Reviews for Complications of WarBy : tavington |
What did your story try to accomplish? How a woman struggles to keep her dignity bound in marriage with a monster? Or to tell us, that even a though a woman can be raped and have her brothers killed by the same man, she will put this behind her without a second thought and fall helplessly in love with the man who committed these crimes? The story was severely disjointed, the two women Jane and Caroline were outrageously unbelievable and disgusting. In a few lines this is how your story reads." Hi Jane I'm Caroline I was raped but still think Tavington is hot. Hi Caroline, I'm Jane and I know I'm just Tavington's whore, but I love him too. Great let's be friends. Oh Joy!" Where was the conflict and sense of morals? Where was Caroline's pain and struggles with the horrible situation? Where the hell was her ANGER and fight to get away from this man!? And why wouldn't Jane even give at least an inkling of thought to what Tavington did to Caroline, or for that matter be repulsed by him? From the actions of the the two women in the story Tavington could rape a thousand women and Jane wouldn't care and Caroline what can I say she's suffering from a serious bout of Stockholm Syndrome.
From the many excellent love from rape stories I've read, there's one thing that all the authors accomplished – making the badasses sympathetic and unraveling from them some flaw or sincere human emotion to take them out of the bad light and make them redeemable in the eyes of the reader. Reading fragment's of Tavington's abusive father wasn't enough to give him my sympathy or to like seeing him be with Caroline in the end. Tavington's actions did nothing to show that he was a changed man and he was the same old scummy bastard from page one. Caroline hardly reflected on her rape since she was to busy giggling over how hot Tavington was. She accepted his emotional abuse and repeated rapes and became an obedient wife who supported her husband regardless. Horrible characters I hated them all.
Concerning the ending, the entire story did not need to drag on for chapters on end beating us over the head with yes they were treated like trash but Tavington is hot who cares beyond that. The entire story involved two incredibly stupid yes women that barely thought about the atrocities committed towards them. For a love from rape story, this one is a no. And please for the sake of all who read your story, get a spell checker.
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