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By : prairiefire

From Scarybearhair on August 16, 2007
Chapter 7

That was really sad that Cass lost her partner. Now more than ever, I want to see Burns go down! He�s so vile, I really loath him, indeed much more than Al�brk�vix. I guess it�s because Al�brk�vix is such a coward. �Run away� run away!� lol
I get the feeling though, you will definitely take care of both of them in good time.

That�s interesting about Cass� history. I get the feeling she had lived a really hard life. She�s quite the gritty heroine isn�t she?

Excellent fight scene at the end! Here it started with Al�brk�vix taunting Vek�rin�ka with the loss of his ship. So Vek�rin�ka just takes his. That�s great! I also loved �He would wait until Al�brk�vix skull was hanging in his trophy case.� I guess I know what�s going to happen to Al�brk�vix now! lol

Anyway, great chapter! I�ll be back tomorrow. You really don�t know how much I want to keep reading, but I can�t�I�ll be up all night. I must savor it. :D

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From Scarybearhair on August 15, 2007
Chapter 5-6

Now you see, I was only going to read chapter 5, but since you left such a cliffhanger I just had to continue to chapter 6.

Already I�m kind of sweet on Vek�rin�ka because he is just so honorable. I can�t get a good vision of what he looks like thought. I haven�t seen the original Predator since I was a kid and �Predator 2 I�ve never seen at all. Consequently, I�ve decided to check that movie out.

�Teeming with life,� � how funny! Last year, my geology teacher used to say that all the time. I always worry that�s what going to happen to my kitchen if I leave dirty dishes sitting in the sink too long. lol

Wrk�va�s death was really well done. I felt sorry for him, and I could feel his regret for his poor choices in life. It was moving. You made Wrk�va a sympathic character so effortlessly in just a few lines.

I�m so relieved Kristen is okay. Yay! Burns really is the scum of the Earth. It�s too bad Vek�rin�ka didn�t kill him.

Anyway, great chapters! I�m just so impressed with your story!!

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From Scarybearhair on August 14, 2007
Chapter 4

Again, I can�t say enough how much I love your story! It�s awesome really!

Let me explain: I had this one story that I posted on another site, and whenever I could leave a double cliffhanger, I�d give myself a pat on the back. And if I could leave a triple cliffhanger, well then I was really happy. Of course now I can�t do that since I�m writing my story in 3rd person omniscient, but what my point is, you seem to leave double cliff hangers all the time, and in chapter 4 you left a triple. Wow! Not to mention, we�re dealing with three assholes now instead of just two, because Cach is a butthead ( I hope Vek�rin�ka scares the poop out of him) lol

Anyway, you are so good girl, really! Give yourself a pat on the back! This story is just bristling with action! It has so many connecting plot lines and stories and I�m only in chapter 4. Really Excellent writing!!! I�ve decided to savior it and read it slow because it doesn�t look like you�ve started another story, althoughI do plan to check out �U'sl-kwe� when I am done.

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Typo: �Sir, I think we have a rouge.� I think you meant rogue, right?

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From Scarybearhair on August 13, 2007
Chapter 2 - 3

�It was the natural order of things for females to be in charge. They were smarter than males after all, and the future of any species.� I love it!

As always, I think you handle the action scenes extremely well. This story is so fast paced!!

It�s actually quite fascinating to see our world through Vek�rin�ka�s eyes. I�m really quite intrigued with him. Now, with the way you started, with him watching over Cass like a guardian angle, I want a relationship to develop between him and Cass. Yet I can�t help but wonder what it will be like, them both being two different species. It really is quite a provocative idea. I may have to start reading other Predator stories as well, just because of that intriguing premise.

It�s great that way you have two stories running together at the same time and they�re both so interesting, with two equally despicable villains. I�m really hoping that Cass gets to the little girl in time, and I can�t wait to see how Vek�rin�ka will play a part in this.

Excellent writing, really! I will most definitely be back tomorrow to continue!

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From Scarybearhair on August 12, 2007
Chapter 1

Hi there!

You were so nice to leave me my hundredth review that I thought I would come over here and check out some of your stories before I went to bed. Little did I know that you would be such an incredible writer! Wow! I have only read one chapter and already I�m completely hooked. I�m actually very annoyed I have to get up so early tomorrow because I want to read more.

You have created quite the villain with Al�brk�vix, not to mention that creepy guy in the park. You write so dark and gritty, which I like very much and you do such a good job of getting into the minds of your characters. I almost cringe when I am there.

I also think you write amazing action scenes. That fight scene with Al�brk�vix and Esh�ta was exciting! I can�t believe how I was drawn into it immediately, wanting Esh�ta to win, feeling a sense of loss when it didn�t turn out the way I had hoped.

It sounds like Cass is going to be a mean and touch heroine and I�m already rooting for her already. Great job and excellent writing! Believe me, I will be back tomorrow to read more!!!

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From Kehlan on July 16, 2007
Firstly, I want to tell you how much I enjoyed reading this story and looked forward to your updates. you are a very good writer and the story flows at a good pace. The characters are beleiveable and make you care about them. I will be desperately awaiting book 2.

However, I do have one criticism of your writing style. you have a tendency to change tense, sometimes within the same sentence. It is particularly noticeable in the big fight in chapter 19. You go from "is" to "was" and back again. An example is "The strike is blocked as Al�brk�vix used the ornate weapon" - it should be either "was blocked" or "uses the"

changing tense can work if done correctly, for example writing the entire fight (or the most exciting parts of it) in the present tense can heighten the tension, but you do need to be more consistent.

I hope you don't mind me saying this. your work is good, very good in fact and just a little more care would make it truly outstanding.

Please keep writing

Kehlan
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From DeathGodDist on July 15, 2007
As Shalimar said, it's simply not fair!

Have to wait months to find out what happens? Phooey!

I'm glad though that Cass will perhaps have some chance at having a life. I suppose things really can't go too much further downhill in terms of losing anything, since she has nothing left really, except maybe Vek. :)

Can't wait for the next book.
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From ANON - Nova on July 13, 2007
You apparently had an error when posting this chapter. Its the same as chapter 8.
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From Shalimar on July 12, 2007
Okay, so not fair! This is like a season ender and now we have to wait months to find out what happens next. :-( I'm glad it seems as if Cass at least has a fighting chance to live. Vek's devotion to her promises lots of future problems, starting with how Cass is going to feel about it. One of the things I really like about this fic is that the two of them are drawn to each other by their mutual background as law enforcement officers. This is a very different approach, and it works well to make their relationship progress in a way that seems plausible. I'm looking forward to the sequel.
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From MuseofScrolls on July 10, 2007
Wow, simply an amazing story overall, Prairie. Watching Cass and Vek work together was just incredible. There were times I seriously cried during the story, but mostly it was just brilliant. Cannot wait until you continue it in the next story. ^_^ And Vek and Cass kick such serious ass.
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From ANON - chancelor22 on July 10, 2007
YAY!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO ME!!! THANK YOU SOOSOOSOO MUCH PRAIRIEFIRE. Ok, now that I am over my joy. I must say that I loved it. And I totally cannot wait until you start to post the next installment. I'm so excited. I want to know what the 'unusual' mission is. OO, so excited. =D
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From PrimitiveScrewhead on May 23, 2007
Okay... all caught up now.
Brutal, girl, brutal... But a good finish. a good ass-kicking on both sides. Cass, the poor woman, still had enough guts to get up and whoop ass after all the shit she's been through? Good on her!

I hope to see the latest, and last (?) chapter soon. REally, would like to see this fic extend beyond this... heh, i'm all for vigilante justice. :D Vek and Cass kung-fuing the general populace a'la the Boondock Saints. hehe
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From PrimitiveScrewhead on May 22, 2007
re: chapter 10: dear gods, I didn't even see this!
I suck, i know... I disappeared for a while... I want to keep writing my own fic but I got distracted. heh.

Okay, I"m gonna catch up, i haven't read predfic in almost... 6 months? geez...

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From StoryJunkie on May 22, 2007
good beginning. Lots of interesting elements. Good character development. Pretty hot at the beginning. I could almost smell the humidity. Cocky bastard!
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From DeathGodDist on May 19, 2007
Aw, only one chapter left? Thats too bad. Poor Cass just hasn't had any joy in her life, to lose everything and then to be violated, can't imagine she'd want to live even after all this.

Will be looking forward to the end, as well as any other stories you may choose to right, hopefully. :)
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