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By : EvilE

From ANON - Susie on June 05, 2008
OMG! I love this story... So romantic... and having 2 men... and gorgeous ones at that..
Way to go hun! Keep up the good work... you can contact me anytime at slugger69_ss@yahoo.com

Susie
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From TarnishedAngel on March 19, 2008
Hey, Lady Pirate!!

This is just a quick note to say hello and ask how the challenge fic is progressing. If you haven't had time to write I understand, but I would like to know the status either way. I'm posting this here because I don't know your email address, and I don't really care for LiveJournal (no offense). I don't have an account there, and they usually give me this Adult Content Notice. I hit that I'm over 18 (considerably over 18; I'm 32)...sometimes, I'm allowed access to the site I want and sometimes, the screen just remains on the Adult Content Notice. And, I frankly don't have the patience to put up with that nonsense; so, I just steer clear of that website. Anyway, enough with the babbling. I HOPE that life is treating you well, and I HOPE to talk (well, type) to you soon.

Take care!!!

Tarnished

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From TarnishedAngel on January 06, 2008
LadyPirate, you are certainly welcome for my reviews. As I stated in my reviews, this is one of my favorite fics, and I included it in my recommendations. That is actually what made me realize that I hadn't reviewed it when I originally read it. I recently acquired an account here (I've been reading since late 2006), and I have started compiling a list of my favorite fics. I realized that for whatever reason there were some that I hadn't reviewed, and I'm darn sure going to leave a review for any fic that I recommend. Still, it was incredibly nice of you to take the time to acknowledge my reviews. I'm always afraid that I ramble too much. That's why I'm not a writer. I would ramble on and on and eventually bore my readers (heehee).

As for my challenge, I'm thrilled that you are interested in it. Nope, no one has offered to write it. By the number of hits it has gotten, people seem to be curious about it, but that's all.

Okay, I feel that I need to clarify the whipping. I don't mean for Jack and Will to beat her or even draw blood. This isn't like the flogging that Will received in DMC whilst onboard the Dutchman. I think that the best way to explain what I mean is to tell you a story from my childhood. I was spanked and switched (Southern term) as a child. One switching I remember vividly is when I was 8 years old. My grandmother was canning green beans, and I started spinning the Mason jars she was using like tops. Well, the inevitable happened. One of those jars crashed to the floor. Just imagine, glass and green beans and juices from them EVERYWHERE. She was furious, and I was switched with a hickory. Actually, it was a limb off a yellow bell bush, but I remember it. She didn't draw blood, but she left "stripes" on my bottom. It didn't kill me; I didn't grow up hating my grandmother, and I learned a valuable lesson. Don't EVER spin canning jars (heehee). To add insult to injury, she made me clean up the mess too.

I agree that Jack and Will are not cruel, and that they would never beat or abuse Lizzie. I wasn't asking for that either. In fact, I specifically state it in my challenge. Here are the excerpts from it: "A dominant Will and a dominant Jack, but still the decent canon characters that we all know. I don't want Jack and Will to be cruel. Their actions should be about eroticism NOT cruelty".

But, if you can't bring yourself to write it, I can accept a sound spanking in place of my whipping request. I just think the lass deserves some reprimand for what she put the boys through. I like Lizzie, but seeing as I'm a red blooded female, I like Jack and Will more. :) I'm pleased that you think the "dining naked" scene is "playful and naughty". That's precisely the way I wanted it to come across. I find dominant, but decent male characters to be the sexiest, and that's what I want in my challenge.

If you can find time in your busy schedule, I would LOVE for you to be the one to write it for me. I would also be happy to beta the fic for you if you need me too. Thanks again for acknowledging my reviews and especially for considering my challenge!!!

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From TarnishedAngel on January 06, 2008
As promised, here is my review of the final chapter. I like how this begins with Lizzie believing that she is immersed in another of "those dreams" only to find this one is real. Jack's teasing her as she remembers the night before is amusing, and I really like how each man begins to suckle her. I LOVE the moment when they both begin to suckle the same breast, and I really LOVE how that leads to the two kissing. In my opinion, that is the BEST way that I've read to date of a slashy kiss being initiated. And, I mean EVER...in ANYTHING that I have read (not just fanfic). That was steamy...sigh. It was also amusing. I LOVE when Lizzie scolds them for fighting over her and when Jack pinches her bottom as punishment (heehee). Additional points are awarded for the use of the word recalcitrant. It's one of my favorite words. Lizzie is at her feisty best when she refuses to be ignored as the men talk over her. I like Lizzie's "safe between both men she loved" as well as the slashy moments between Jack and Will, but I would have enjoyed seeing both men take her again. My one criticism of this fic is this. I would have liked it if Jack had introduced Lizzie to anal sex. This is a minor imperfection in an otherwise sterling fic.

I don't like Will dying, but I do realize that it makes for a better story; so, I won't criticize that plot point. I like how (even though it leads to his death) Will keeps his DMC promise to his father, and it isn't very far from what actually happened in AWE. Will's honor is my favorite of his traits. And if he hadn't returned for his father, I wouldn't have liked him as much. Jack was sweet trying to take Lizzie's mind off Will's leaving with his attempt to get her annoyed with him. The saddest moment of this fic was when you wrote how Lizzie was still angry with Will, and therefore, she didn't give him a proper goodbye (sniffle). There is a lesson in that for all of us. Life is too short for angry words and grudges. Will asking Jack to look after Lizzie was good. Oh, how I wanted a scene like that in AWE after Will became the Dutchman's captain. The ending with Lizzie placing the chair where Will had placed it was bittersweet. I'm glad that Jack and Lizzie remained together all those years, but at the same time Will's loss was still felt. The "watching" at the end was haunting. All in all, a wonderful fic.

I HOPE that my reviews repaid you in kind for the emotional rollercoaster ride you took me on with this one.

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From TarnishedAngel on January 06, 2008
Here is the review for chapter 2. I like how it begins with Jack drowning his sorrows wondering about what is taking place in his cabin. The conversation where Will and Jack compare notes after the intial consummation of the wedding night is typically male. Will's "Whatever form you like" is a nice way to give Jack permission to ravish his wife (heehee). I like how Jack tries several times to dissuade Lizzie from allowing him to take her. His questioning her about being "sore" is my favorite of the three comments. I LOVE when Will comes in and finds Jack and Lizzie wrapped up together. Your descriptions are wonderful here especially the contrast in their skin tones. I also really like how you revealed Will's conflicted thoughts and emotions about what's transpiring between his wife and (for all intense purposes) his friend. You did a good job of bringing back the idea of a 3 person wedding with Will and Lizzie's conversation about Jack joining them.

The description of Jack and Lizzie reaching completion while Will watched was quite yummy. Jack is amusing with his "disgust" when Lizzie admits she is sore. I like how Jack's experience allows him to correct the situation; so, the fun can proceed. The best moments in this chapter are when both men take her together. Additionally, I LOVE when both men turn controlling. Jack's "...bloody exhausted..." and Will's "use you hands" were really YUMMY!!! Sigh. I like how Jack "gloats" when he can get her to pleasure him orally while Will was unsuccessful at this (heehee). I can just see Jack's puppy expression and childish pout when his says "Please, love,..." (heehee). Come on, who would say no? Will would be difficult to refuse, but Jack would be darn near impossible to deny. I also enjoy how you alluded to the feelings between Will and Jack, but Lizzie continued to remain the men's focus. You had just the right amount of slash in this fic. I'm fond of the J/W/E triad fics, but I don't like those fics that ignore Lizzie in favor of J/W. I can say sincerely that you always kept Lizzie the center of this fic, and I'm glad that you did. The end of the chapter was sweet. I like the idea of them falling asleep all cuddled up together (CUTE!!!). Lastly, I agree with you about the smell of a blown-out candle.
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From TarnishedAngel on January 06, 2008
I read this a while back, and I really enjoyed it. I thought that I had reviewed it under the name Lisa which was the name that I used before I got an account here. I reviewed your "Sparrow's Odyssey" under that name. Anyway, the bottom line is that I never reviewed this fic; so, I'm going to rectify that now. I intend to leave a review for each of the 3 chapters.

I like all the foreshadowing that you include in this fic. It helps make the ending easier to accept (mind you, I said easier not easy). I got a chuckle out of Lizzie's "those dreams". Jack was sweet to offer Lizzie the dress, make himself more presentable and "clean-er" (heehee), and agree to perform the marriage service; even though, it almost killed him to do these things. It shows that he honestly cares about Lizzie rather than just has carnal feelings for her. I also like the blue silk dress you chose over the gold and lace confection in DMC. I like the nod you gave to COTBP by mentioning Jack had dressed "as a man of the cloth" previously. It was "a church cleric" if I remember correctly (heehee).

The marriage ceremony was bittersweet. It was well written and filled with angst. I like how at first Jack kept waiting for someone to declare Lizzie and Will shouldn't be wed, and then, I like how Jack waited for Lizzie herself to admit her feelings for him. I felt that this really was a wedding ceremony where both men married Lizzie, and I believe that was your intention. If so, you certainly succeeded because every time Jack said the vows and Will repeated them it seemed as if both men were saying them to her. It also seemed that as Lizzie said the words to Will, she also said them to Jack because she would look at him as she spoke to Will. The three-way hand holding solidified this point. Lastly, the introduction of humor into the ceremony was good too. I really enjoyed the moment when Will teasingly brought up "You forgot obey" (heehee). I could just see the playful look between the two men and Lizzie's temper beginning to rise (heehee). The best moment was when Jack secretly passed one of his rings to Will to serve as Lizzie's wedding band further proving she married them both. All in all, a wonderful start to one of my favorite fics.
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From ANON - venezia on January 02, 2008
This was brilliant! I love that Jack gives more pleasure to Liz than Will does throughout the whole encounter. And that ultimately they both want Jack. Who doesn't? ;) Classic.
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From Arraya on September 13, 2007
OH MY GOD THAT WAS THE HOTTEST THING I HAVE EVER READ...A DAMN DREAM COME TRUE...there are nowhere near enough Jack/Elizabeth/Will fics. I have only read one other. Thank you so much for writing and posting this. Absolutely awesome!
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From ANON - dramaced on November 09, 2006
Magnificently excruiciating. AWE will never top this!!!
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From ANON - TamarDavies on October 08, 2006
Not only was this increadibly hot and well-written (what a wonderful combination!) but the end, where Elizabeth returned to Jack's cabin and moved the chair to wheer Will had it brought tears to my eyes and gave me chills! I'm not ususally into the threesom thing, but you did an awsome job with it!
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From ANON - Madamx on September 28, 2006
I'm not normally a fan of slash or love triangles either, but I read this because you were the author and I must say you did a great job with it. Very well written and very tasteful. Love the angst. :-)
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From ANON - me on September 26, 2006
wow that was HOT. and you handled the love triangle thingy very well! i normally don't like J/W/E but this was an exception becuase you wrote it very emotionally and realistic. well done.
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