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Reviews for I should not have done that...

By : DarkSith
  • From ANON - Tramp on August 14, 2006
    I have to agree with jessica on expanding the story a bit more and fleshing it out. Some of the dialogue is out of character for Bastila though. As far as her being a virgin. Given the amount of physical activity she would have gone through in her training as a Jedi, that can break the hymen, as can horseback riding and other strenuous activities such as Martial Arts, gymnastics among others. So, even if she had never had sex before, it is possible that her training would have resulted in a broken hymen, and thus no pain on her first time. It should also be noted that the Jedi Order, as a whole during this era did not frown on marriage or families among Jedi. Many of the Jedi of that era were married and had families. Nomi Sunrider was married to a Jedi before ever becoming a Jedi herself, and did so after her Jedi husband had been killed. Ulic and Cay Qel-Droma and Dace Diath were all sons of Jedi. Ulioc and Nomi had developed a serious romantic relationship before he fell, and she never really stopped loving him. Thus, While Bastilla's Master may have been against romantic Attachments, that was not the standard throughout the Jedi Order during this era. That did not become standard Jedi practice until following the Battle of Ruusan, 1,000 BBY. The same is true of taking apprentices as children. That didn't happen until after Ruusan. During the time of the acient Old Republic, prospective Jedi didn't start training until they were at least in their teens.
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  • From ANON - Jessica on October 27, 2005
    Well, it's nice to see someone finally pay attention to KOTOR over here, but it moved too fast, and was too short. I don't think its even 500 words. I think if you rewrite and flesh it out, this could be pretty good.

    Also, I think there was an very OOC moment with Bastila. I can't imagine her asking if she tasted good.. o_x At least not on her first time. Where did she learn about that?! And then.. you know.. as a Jedi, I doubt she's been having teh hawt secks.. either she's lying, or hymens don't exist in KOTOR. Otherwise, Revan was an insensitive jerk for just going at it, and should have been Force Lightning'd one good time.

    Like I said, this can be good if you rewrite.
    Hell, I might try my hand at this particular scene.
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  • From ANON - Reesy on September 25, 2004
    Nice fic, more detail needed though i suggest a rewrite
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  • From ANON - Dru on August 26, 2004
    This is Star Wars? There's a category for Role Playing games. This is Movies. Putting that aside, this is a pretty sophomoric lemon with badly clichéd dialogue. You really need to rethink posting your work in a public forum before taking a few writing classes.
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