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Reviews for When the Rum Runs Out

By : Ladykohl

From DARKSTAR1092000 on October 09, 2007
There are only 3 reasons why I don't have have my virtual fangs and claws out right now...I'm sure you're gonna fix the mess you made, Jack isn't real (if the Sparrow-verse were real Elizabeth would have been fish food a long time ago and the best advice anyone could give you would be to run and don't stop...since one little kracken would be much easier to avoid than multitudes of grieving women) and last but by no means least is that you're good. Even bad smut can cause hormone levels rise. Writing something that heart breaking enough to make people cry is very difficult. Making *me* cry is damned near impossible. It annoys me greatly, but you managed to do it. The characters are mostly in character and you struck a good balance between the various aspects of the story. If you have other fic I'll check it out to see if it's a fluke or if you are an author worth specifically looking for.

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From ANON - Mariah on September 28, 2007
Aw man! That story is SOOOOO sad!!! I cried ALLOT!!!
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From UndeadMonkey on September 07, 2007
Oh my god! Oh my god! Oh my god! Oh my god! After a brilliant night out seeing Atonement I come back and find this! I spat out my left over popcorn. Thankyou thankyou thankyou! WtRRO was so emotionally moving for me I've been dying for this sequel, I'm glad you havent forgotten us! I cannot WAIT for it to come, always checking back at this story. =[ I loved it. Seriously, I hope Lizzie comes back :P
Cannot wait,
Your devoted stalker ;)
x x x x
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From ANON - Anon on August 28, 2007
Dearest little one, Miz Kohl lined eyes, I bow deeply to you for the pleasure your story has given me. I have read lots of fanfic (even tried a write or two) and I love, love, love, a twist to the love story some feel for Jack and Elisabeth and Will. You walked a very narrow beam to honor all, not paint Will evil. You hit upon every shade of grey that a woman might feel if she were in Elisabeth's shoes.
Your dialogue is exquiste, you did not misstep with that at all and I adore dialouge that forces me to see my beloveds. I could see them, fragile Jack, strong Elisabeth, and patient loving Will. God to have to face your life, knowing you were shattered and would never recover--god, how hard hard hard for his friends who loved him so. Elisabeth, my beautiful selfish woman, she did indeed love them both didn't she, then finally loved herself more. thanks for all the hard work you put into this story and thank you for sharing this gentle tale about people we have grown to love.
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From sweetdisarray on July 28, 2007
First off I want to say thank you for writing this amazing story! Secondly, I don't think I've been so emotionally attached with any fan fiction story ever. Your portrayal of Elizabeth and Jack were breathtaking. If Jack ever had to show his "real" emotions I think you wrote him perfectly! And Elizabeth was beautifully written, strong and a pirate at heart. I liked how both Jack and Will were able to have time with her and come to an understanding over everything through the bond of loving her. So sad yet so sweet! To end this long rant...I loved Jack at the end, the closure and the fact that he would always be sailing towards her until he was with her again.

I hope that all made sense; I tend to ramble when I love a story. Thank you again for a beautiful story. I can�t wait to see what you write next!

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From avari20 on June 09, 2007
I really should have reviewed each chapter separately, but it's a mark of your talent that I simply couldn't keep from hitting "Next Chapter". All of a sudden it was over with and I couldn't wait to tell you what I thought. This is the first time I've read anything outside of the Harry Potter Fandom, and I must say that you prove without a doubt that it doesn't matter what the subject is, its the author that really moves a story. I've been a secret Jack and Elizabeth fan since the second movie, and though I loved the third just as much, I couldn't help but root for old Jack some more. You wrote him very in character. He's just as charming and dashing in your story as he is on the big screen. I loved the emotions you put into the plot and the ending was just perfect. I even teared up. Thank you for making my first outer-fandom foray so thoroughly enjoyable and memorable.

Well done!
-Avari20
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From BrethlessM on June 01, 2007
I admit to a terrible habit of leaving off reviewing stories after I've read them. They are often only so much dreck. As a writer myself, I can't help but feel the tug of guilt at not responding when I come across talent like yours, so I'm dragging myself out of my stupor to give praise where it is due. Your characterization is wonderful, but as a writer who's a stickler to authenticity in details, I am most impressed with the obvious effort and research you put into this story. I applaud your choice to follow your muse into a bitter ending - it was beautiful in its sorrow, and that's all a good story needs. You've definately got a gift, and I hope you continue to utilize it, to our benefit, of course. Ta, Love!
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From Shelle on April 18, 2007
I am still very much on the fence with a whole Jack/Elizabeth thing. But putting that aside...WOW!!!
This story blew me away!!!!...truly...It was very well written, the thoughts put to paper, so to speak, so eloquently and the relationship between Jack and Elizabeth was heartwrenching.....Besides it being a POTC story, it truly was one of the better pieces of fan fiction work that I've read in a very long time!
I was crying through the last half of the last chapter and for someone's story to do that to me, makes it a story worth reviewing.
Again, kudos to you!
Tari Imp
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From ANON - lauren on April 17, 2007
WOW...wow...
that. was. amazing
i wanted to hunt you down and strangle you at the begining of this chapter for making a story hurt me so personally.
i cried a little.
As soon as I read "upriver" I was cheering
I got the same feeling as I did the first time i saw the end of dead mans chest. Theres extreme sadness and then those last seconds and abrupt ending filled me with abundant amount of hope and happiness and madness because it ended right there!!!
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From JMaX on April 12, 2007
I can't see through the tears to type....I am shattered with a scattering of hope and love tossed in there...Simply devine.

Thank you for sharing!
Best,
JMaX
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From ANON - kerri acheson on April 05, 2007
I just wanted to tell you that was one of the most beautiful and well-written stories I have ever read! EVER! Anger, fear, passion, and intese saddness all in one...it was amazing! The whole time I was reading your last chapter I had tears absolutly streaming down my face...only REALLY good stories can do that...bravo! I like the fact you didnt make it a happy ending, but instead make the ending hav just a glimer of hope so people wouldnt be sobbing for days after they finished reading. I will never forget this story...its was amazing! VERY well done~
~Kerri
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From ANON - ..... on April 03, 2007
I just read your extended Authors note and am glad to hear you are thinking of doing a sequel. This story is and (probably always will be) my favourite fanficts I have EVER read. It captures my emotions so much and every time I am 100% guarenteed to cry. Why? Because you are such a talented writer. It created frustration when Lizzie said she didnt love him and likewise when Jack would not admit his love for her. I cant wait for a part two
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From ANON - Mina on March 29, 2007
Please update ASAP! I saw your story already at the second page. I hope I don't sound as if I was pushing you, I just hope you don't forget about us lol. I read that you were gonna do a sequel. I wish you great luck on that!! Take care!
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From ANON - likebunnies on March 28, 2007
It's been an age and a half since I've read or written any fan fic and this was certainly a great story to find after all this time. Your characterization was beautiful as were your words. Everything was crafted together nicely. Thank you for sharing your talent.
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From ANON - Pirate86 on March 02, 2007
OMG....absolutely the best fic i have ever read!!!! True Talent! Liz and Jack stayed in character the whole time!!! Amazing, Impressive, Brilliant, Clever and i seriously think that this should be a movie!!! U have me in complete tears and i was sobbing uncontrollably with Jack when he was holding dead Lizzie in his arms!!! WOW!!!! WOW!!!! Speechless! And the end was perfect!! Absolutely Perfect!! I'm in Aw! Loved it!
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