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Reviews for Time Wasting

By : Dakarne
  • From ANON - Kitterpillar on November 27, 2006
    Um. Wow. That was just...I'm speechless. I hope Bastila enjoys that case of flesh-eating bacteria as much as she did the anal-to-vaginal sex without the benefit of a shower stuffed in there somewhere. Because, you know, that's what happens. I guess you'd know that if you weren't a virgin who wrote this after looking up sex in an encyclopedia. This reads like a really bad medical journal.

    ALSO.

    Vagina is not important enough to capitalise.
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  • From ANON - jtav on February 06, 2006
    This has potential but needs a lot of work. You use random captials and there are several other grammatical mistakes. I don't think you spend enough time describing anything; nothing feels erotic because it's so rushed. The premise has potential, but I think you cheat yourself out of an oppertunity for real sexual tension by not describing the pazaak game. Please don't take this the wrong way. I wouldn't make these suggestions if I didn't think the fic was completely worthless.

    Oh, and Bastilafan, if you know of any other Bastila anal sex fics, could you let me know?
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  • From ANON - Bastilafan on January 08, 2006
    Bastila getting fucked in the ass is always good, but you need more detail. It was a good start, but you can flesh out the sex scenes a lot more, and use more description than simple "he stuck his penis in". Use more adjectives, and different words - i.e. 'member' or 'cock' etc etc.

    Other than that, nice. Like I said, Bastila + anal = instant win. There's depressingly few Bastila fics on this site.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 08, 2005
    The world needs more KOTOR lemons, keep going
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  • From ANON - Dark Shadow on July 14, 2005
    Well hot fic finally a Revan Bast pairing don't see 'em often
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  • From ANON - Phantom on July 14, 2005
    Not bad.

    Was that appropriate use of the Force?
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  • From ANON - jojo on July 13, 2005
    great story - loved the chracters and the "action" lol was very hot
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