hate those stories where they make them look like daisy pickers. Or even worse when they act like mindless monsters with huge attachments. So you didn't do either of those two things. Your story is fine. Please continue.;p
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From Zellezra on May 30, 2007
I do believe justice has been served. I hope that guy is out of everyone's hair now. I know that it wasn't a good idea to engage him, but I believe I've won the battle. Hopefully he stays gone now.
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From Zellezra on May 21, 2007
You're welcome! ^_^
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From on May 21, 2007
ooooh you sure told me! im so afraid of ur witty words and 80s movie quotes "ur not even a hasbeen". I know you liked the part about you getting fucked in the ass. Fag.
where are you stories btw? i mean since you such authrity on what is such some good quality.
zellzera=lord-zain, im sure u are the same person and that is funnier i noticed when one of u is signed in the other isnt. so sad. you want comments that bad? :(
i dont have to write to know shitty writing when isee it bitch and yes i love the attention. thank you for giving it to me.
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From Zellezra on May 20, 2007
Dear b9696,

Lol! What can I say? I guess I'm just sophisticated compared to you. Thank you for all your lovely compliments, though. :) It kind of nullifies how you tried to discredit my story with all those spelling errors.

You know, this really isn't an insult; you're pretty damn funny. I mean, really, you are. I can't take any of this flaming seriously, it's just too funny!

�This endeavor is trite and non-scintillating. The progress of your story is long winded, drawn out and predictable and your character archetypes are painfully ordinary. I feel that it in the best interest of all who frequent this site that you take this mockery and sham of a story down post haste before this becomes a standard that will inspire more mindless and unoriginal works.�

^ Now that I liked! Bravo! That was wonderful. ^_^ You do know that there is a difference between constructive criticism and flat out being rude, right? Not to say that your revised pretty little version of telling me that my story is shit is constructive, but it is nicely said.

You're welcome for the English lesson, but you know, I didn't use spell check. I automatically recognized your awful spelling as they're words I use on an every day basis and are second nature in spelling for me. Fan girls are walking contradictions? Really? What do you base that from, the fact that you're just so desperate to make me cry and "see the truth", resulting in my eventually taking my story down?

It's really funny that you should point out the fact that Death hasn't written a single thing since you've been gone when you haven't written a single thing yourself. Does that not also make you a walking contradiction? Talk about the pot calling the kettle black.

Although, if you really know what a good story actually is, why don't you write one yourself? Or are you afraid that you'll be flamed, too? You're obviously very knowledgeable about what good literature is, so why don't you write a story? You know, it's called 'Fan Fiction' for a reason. If you really don't like certain things that people have written about the Predators, why read them in the first place? You really just seem like an attention glutton to me. Maybe you have mommy issues. You should get that looked at.

You really are funny though, seriously. Why don't you put that sense of humor to making others happy instead of sad?

Oh, and it did warm my heart, you�re just so sympathetic toward others who strive put their imagination out there.
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From LordZain on May 20, 2007
B9696; or Baxter, Ha-ha Baxter sounds like the name for a snot nose sniveling little prepubescent virgin, you crack me up man. You�re one of those emotionally challenged morons aren�t you? It�s absolutely fucking hilarious that you feel the need to insult my �manhood� all because I know how to use proper English. And it�s spelt chivalrous you dumb ass, chivalrous. That�s c-h-i-v-a-l-r-o-u-s. I mean Jesus fucking Christ, you would figure that since ninety percent of the post oriented websites on the internet have editing tools that you could learn to spell such a simple word as chivalrous.

I particularly loved the part where you said, �Go get fucked in the ass.� Simple minded idiots like you are a dime a dozen. You think that just because someone speaks proper English that they�re some flaming sphincter spearman. Oh, and something else, low fat cream mocha latte frappachino, I don�t drink coffee. I don�t even like coffee. I bet you think I�m some sort of yuppie fat ass, spending his spare time parking my lard ass in the corner booth at Starbuck�s praying to god that no one notices how lonely and pathetic I am. You crack me up with your simple minded insults, and your lack of creativity. If you were actually walking down the street and you called out at Zellezra insulting her, I wouldn�t even bother putting the frappachino down. I�d walk over there and beat you with it. Then while you bitched and moaned and cried about how hot it was and how much it hurts, I�d pull out an English book and a Dictionary and continue to educate you in the realm of proper respect.

If you think that for one minute I�m going to continue to sit back and let some insignificant little peon like yourself continue to insult the authors of this website, you got a big reality check coming. It�s plainly obvious that you have no literary skill what so ever, you have no stories published at all. You have nothing other then your crayons and coloring books, oh and your low fat cream mocha latte frappachino to cling too. So how about instead of continuing to try, oh and by the way completely failing to insult people and take your emotionally challenged, �Oh my Daddy didn�t love me� self and go find another website to self stimulate yourself too. Because we all know why you�re so very upset at Zellezra�s story, you wanna jerk it to her story but sadly you can�t seem to locate your penis. Ha-ha, what a pitiful excuse for human being. Maybe you are just hoping that I am some flaming spearman and that I�m just going to come on over and spear that little homophobic sphincter of yours.

Well I look forward to hearing more from you Baxter. Next time, how about you start out your posts with, �You know I think that your story could use something more, it�s a little too predictable.� instead of just flat out ridiculing people that have the courage to write and put it out there for people to enjoy. Funny thing about people like you Baxter, you�re not a has been. You�re a never was.

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From on May 20, 2007
so i cant type/spell/be a goddamned liteary genius like u. who said i could? i can still recognize shit when i read it and this is shit, but just for you ill put this in language you will understand since plane english doesnt work with you-

This endeavor is trite and non-scintillating. The progress of your story is long winded, drawn out and predictable and your character archetypes are painfully ordinary. I feel that it in the best interest of all who frequent this site that you take this mockery and sham of a story down post haste before this becomes a standard that will inspire more mindless and unoriginal works.

just liike deaths comment means so very much (who i think left a pretty nasty comment on keens paper), i know my comment warmed your hearttoo. thanks for the english lesson and for spellchekcing somehting you thought was insignificant and unnoteworthy, fan girls are walking condradictions!!!!!!!!!!!! btw give lordzain a bj or something. if i was actually a man on the street calling you a name he might actually put down his low fat cream mocha latte frappachino, pull the dick out of his ass and call me a brute wiht his faggy voice hey death ( who still has not written a signle thing since ive been gone) i came back to tell ladypred her shit sucks ass BECAUSE NO ONE ELSE WOULD DO IT. i mean its seriously painfulll!!!!! but i dont see a whole lot of sympahty for her lol. no words of encouraging words for that bitch hmm? BECAUSE ITS SHITTY AND WE ALLLLL KNOW IT!!!!!!!!
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From on May 20, 2007
ooo! another mr. fancy pants. lord zain=max? another chilvarus prick sniffing around a woman who won't give him any? where is this literary eye you have for other good storys that you dont comment on? lol. there are no comments because this story is gay and you are gay. go get fucked in the ass.
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From Zellezra on May 18, 2007
Thank you Death, you're absolutely right.

Thank you all for your support; it means so very much to me. ^_^
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From DeathGodDist on May 17, 2007
Don't get bent out of shape by Baxter, the fact that he just had to return shows how patheticaly weak he is. :)

Your story is enjoyed by the people who matter, that is all. :)
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From Zellezra on May 17, 2007
Dear b9696,

You know, I really couldn't take your criticism (or rather your berating) seriously. In fact, it made me laugh. How does someone, whose knowledge of literacy being so pathetically limited, feel as though he has the right to tell ME that my story is lame? Or as you put it, "lameass". When did �lame� and �ass� become one whole word? Your spelling and grammar suck. I can see that you skipped class to review my story.

Tell you what; I'll give you an English lesson, free of charge. Here's how you should have written your nasty words to me:

"This is gay and routine, do something to make it different or give up. Every other story is the reluctant couple. He's admired her from afar until finally he sees her in a different light and then they play these fucking romantic games. They are Predators for Christ's sake not some lame ass on Lifetime."

Did you notice the corrections? Don�t feel bad if you didn�t. I'm sure this knowledge is a bit eccentric for your insignificant peon-like brain to absorb, but perhaps you can take it in strides.

And as far as your "They are Predators for Christ's sake" comment, you would have realized, had you read them, that in the comics (like any other Predator fan would), the stories are based around love, compassion, friendship, family, and most of all, honor; Which is a quality you obviously don�t hold to at all.

How dare you go around tearing people�s work and confidence down so easily? I bet that little insult just warmed you right up inside, didn�t it? I bet you�re one of those people who feel as though they�ve actually accomplished something by doing this at the end of the day.

Next time you try to put me or my work down, make sure a spelling guide and dictionary are close at hand.
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From LordZain on May 16, 2007
To the Above Review Posted by: b9696 2007-05-16 id # 3000023895
"this is gay and routine, do something to make it diffrent or give up. every other story is the reluctant cople. hes admired her fromafar until finally he sees her in a diffrent light and then they play these fucking romantic games.they are predators for chhrists sake not some lameass on lifetime"

Dear Sir,
I think it is very apparent that you knowledge of the literary arts is seriously lacking. This is a very well written story that while it's center is based around a romantic situation between two peoples who are very much opposites, it is also surrounded by lush unique environments, great fight scenes and high emotional confrontations. I for one, greatly enjoy the way Zellezra artistically executes her story. She brings forth an emotionally powerful love story, backed by a series of fight scenes that rival some of today's movies.
You seem to think that this story is a series of predicable events laid out before a group of prepubescent emotionally challenged idiots like yourself. For someone who by all obvious accounts can't even formulate a complete sentence, I leave you with this last resounding statement and advice. Stick to crayons and construction paper for your words of encouragement. Because in this place of intelligent and educated beings, you have no place. Well except maybe as the mutt out back locked in a leaking doghouse surrounded by your own sorrows for your lack of literary skills and up to your ankles in your own shit. Good day to you b9696, enjoy your limited days here at Adult Fan Fiction, because as soon as they realize that your nothing more then a snot nose child looking for nothing more then a paragraph to self stimulate yourself, your account will be terminated and your small insufficient life as critic and a review will have ended. Leaving nothing left for you to leave your words of discouragement on but the tiny coloring books that you so desperately cling too.
Sincerely,
Lord Zain
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From on May 16, 2007
this is gay and routine, do something to make it diffrent or give up. every other story is the reluctant cople. hes admired her fromafar until finally he sees her in a diffrent light and then they play these fucking romantic games.they are predators for chhrists sake not some lameass on lifetime
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From Kalar on May 06, 2007
Hi Zellezra. Thank you for the review. I'm going to be doing some revamping on the story. It needs to be refined. So keep checking back for the new stuff. I love this story. I hope you will able to start a new story here on AFF. All of the writer's here are such an inspiration. Have a purrrfect day ,,,=^..^=,,,
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