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Reviews for Prime Objective

By : PhoenixXxCat
  • From ANON - Piper on January 05, 2005
    Love the interactions, the flow of the story is fantastic and I'm having no problems following. Please do update soon.
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  • From ANON - Selina on November 03, 2004
    Ooops, type errors.. I meant OFC. Can't wait to the next chapter!

    Hugs,
    Selina
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  • From PhoenixXxCat on November 02, 2004
    Thank you kindly, Miss Selina, to take some time out to comment on my story!

    1) What's an OOC? In my online experience it has meant "out of character"?... I'm sorry if it makes readers unhappy, but yes, I fully intend on bastardizing to my own selfish, naughty whims... (And I'll explain in the story, too, how it comes about.)

    2) I will certainly take your nicely-put critiques into consideration. I cannot promise I will take them, though. Yes, I did make my Cat persona into a goddess-type. Mary Sue and whatnot - but that is because it is my fantasy. I will certainly think about roughing her up, at least for some part of the story.

    3) Cliffers ers - I'll try to throw in whenever possible. Eventually, all-out smuttiness ~will~ ensue, however! But we have a while to get to that.

    I am currently waiting on my friend to type the next chapter. There ~will~ be revisions as this is still quite a rough draft when I post the chapters. And then I go back and fix sometimes - when I realize I wanted something changed. But I am still having much fun with it.

    Thanks for stopping by!!! Yes, go Latinas! *gg*
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  • From ANON - Selina on November 02, 2004
    Oh. I didn't realize that you've already seen 'Tango'.

    Btw, that smacking Smith's ass thing - it was priceless!
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  • From ANON - Selina Enriquez on November 02, 2004
    My Dear,

    What an outstanding chapter! I like this store more and more. Can't wait for updates.

    "This form can simulate human functions as required, Ms. Hex."

    Really nice one. Keeps you thinking ;-)

    I also like the story because I am half Latin (Brazil) and my book, 'Tango With An Agent' has a main character, Helena, who reminds me of Cat. She's also Latin. Latinas rule the world YAY! :-)

    However, I must give you some critique, if you don't mind. Take it as a constructive critique - because I love your story and have nothing bad to say. Just some suggestions.

    1) Try not to make Smith an OOC. He is Smith and must remain Smith. At least for a while. ;-)

    2) Some may say that Cat is a bit...Mary Sue. I think that some people would complain a bit about her perfect looks, which you describe a bit much, IMO. She is almost a Goddess. You see, when I started Writing 'Tango With An Agent', my character Helena was a bit of Mary Sue too. Perfect looks, perfect lips, smart and all that stuff. So I took her down from her piedestal, shoot her, made her a bit hysterical and dirty. I made her a bit more human. Perhaps it would be a good idea to give Cat some challenges, to would her a bit, etc. And then, Smith can come and save her from all this mess ;-)

    3) Try to give readers some cliffhangers. Cliffhangers are very good for a romantic story. Just as readers think that things are about to get hot, you finish the chapter, leaving them on the edge of their seats.

    4) Perhaps you should take a look at 'Ta? ;-? ;-)


    All the best,
    Selina


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  • From ANON - Cecilia on October 27, 2004
    Just two words, WRITE MORE!


    C.
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  • From PhoenixXxCat on October 27, 2004
    Ladies, Ladies, Ladies!!!

    Thank you sooooo much for the encouraging reviews. I know this story must "sucketh muchly" in comparison to many others you've read. I wasn't going to try ~too hard~ on making it good.

    But again, I am having fun writing it. I am going mad with the power to bastardize that SexXxy Agent Smith to my own eeeeevil naughty ends! Bwa ha ha!!! And if anything, I hope you all have fun reading it.
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  • From ANON - Cecilia on October 27, 2004
    Well here I am girls, at it again. This is your faithful reader here with another review!
    I'm intrigued to say the least. Did I detect a little more than just a slight attraction to Jonathan on Cat's part? I sure hope not, or there could beubleuble.......can't wait for the next chapter!

    C.
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  • From ANON - Selina on October 25, 2004
    Dear Cat,

    It is my pleasure to invite you to our new Agent Smith Community.

    It's a place for all Smith fans to meet, share, discuss and create. There's Fan Art, Fan Fiction, RPG and a lot more.

    And it's all about Smih.

    Go to this link to join it:

    http://selina.suddenlaunch3.com
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  • From ANON - Cecilia on October 21, 2004
    Hurray! An update! Poor Cyren and Jonathan. The Matrix's version of Romeo and Juliet. Starcrossed lovers indeed! Please continue, this is getting very interesting. I one complaint: Where is Smith? I hope he makes an appearance in the next chappie!

    I do like the whole starcrossed storyline, too. Good job girls! Keep it coming.

    C.
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  • From ANON - Cecilia on October 18, 2004
    Hello,

    Did you fall off the face of the earth? Where's the update, woman? I may be the only one reviewing this story, but I happen to think that there's alot of potential here! I don't want to rush you or anything, but get going! I have to know what's going to happen next!

    C.
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  • From ANON - Cecilia on October 12, 2004
    Just wanted to let you know that this is a fab story! A little far fetched, especially the part when Cat smacks Smith delicious ass. I think that movie Smith would have put a bullet between her eyes, but hey this is fan fiction, and with fan fics we can do whatever the hell we want with the characters we love! Love the fact that your lead female is a Latina! I'm a Latina too, so I can totally identify with Cat. Keep up the good work, hope to see an update soon (with some smutty sex scenes, por favor).


    C.
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