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Reviews for Where Her Heart Truly Lied

By : Kristina01
  • From lost1 on August 15, 2007
    The story was very good. I think you held true to Norrington’s character very well in the midst of strife and trouble. Some of your lines for Jack became awkward, however. You were trying far too hard to get his paradoxes in there and it didn’t really come out right. The last one was very nice though
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  • From ANON - Thespian on August 21, 2006
    Rapunzel you're so gentle! *hugs* Yes! I know! And I agree and HAD thought about the whole marriage issue in the beginning, but really couldn't come by a reason that satisfied me and so I held off. I did know I need Governor Swann to "root for Norrington" so Elizabeth would not have him as an out.

    So you guys know... my next chapter is coming up TOMORROW!
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  • From ANON - Rapunzel on August 19, 2006
    I really do like this story, and I'm eager to find out what happens next, so I hope you'll take the criticism as just an opinion, and a suggestion, and not as someone trying to be hurtful.

    I think the situation you're writing about is a wonderful device, and a great conflict to write around: having Elizabeth being forced to marry Norrington, and longing for Will. But I don't buy the reason she marries Norrington. For me, it doesn't hold water, because in those times, while a gentleman may not break off an engagement as a matter of honor, a lady is certainly allowed to break off an engagement, and the gentleman involved is obligated to acquiesce. She also has her father, the governor no less, to back her up, so if she chose to break it off, she can.

    You need a stronger reason for her to marry Norrington, such as the Commodore reminding her (as you have him do in a later chapter) what he went through on her behalf to save Will, and perhaps, since Will is in trouble with the law again, Norrington can blackmail Elizabeth (not maliciously yet, since I get the sense you don't want him to be quite that nasty at this point) into marrying him, saying he can keep Will from the gallows if she marries him.

    This is just a couple thoughts I had, and nothing that you may have already thought of and rejected, wanting to develop your story and characters in a certain way. I just wanted to let you know what I thought as a reader.

    Again, I really do like this story, and I think it's headed in a good direction, so keep it up!
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  • From ANON - Lindsay on August 14, 2006
    Love it so far! Update soon, please?!!
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  • From ANON - thespian on August 13, 2006
    Oooo, hey look! I can review my own story! Aye, Flower Lady, we may! ^_^ I'm really glad I decided to break this story down. Chapter one consisted of 18 pages on word, so I think its easier on you guys if I update 4-6 pages at a time. Much better on the eyes, methinks! ^^
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  • From ANON - Flowerlady on August 12, 2006
    This story is really good...and different in that Elizabeth married James...

    Can't wait for more...

    Will we meet up with a certain Pirate Captain in Turtuga?

    FL
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  • From ANON - Lily on August 11, 2006
    What a wonderful chapter! I simply loved how he scaled the wall to her bedroom, like a night in shining armor... I hope you add more soon!
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  • From ANON - Firework on August 11, 2006
    Fantastic! I can't wait to read more.
    I'm not a Norrington fan so this is going down well for certain.
    I want to know what happens in Tortuga providing they get there!
    Update soon!
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  • From ANON - Just me on August 05, 2006
    This is very well written but I'm a little confused. Why is Norrington such an asshole?
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  • From ANON - Kate on August 04, 2006
    Great job on chapter two, totally not what I was expecting. This story is so good!
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  • From ANON - Lily on August 03, 2006
    I love this story! I hope you will add more to it. Such angst!
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  • From ANON - rejerito on August 02, 2006
    OMG!!!
    This is great!!!
    You have to continue the story! I really want to know what happens next!
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 02, 2006
    Way to leave it haning!!!! So far you got the Commodore down really well. I kind of a big fan of the Commodore I feel for that man but hey Elizabeth and Will have to be together though?Good story and I feel you captured the characters quite well. Looking forward to the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 02, 2006
    Avast! Y'spelt "governor" wrong a few times, I think. ;) 'Ow did I not notice this when y'showed me in Word? Probably yer scurvy seadog tryin' ter lick my face...

    Yeah, yeah. Shut up, M. Cut the pirate act. REGARDLESS -- jolly good show, chap. We must continue our Keira/Legolas exploits sometime, aye.
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  • From ANON - Kate on August 01, 2006
    You CAN'T end it there! Please update soon!!!
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