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Reviews for Unpledged Allegiance

By : jennigirl
  • From PKayla on January 22, 2007
    I just read this whole story again and just love it so much. I'd really, really like to see an update to it. I hope you can find yourself once again inspired to return to these wonderful characters and this hot story!!!
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  • From DarkTemplar on January 22, 2006
    "She had to admit that they were a sight to be seen, and she hoped that the rest of the Council would think so as well, as she discreetly pressed a button on a table near the door on her way out. "

    Oh my!!! She is wicked! Again you leave us hanging, but of course that's as it should be. You are the Master! I am loving the progression of this story. I'm starting to feel desperate for these two Jedi. Poor Obi-Wan and Anakin. Sex and tragedy, "Oh dear", as Obi might say.

    Great work!
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  • From ANON - PadwanKayla on January 21, 2006
    Oh, girl - you are taking this story down a wonderful dark path with the delicious pictures your are painting. I can't say enough times how much hot the image of Obi-Wan's tongue swirling around Anakin's is. Love this update!
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  • From ANON - me again on January 16, 2006
    This is pretty rambling, but... here goes.....
    Realized while reading the reviews that I didn't really point out the amazing stuff... which is obvious, and I've said it once before but it bears repeating now. You NAIL the characters!!!! you've captured them as well as Lucas does. You have the unfair advantage of internal monologue, but still..... Even Azkara, nobody's ever even heard of her and within a tiny story the reader just SO GETS how F'N INTOXICATING she is!!
    You SO capture both Obi and Anakin's silent aroogance, which are like polar opposites. These are scenes that make or break an actor's career. These are the scenes that the casting director isolates and uses to screen during casting....
    I do like some of the other fan fiction, and I'm usually the kind that's way more into how a great story weaves in and out, possibly a few times, through the known (movie) stroylines. or what new characters and weapons are developed by the author to enhance the story. But THIS. Damn.
    You do this as well as A.C. Crispin. (Look her up) This is about the biggest compliment you could get from me.
    Really.
    I'm not complimenting you to fluff your ego. At all. You'd get this same review if you were a total stranger. I don't hand out compliments generously when it comes to anything SW.
    Ok, I can't really wrap this up neatly, so I'm just gonna shut up. Rock on.
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  • From ANON - familiarscoundrel on January 16, 2006
    Once again, impressive writing. Not sure if I conveyed this to you: I consider the novels as truth within th SW universe. When I read a less-than-satisfactory story, it feels kinda like blasphemy to me. I don't want to believe it. Although I don't exactly love your story line in "Allegiance" (and can't stand to admit how much "Obi's Lesson" entertained me) your stories strike the same chord with me as does a good SW novel- Good enough to be the real deal, especially when compared to many (I've read MANY) 'let-down' novels. It's almost addictive that amid a sense of satisfaction.... there's a residual craving for more 'truth'.
    One other realization: Although I'm excited to start writing my fiction, and anticipate how cool it'll be, both to write and re-read, I envy you for SO beating me to the punch on this. Happy for it though.... u doing what you love, me getting to enjoy some more of the SW Universe and mostly because you turned me on to this whole thing.
    Keep up the good work,- SidearmKid
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  • From ANON - nick on January 12, 2006
    your writing skills are so excellent! I love all your stories!!! they give me great ammunition to use on my wife. she loves this stuff. sometimes i slip on my jedi robe she bought me , ignite her fx lightsaber, and the force takes care of the rest! I use your writing style, and ideas, combine them with my ability to do voices, and voila! sometimes shes attacked by anakin, or obi wan, qui-gon, even on a few occasions darth vader!!!sometimes by all of them( not at once , they take turns!) it's all because of your sensual , and very descriptive writing style! it's erotic, and sexy and passion all combined!! you have a natural gift ! Please keep it up, then I can do the same !!!!
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  • From DarkTemplar on January 11, 2006
    Phew!!! What energy this chapter has! The intensity of your Obi-Wan blows me away. He's like the ship about to be dashed on the rocks in a wild storm, and Azkara is the rock, and Anakin the lighthouse. Wow! And the way you leave it off, with Obi-Wan and Anakin looking at each other ...Oh my! You must update ASAP, I am so hooked on this. Thank you! I love the rawness you put into this, it's visceral. Most impressed I am. *hugs to you my friend!*
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  • From ANON - PadwanKayla on December 16, 2005
    Great job with this! I love Azkara - she gives new meaning to the term Dark Jedi! She is deliciously evil, that one! And now Obi-Wan knows that Anakin wants him too! Can't wait to see the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - L6E on December 16, 2005
    This is really interesting. Plese write more.
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  • From ANON - Ceri on November 08, 2005
    I liked this

    It suggests to me... what does Obi-wan do to people to make them turn to the dark side????

    And how you portray Anakin is as always a delight - so arrogant but vulnerable all the same
    the banter between him and Obi-wan!!

    And to think that Obi-wan ever has sex hee hee made me giggle for a bit. Might get his hair out of place!

    Yay!
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  • From ANON - PadwanKayla on November 07, 2005
    Silly me not saying anything the first time I read this here. Hope this works as I've never posted a review on this site! You know I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter and just love your OC. Such an intriguing start to the story and I feel priviledged to be able to help you with it!
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