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Reviews for Shrek, Fiona, and donkey I

By : Junkey
  • From RadiumEyes on August 06, 2007
    Absolute crap. Never write again unless you go take a god damn class.
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  • From anacsadder on June 24, 2007
    First of all, it's ironic, because I was just watching the movie a couple hours ago and I was coming to this site to see if anyone had done anything with that scene. I see I wasn't the only one who was contemplating the mechanics of such a relationship.
    First thing I want to say is that it was not aweful. PWPs are fine, I do them all the time, and I've either written or read weirder shit than this. The problem comes from it being far too short and really rushed. I know you said you were in a hurry, but you still could have spent some more time with this before you posted it. There are all kinds of delicious details you could have gone into. I mean, look how tiny Fiona is compared to Shrek. The mechanics of it alone boggle the mind. Surely it would have been fun to work with... And while I know how difficult it can be to get some pairings off the ground quickly when doing a PWP oneshot, that whole "Want to fuck" "Yeah, sure, okay" thing still could have been hammered out better.
    Like I said, though, not aweful. In the future, however, if you're writing a PWP, I feel you really should slow down and contemplate the details. What's the point of doing a PWP if you're not going to dive deep into the porn part?
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 29, 2006
    gay
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  • From ANON - Another Commentator on October 26, 2005
    This is just what the author said it was. He wrote it quickly and was asking for CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM! Not a bunch or pretencious fools who think that the only way a story is to be, is the one way that they imagine it. Now that I've said that. The story is really short and saddly enough i could see this happening (nowhere near this quickly though). If all of the fools who rip on this writter would at least think outside of their tiny bubble world for more than half a second, then they would realise that this in more actuallity than they would seem to think about, is that these types of stories are increadibly similar to stories that include furries, or any NON-HUMAN char. And finnally I will admit that this story is short and could be well written, but I will say as well, that there are FAR WORSE stories on this site! The writing definately needs some work, but nowhere near what these A***OLES seem to think. Them and their 'morals'. *maniacle laughter*
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  • From ANON - SheerLust on October 08, 2005
    What the fuck is this shit that you're trying to write? I have seen very poor work before, but this just takes the cake! Why do you even bother putting this on this site? The plot, what plot? There is none. If you want to write PWP come up with better shit than this.
    You need to get a life and then come back and write some more. Maybe if you get fucked up your ass you'll be able to write better crap than this. You make me sick, you cock-sucking asshole. Go fuck your mother up her massive white ass!
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  • From on September 11, 2005
    J: and one more thing i forgot to say. Max, you are a prick. FUCK YOU! If they were human it would destroy the whole fucking point. For fuck's sake there are enough human fucking human stories to fill your mother's cavernous asshole. I applaud junker for not being such a pussy and having it take place when they're human. If they are both human, it might as well be any other two characters.

    B: Also I like how one of the reviews is from "Anon" and it reads "...." What the fuck!?! Nobody says nothing!?!?!?!?! thanks for the review dumbass it really made a differance.

    J: I second that. If you don't have something interesting to say, don't say anything at all. Fuck you, Anon. If everyone thinks this writer is an uncreative, talentless, lump of liquid shit, what does that make you?
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  • From on September 11, 2005
    B: Before we actually review this gem we wuld first like to brutally rip into these ass spelunkers who are flaming this fic. FUCK YOU! some of you ass holes are taking the fucking moral high ground saying this is fucking wrong! Your on Adultfanfiction for christ's cock! Check out our fic "Bad Nut" to read a REAL sick fic.

    J: Hey, if this dude wants to make a PWP, that's fine. You fuckers can go read your 20 chapter porn novels, where aragorn and snape fall in love and live happily ever after. Do you pricks actually think this is sick? It's just a girl fucking an ogre and a donkey. The worst they do is anal. I read sicker shit than that before kindergarten. Now you're all gangin up on a noob writer because you think you're fucking artists with your porn. Fuck you all in your anal retentive assholes.

    B: Assholes aside, this fic was short and to the point, kinda like my penis. I could tell yu wernt really interested in the long preamble, were they gradually fall in love. Adding little innuendos to spice it up. I apprietiate your directness. I love the sandwich line. Oh yes im hungryOWWWW! that was so funny i creamed my self Rock on you keep doing your thing and wipe your sweaty balls on these other chode licking rectal moles!

    J: I'll be the Ebert to B's Siskel. If you want to make a PWP, that's cool, but I feel in that case, you should try to be a little more graphic. Example: "Fiona screamed herself hoarse as Shrek's mighty green manhood penetrated her innocence." Of course, I've seen much worse on this site so I'll cut ya some slack. Work on it.

    B: Work on.. YOUR MOM!!! AHHHHH!!!!!! GET IT!!! *maniacle laughing*
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  • From ANON - Ecstasy on August 03, 2005
    This was utterly disgusting and wrong.
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  • From ANON - Max on July 18, 2005
    that story was great and it would be greater if it had more parts to it. Also it would be nice if it had more parts with Shrek and Fiona HUMAN.
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  • From ANON - ... on June 23, 2005
    absolutely horrid crap. I can't believe you deemed this worthy of posting.
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  • From ANON - Jennifer on June 07, 2005
    Poorly, written.
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 04, 2005
    .....
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  • From ANON - Elizabeth S on May 02, 2005
    that was so fucked up..............but I found it incredibly fucking funny too.

    Not many shrek fanfics....why not type some more?
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  • From ANON - Mercika on April 29, 2005
    Well ... uh ... it would of been better if you added a plot, or something to make it sound convincing that they'd suddenly do that. Couple of spelling mistakes, could I suggest a BETAer? Try, try, try again! Good Luck.
    ~ Mercika
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  • From ANON - THE FLAME on April 12, 2005
    HOLY FUCK! THIS SHIT IS SICK!! VERY BADLY WRITTEN TOO
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