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Reviews for The History of Tomorrow

By : vanillalace
  • From ANON - Astaral reaper on November 14, 2006
    love chapter 5 thouge it did kinda seem nwierds that adam fguckewd kell aqnd npot aja...sihgs.well anyway it was still great and u are doing a superb job...but...and this is just and idea...why dont u keep adam and kell together througe half of chap 6 then use aja to get jeaulose and scare adam away in front of kell...well you probaly already have something else down yor so smart oh well thanks 4 the spechail thanks see u on predaphiles.net.;.bye
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  • From ANON - Cara on November 07, 2006
    Well that was unsatisfying.
    :(
    No Ooman sex. >_>
    Lol.
    Interesting, the part about religion and Paya.
    So there's Paya the female counterpart and Cetanu, the male?
    Just like in Wicca.
    So did the Yautja create the humans..?

    And christo Kella haven't you heard of a vibrator?
    Poor Aja. Typical male though, he got off anyway lol.
    So now he knows she wants him...
    Update soon please!!
    -Cara
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  • From ANON - chancelor22 on November 07, 2006
    LOVED IT!!! Really, that's all I can say. Although, it is kinda sad. But, I'm sure they will be together eventually. Can't wait for more! :)
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  • From ANON - Death God Dist on November 07, 2006
    I have to say, the most important earmark of a great writer is one who can provide an attachment or affinity to fictional characters by the reader.

    In this story (and Ripple of Stone), you have brilliantly succeeded.

    The exceptional writing in this latest chapter has only increased the greatness of this story and indeed, the connection with the characters, which were already strong to begin with. Each character has a distinct personality, even Adam, who's been on the scene only a short time doesn't feel like someone who's been thrown into the mix out of the blue - even if secretly, I'm hoping Aja gets rid of him :) - along with Mercedes, they both feel like the belong in the world you've created, along with the rest of the characters of course. I'm now eagerly awaiting the next chapter, to see the repercussions of the latest turn of events. And though I'd love to see it sooner rather than later, I hope you take your time, and give it the proper treatment it deserves.

    And once again, this and Ripple of Stone are wonderful stories that in my eyes, are publishing-worthy material. Most Impressive. (I'm running out of nice words, so I'll stop for now) :)
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  • From ANON - Muse of Scrolls on November 07, 2006
    Oh, my...now THAT was a chapter! Though I must admit I was disappointed that it wasn't Aja, but then where would the suspense and angst be? ;P It's going great, Nalani, please keep it up.
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  • From ANON - shortest_warrior on November 07, 2006
    Great chapter and yeah you are kind of evil, but I like you.

    Hopefully one day it will be Aja she will be with, but if not it is your story and I will still read it anyway.

    I like the interaction Kella has with the kids in the preschool. Not to mention the teasing in the nightclub and the silly new bouncer, I bet he wont do that again in a hurry.

    Anyway keep going Nalani, we all need to see Kella and Aja's relationship blossom into whatever you have planned.
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  • From ANON - Tambourines on October 31, 2006
    ^^ Kella and Aja are wonderful characters. Your plot line is delicious, and your descriptions are good. There are a few quirks, though, that are a little distracting when you read it. Stick to one tense! Don't go from "Kella pours orange juice" to "Kella walked down the hall" or something like that. ^^ It's a small mistake, so just keep consistent. Remember when you write your chapters, ask yourself "is this in past or present tense?".
    Other than that SMALL problem, this is a top-ranking fanfiction. I love your characters and this story, and I can't wait for more! Have a wonderful day!
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  • From ANON - Prairiefire on October 30, 2006
    Yes, yes. I'm late. I know. But I have a good excuse. My muse woke up and she has been pushing me right along. I'll have a new chapter soon. YAY!!!!

    Anyway. This was great. I always look forward to your updates. Despite your disclaimer I think your Yautja hold very closely to the accepted culture and with your own twists they become very believable characters.
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  • From ANON - Anna on October 30, 2006
    This story rocks!!! You must continue. I just love how he just pulled her "pigtail". That was great! I'm really looking forward to reading what will happen next. Keep up the excellent work, and PLEASE update soon!!
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  • From ANON - astaral_reaper on October 28, 2006
    I love this story man you are a good writer hey i wanna khow do you also think the ripple of a stone should never end your way to talented to let that story end god your a good writer.^_^
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  • From ANON - aquamum on October 26, 2006
    Hey, I'm loving this just as much as Ripple.....

    Looking forward to future chapters in both - all I'll have to do as an avid reader - is keep the stories straight in my head LOL!!!


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  • From ANON - Bee on October 26, 2006
    Oh I think it was excellent! I can't wait until the steamy chapter, it will be interesting to see how Kella will react to Aja's advances. Quick question though I was a bit confused by when she said: “I didn’t want your life on my back.” Kella almost whispers. “And I didn’t want to kill you because of what you did to me.” Wouldn't she want to hurt someone who wanted to hurt her? I just wasn't sure what she meant by her statement.
    Looking forward to more!!

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  • From Shalimar on October 21, 2006
    This fic is a great guilty pleasure. Please keep it up!
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  • From ANON - chancelor22 on October 21, 2006
    HAHAHAHA! That was soo cute. I thought it was perfect. I can wait for the steamyness, as long as the rest of the story is interesting. And this one is. And don't forget to update "Ripple of Stone". You promised that you would not drop one for the other! Can't wait for more. :)
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  • From ANON - Kehlan on October 21, 2006
    I really enjoyed this chapter and can't wait to find out what happens next. Cara is right though, don't rush the sex scenes, they will happen when the time is right. I find with strong characters they tend to take on a life of their own and write themselves - don't worry, they will know when they are ready to jump in to bed (I hope its soon though)
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