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By : Breech_Loader
  • From ANON - Rizzy on November 22, 2016

    so I found this story very intriguing, and I wish that you would be willing to continue. I really want to see how this twisted relationship between Barricade and Bumblebee will progress. ^w^


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  • From Dragolover2 on July 08, 2011
    Just re-read your story for the tenth time. When are you gonna post chapter 6? I wanna know what sexy tortures Barricade will put Bumblebee into next! Update ASAP, please!
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  • From ANON - Bro on July 12, 2009
    Wow did not see that coming, that was really interseting. I love the way your writing this. Can't wait to read more.
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  • From Supermoi on June 04, 2009
    Haha! It was hot! Bee and Cade ^w^
    When do we get to see more pairings? Not that I don't like BB/Cade, but I'M a crazy for Master/Slaves stories, and the more the better!
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  • From ANON - Dampsefi on May 12, 2009
    Oh my! You just have to continue this you know that don?t you? Pleeaaasee!
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  • From ANON - Supermoi on May 05, 2009
    O.O Soooo hot! That's really a good start! I LOVE it! (And yay for Sam'ds death! >.
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  • From ANON - E on April 30, 2009
    Still love it!
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  • From ANON - E on April 29, 2009
    keep up the great work.
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  • From NovaAlexandria on April 25, 2009
    The avoidance of pain is a common reaction. There is no call for being noble as there are no questions being asked and thus no one to betray. So the desire to avoid that pain is unchallenged. Something I can see is 'bee being forced to watch while one of his companions is tortured in the cell next door, a reminder to why submitting is a good idea.

    It is also amusing to watch people squirm. To submit their bodies to a torment while mentally going insane. Doing anything to avoid the pain.


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  • From ANON - e on April 23, 2009
    plaese write more
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  • From Dragolover2 on April 23, 2009
    Excellent chapter! Maybe later, WAY later in the story, you could show Barricade and some other 'Con force Bumblebee and their slave to 'face with each other. Like Prime or Jazz or 'Hide. Those are the three I really want to see with Bee. You can throw Ratchet in there so he doesn't get lonely. Doesn't even have to be just one Autobot. Yeah! Have the 'Cons force an Autobot orgy, that'd be awesome! Like I said, all up to you. Update ASAP!
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  • From Scienceteacher on April 22, 2009
    Doubt you'll leave this review up. I've been trying to quietly go through the moderator via direct email - but she's had some issues that have kept her from doing much on the net as of late.

    First chapter of this story: http://movies.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=500000016

    Is eerily similar to sixth chapter of this story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4216592/1/Rapt...4_Into_the_Fire

    Look at the publish dates. The other one was published a year ago and last updated 10 months ago. I actually had to read several stories to find the scene that seemed so eerily familiar.

    By the way the third chapter of this AFF story is very reminiscent of a story involving Wheeljack. But I can't remember which FF author wrote it. I'll search through my FF favorited authors this weekend and see if I can't find it. But the similarity is VERY striking in all the action/plot in that chapter. Second chapter also reminds me of a fic I've read on FF last summer - but I don't think I favorited that one so I doubt I can find it. I'll look when I have some spare time.

    Oh wait, think I found the other story you seem to be tracking a tad bit too close to: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4206547/3/A_Spark_Torn_in_Two A lot of scenes and general flow of plot (AKA an Autobot being tortored by all the cons until he 'falls for' the one con who wants him) are eerily similar.

    Guess your 'rewriting' whenever you find 'inspiration' by a FF torture story involving other TF canons. Unfortunately, your not changing the action enough to avoid plagiarism in my opinion. Or maybe you've got a picture memory and the prior stories you've read get mixed up with your ideas - but you're still writing them too darned close to the original.

    Improve on your own merits, not those of other authors

    Granted, I doubt you'll leave this up here. You don't want your readers to check out these 'eerily similar' stories which haven't been updated for almost a year - now do you?
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  • From ANON - Kuroba on April 22, 2009
    This is excellant! The inner sturggle in Bumblebee makes it very interesting to read =)
    And I see you're into co-writing =3
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  • From NovaAlexandria on April 19, 2009
    The evolution of your writing is clearly expressed when you read Shadows of Tomorrow and then this. The sentences and paragraphs are a million times cleaner and much better writing. I definitely look forward to continuing to watch the evolution. And yes, some part of everyone loves suffering, so keep it coming.
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  • From ANON - Bro on April 15, 2009
    Oh man poor BB, but damn that was a good chap. I love they way you write!
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