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Reviews for The Darkness Comes For You Series 1: Longing

By : Alyndrya
  • From ANON - The8thSin on July 07, 2006
    Kick ass,David's a sadistic bastard just like the real thing.update soon...?
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  • From ANON - kili087 on October 29, 2005
    ohhhh...I love the story its....wow!
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  • From SereG on October 28, 2005
    I. Want. MORE!!!!
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  • From ANON - lena on September 26, 2005
    I thought this was an intriguing idea, but it could have been better executed. I've been a huge fan of this movie for years, and to me the characterizations were pretty cardboard compared to how they thrive in the movie and how I've seen them portrayed in other fic. I'd love to see better use of the humans than just being there for the aftermath...how does this affect /their/ lives? Technical things really got to me, as well..if Michael had broken ribs he probably wouldn't be able to stand talking for long, or walking around the way he does. I'm anal about spelling and grammar so I'll cut slack there, but the town is Santa CarLA, not Carlos, and Laddie's name isn't even spelled right. And we never find out how Max is suddenly killed if he doesn't show up to the house (and it's head vampire, not master vampire). If this is an experiment in writing m/m, that's cool, but give the fandom it's due. To be fair this is a hard fandom to write well, though the vampire bits are done well. I could have done with less recycled movie dialogue. The claiming aspect is a great angle, that would be very David, and I like bits of how that's portrayed in chapter 2. The smut has a lot of potential, but it just doesn't have the oomph that seems to be needed. I'd like to see more to see what's going to happen, and if the humans are used more, there could be great blackmail potential there. Keep it up but please go watch the movie again. All in all it's a decent start but a little lackluster.
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  • From Rina76 on August 18, 2005
    You're doing a wonderful job with the Male/Male scenes, if I may say so. I did not know they were your first! You got the right amount of tension and hotness there. Everyone is so in character too. I definitely want to read more.
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  • From ANON - skittle on July 21, 2005
    hey update already
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  • From ANON - Aray on July 03, 2005
    great
    david should kidnap mike and star
    but faLL IN LOVE W/ MIKE
    and keep satr prisonor to make sure mike listens to him
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  • From ANON - aray on June 30, 2005
    great
    can't wait for ch. 2
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  • From ANON - FerFer911 on June 17, 2005
    Very nice begining. Please continue.
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  • From ANON - Rankai on June 14, 2005
    Great story! I hope you update soon!
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