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Reviews for One Night: a Missing Moment from The Joiner King

By : Tramp
  • From ANON - Doreen on January 09, 2007
    You should do another one of these pre-Thrawn trilogy when Jaina and Jacen are conceived. I loved this one and the others. Oh, and maybe one of Anakin's (Solo that is) conception.
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  • From ANON - Sofar on January 19, 2006
    Dialogue sounds like something out of a bad porno skit, but it was very descriptive I'll give you that,if you just worked on the dialogue between characters and their interaction with each other it wouldve been a great fic.
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  • From ANON - starlight7 on January 16, 2006
    I rated this so poorly because I see Jacen and Tenel Ka as a couple who deeply love and care for each other. This story wasn't about a sweet, tender love. It was more like two crazy hypersexed people who don't really care much about each other at all. I know this is a place to write adult stories but it just sounded too cheap. It was the dialogue that killed it. You can write a really hot story but what actually makes it hotter is when the dialogue is more respectful and less cheap. This just isn't Jacen and Tenel Ka.
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  • From ANON - Dru on January 16, 2006
    You really need to work on your dialogue. It was straight out of a really, really bad porn movie. It was stilted and fake sounding. Even if this is a PWP you can still have hot, believable dialogue and you just didn't. Nor was this very SW oriented. Basically this could have been ANY man and woman, you just happened to stick two SW names on them. In one word, it was boring.
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