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By : nuit

From ANON - ms_erupt on August 02, 2005
Holy shit, three years?! Sorry, just had to get that out of the system. Now on to a real review type thing.

This chapter has to be one of the best yet. You weren't kidding about picking up the pace. Evie has been thrown right in the thick of the "battle" so to say, between the coppers and the Gang. Well, the coppers and the Irish in general. =/ I wanted to cry when she had to leave. Just like that her whole life has been uprooted because she went out on a limb. *gives up and cries*
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From ANON - LSDL on August 02, 2005
This has been an absolutely stunning debut, nuit. The richness of characters and dialogue, the politics, the effort to ensure a sense of historical accuracy - it has been beautiful to read. This latest installment (love the chapter title) is so powerful. The interplay between Michael and Joe is fantastic - Joe comes across as so strong and yet finds it unnecessary to use physical force against Michael. Evie's and Joes relationship finally gets an inner core that you really feel has more than physical attraction to it - shared history and experience (as well as him having those curls - damn that man!). I can;t wait for the next installment.
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From ANON - Steph on July 21, 2005
Oi!! That was fantastic nuit... brilliance. I want to say this one thing before I fall asleep on the keyboard: it feels so intense when you write it. I cant really put it into a method or style that you have- i cant name it. But it feels so distinctly real and different that it makes me shake my head in wonder! Bravo!
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From ANON - ms_erupt on July 16, 2005
Finally another chapter. I've been going crazy with wait. *does a little crazy dance to demonstrate* Anywho...

Favorite part of the chapter, the way you describe Joe's kiss. Wow.
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From ANON - unplugged32 on July 14, 2005
I swear I was holding my breath while reading this!! Oh my...the scene in the cellar was simply brilliant!! Innocence, fear, longing, regret...so many emotions there, so beautifully written. I can't wait to read the next part because you've literally left us hanging, wondering what/when/how something will develop between them:)
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From bluemagic132003 on July 14, 2005
SPOILERS BELOW

Sigh. Is just brilliant, Nuit. A few of my favorite bits:

"Full pelt into me �crimes� which now I think on it were nothing more than refusing to be anyone other than meself, but then maybe for me Ma that was enough."

I won't copy the whole speech but really every character is so alive. I can hear her mother's haranguing tone and its contrast to her fathers.

"You could feel the bristle in their beards"; "those coppers� eyes wouldn�t have missed a fourth leaf on a clover at 100 yards, "

I have no idea how many of the sayings you make up vs what is historical, but either way I feel as if you must have lived in Beechwood to know them all so perfectly. There's never a wrong note.

Well me mouth went all dry, he was all around me, well that�s what it felt like any how, the warmth and the scent of his body hitting me as his jacket fell open. A flick of MY eyes down that, God help me, I am sure I did mean for him to see.

You are brilliant at the sensual - by which I mean sense-filling details. warmth and scent - you bring the reader right there.

I won't quote anymore b ecause I feel it would do it a disservice. But I want to say that the fullness of Joe shows up. His determination, his kindness, his intelligence, his flirtiness, his hunger, his ability to be taken by surprise by her, his anger, his sweetness. Oh, Joe....

Evie continues to be one of the strongest, most unique voices I have ever read. I can't begin to say what an honor it is to get to read it and I can't wait for more!

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From ANON - Frejia on July 10, 2005
Fantastic story, please don't end it here. I'm very excited to see what happens between Evie and Joe ^^

Hugs,
Rie
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From ANON - Steph on June 22, 2005
FANTASTIC NUIT!

five stars *****

I loved that last bit!! Ack cant wait till the next addition- you are brilliant!!

Steph
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From ANON - me on June 06, 2005
Well I am trying to review, but can barely see the screen. Your dialogue and relationships are so true to life, what it is like between young women, and young men, sharing confidences/ egging each other on, as in the case of Aaron and Joe maybe. really well done, took me back a while. It's not that though strangely, that affects me most, here it's your throw away phrases that say so much. Every sentence is a treasure.
For instance chapter 3, Joe weighing Evie by different scales, what a profound interaction, a sexual moment, a second when everything was communicated but nothing was said . Here her reaction to saying his name, yes something I (and most of us no doubt) can definitely relate to. The drunkards leaving the tavern and going home... 'well as far as they could get'.. each of these half sentences conjures a whole world and just stabs me to the core. I loved your closing sentence to this chapter, such a subtle teasing, perfectly Joe Byrne way of imparting information. Phew, love him to death but Evie's going to have to get her strength up to be a match for this bugger. Brilliant. Hey don't update too fast, it takes a while to digest it all. :) but yes another fantastic chapter.
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From ANON - ms_erupt on June 06, 2005
Hey. *waves* I don't know if you recognize me from the OL board, but just popping in to say that I love your story. It looks like you actually took the time to so a little research with the history of the Irish in Australia, the politcs etc. Anyhow, I hope keep on hammering this one out until the very end.
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From ANON - unplugged32 on June 02, 2005
This story is so gorgeoulsy written I am in awe. The descriptions, the details, all so wonderfully done you can't help but magine you are right there, on the sidelines, watching it all unfold. The scene where the two girls are discussing their most intimate secrets is simply perfect; awkward, endearing, makes you ache for their innocence and the loss of it. Joe is a character I love and you write him spot on. To me, the mark of a good story and a good writer is getting the characters to ring true and you've managed to not only write a perfect Joe, you've enhanced the character with little traits that fit him to a tee. Bravo!! A beautiful tale that has me fully captivated and on the edge of my seat waiting for more.
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From ANON - Jessia on June 01, 2005
I'm really enjoying your story. Your subtle use of dialect is very well orchestrated. I also like the way you made your OFC a real person instead of a Mary Sue. Keep up the good writing; I hope you post more soon.
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From ANON - me again on May 28, 2005
Absolutely wonderful. The characters of everyone come through in your words and dialogue. Aaron, Maggie the coppers, and especially the original ones, which is great skill. Tom who owns the bar, Evie of course and both her parents. not necesarry for you to describe these people in aphysical way because the reader gets such a vivid impression of them in their owm imaginations anyway.

You use expressive similes and metaphors, from the short 'working like wombats' to 'cautious of stepping in abog he was just beginning to see the edge of. Everything you write is so real, the girl talk with Maggie to the erotic voyeurism of the sex scene, Evie's jumbled emotions on the matter to Maggie's feelings.

You write the religion well. The Hail Mary's linked to rhythm of the lovemaking were spot on as were Evie's feelings and turmoil at confession.

I loved the way you used history lessons for the reader and the social injustice, to link Evie's Dad with Joe's father, to give them a link and a shared past and fate and a reason to give Joe an inborn sense of justice and rebellion and Evie another reason in her mind to draw close to Joe, despite her worry about the ethics and morality of it all and her concern for Maggie.

It's brilliant. I know you're only up to chapter 3, but I would place bets on this winning all awards for best Joe Bryne fanfic ever. And that's how it should be.
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From ANON - bluemagic on May 26, 2005
Well the story takes my breath away, and it�s hard to pick out pieces when it makes me feel as if I am living inside it but will do my best.

I love the nerous Spring and Evie�s mortification at seeing Joe and Maggie and how worried she is that he will see it in her face � which knowing Joe, he probably would!

Me Ma, who never could stand a silence however full it was already, was intent on jamming it with all sorts of words that I can�t now recall � this is such a fantastic visual image about something that is sound.

You do an incredible job of conveying a lot of historical information and family background while never losing the tone or the sense of a father talking to his daughter � which I have to say I think is where the genius of the chapter lies.

The honest and vulnerability with which he speaks to his daughter, they way they love one another and take care of one another, is just exquisite. I can�t wait for more.

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From ANON - Mywiel on May 24, 2005
This story is absolutely great. Please go on. M.
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