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Reviews for A Focus Of Will

By : tiddlywinks
  • From ANON - Leahcc on July 02, 2014
    Dawww! Poor SAra, at least now there is a chance for a happy ending. ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 15, 2008
    That waa 'effen amazing and I just wish it could have gone on end one... *clears throat* you get the idea.
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  • From Amaris on December 21, 2007
    that was wicked hot. i love the fact that you brought out a little of the dominatrix i think sara always had inside her.
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  • From ANON - Saedy on August 16, 2006
    the only thing i can think of is at one Jareth says something along the lines of: make you bitterer and harsher as time goes on...
    as anal as i know it is, it really should be harsher and more bitter. i can't imagine jareth with bad English skills! :D

    i really enjoyed reading it!
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  • From on June 23, 2006
    OH my FREAKING god i love it! srry but its like midnight and i cant say much but i will say I FREAKING LOVE IT!!! lol, all around great just a couple spelling errors but hey who am i to complain, im not a good speller at all!, thanks for the great story
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  • From ANON - Robin on February 09, 2006
    Hey,
    Overall, I think this is a really good piece. You do capture Jareth's mood very well: that sort of haughty "I'm so gorgeous I'm always in control" vibe...
    However.
    There was one phrase that just... well, it jarred. To the extent that I blinked, looked away and had to read it again to ensure that I had actually seen it.
    "Flipped her hair Pantene style."
    AAARRRRGGGHHH
    The rest of your writing is elegant and evocative... and then there's "She flipped her hair Pantene style." What were you thinking?
    Robin
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  • From ANON - Jags on December 28, 2005
    Very good! I want to see more but you did Jareth very well.
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  • From ANON - Crystal Magic on December 26, 2005
    Sooo good! I like the twist that she can no longer love because she broke to perfict love dream. That in order to not become a cold hearted person, she will have to lean to love though.... very good! The smut is good to!
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  • From ANON - gundam06serenity (too lazy to log in) on November 25, 2005
    ^_^

    0.0


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  • From ANON - Kat on November 21, 2005
    Amazing, darling. Simply wonderful. One of the best smutfics i've read in quite some time. Kudos.
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  • From on November 14, 2005
    Hey. Just wanted to say that I liked the 'kitten' nickname he gave her. I thought it was really cute. ^^ Loved the story! A bit short, but still very good. I was a little concerned at first, about the length of the chapters, but it all turned out great. And... I think there could be a good sequal to this. Just an idea. I know it's hard to write sequels and it's usually better to just leave it be, but I think a sequal for this would definately fit. ~Hatori~
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  • From ANON - Emeraldfire on November 10, 2005
    Beautifully done! The best I've read yet.
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  • From ANON - AnAngelInHell on November 08, 2005
    I loved it! It was so hot, Jareth was completly in character!
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  • From ANON - Jen on November 03, 2005
    I've never read this pairing before - or this group, even though I'm a HUGE FAN! I just have to say that despite some small nitpicky writing things, the characterization of Jareth is UNPRESCIDENTED. I want to read more of your Jareth. Much, much more! Bravo. :)
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  • From ANON - Wilder on November 03, 2005
    This was really well done and insightful i think. I love Jareth and Sarah just seemed to... whiny? but you explained that and i think portrayed the characters really well... plus of course, good lemon...
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