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By : hellborne
  • From ANON - bittersweet on June 02, 2004
    ya know, i think i'm going to sue you for false advertising. ok, well, maybe not: you did answer a whole load of questions, but now you've set up a situation where i'm like, "Hey! what's going on over there?" because i know Jack's trying to be married (to Elizabeth?!), but it's a little off and i want to know what's happened to the Black Pearl in the meantime. don't tell me we're actually going to have to wait two years - that would be fic-wise - to see him back with Will.
    oh, i know: i'll sue you for getting my hopes up about get gettig back together so easily (although, i should have known...)!
    of course, if you wish to avoid this, post a new chapter of the same high quality ASAP.
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  • From ANON - littlebird on June 02, 2004
    Your story does have a lot of interesting twists. (Will Jack marry Norrington's sister?)
    But if I were Angeline and near death, I'd have chosen a bride and arranged the marriage. If she lets him choose and court a lady it is bound to take quite some time which she apparently has not.
    Besides, why Port Royal? Is there no Spanish, French or Dutch town nearby where Jack is less well known? She did not say it has to be English Aristocracy.
    Concerning your review-question: No idea. For me, it's your begging. I don't normally review, because I think it's impolite to comment on other peoples' stories so long as I haven't written anything myself where they could retaliate with comments.
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  • From ANON - pendragginink on June 02, 2004
    Lets see, what makes your stories worth reviewing? Hmmm, other than lust, depravity, and hoo hah dirt? Well, I would say, plot twists, great characterization, the way you have of making Jackfan2 go "NOOOOOoooooooooo!" yada yada. Personally, I like how the characters talk. For instance, Christ in a cannon. Has me cracking up everytime I read it. In this one, I very much like the relationship that Jack has with his sis. And I like how someone fly tly tells that Will git where to go and what to do with himself. Rash, turner, rash. Usually I dont like the 'all girl crews' and the pushy lady pirates----but I like this one, because they are just so cute about it. I do think it would be distracting, some, to have naked men wandering all over the ship, and as a matter of fact, last nite at dinner, i decided that it would not be a bad idea to have them wear waiters aprons when they serve dinner, and if you dont agrehen hen I guess you didnt see what Jackie dragged through your soup. For some reason, forcing Jack to breed hits me about as hard as whacking his wee wee. Terrible thing to do to my pirate. just terrible.
    So who does he hook up with at the party? Is it who i think it is? By the way, the little blurb you have at the end that tells us to 'push the button now' is rather effective. Brava.
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  • From ANON - evileyedpirategrrl on June 01, 2004
    mmm, yummy story. and seems to be getting even tastier. so i noticed at
    the end of this story you asked why this one was getting more reviews than
    some of your slash stories, which usually get more reviews. well i have to admit
    i get frustrated with the abundance of slash and lack of het. don't get me wrong
    men on men is hot, but sometimes i just need to read about jack bedding a
    lass. so there in lies the answer, your story is the perfect combination of slashy
    undertones and het. a hard combo to find, and one that i crave. i'm also loving that
    jack's 1st thought was elizabeth, when he was told he must marry. please, please
    i hope the muses pair them up. i'm always craveing a good elizabeth/jack story as there
    are far too few good ones. can't wait till the next chapter!
    *rum flavored golden toothed pirate kisses, luv xoxo
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  • From ANON - jackfan2 on June 01, 2004
    What makes this story so special? Hmm.. *think- think- think*

    Over Pleasant Holiday, which I love by the way... This story has an air of uniqueness to it. Angelina, Jack's sister being an albina, yet his twin! It's a very fresh approach to the PotC story. Slash is done a lot and often with reference to Jack/Will/Norrington and the lot. Not that it's not enjoyable to read. Not that when it's done BADLY that it's VERY painful to experience. You write it all amazingly well. Both the Het and the Slash. I honestly don't think you could write them otherwise.

    So, this story's freshness gives it added appeal and intrigue and I can't wait to see more. However, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DO NOT stop adding to Pleasant Holiday! PLEASE!

    All your work is brilliant and you've an incredible flare for writing all the character in such a delectible way! Your Jack is heads and tails WAY above the rest.

    Continue! PLEASE! Pleasant Hol AND AND The Siren. I beseach thee.

    Ta!
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  • From ANON - bittersweet on June 01, 2004
    ok, well, i just had a nice long encouraging review that got freakin erased by the wonders of not being able to connect to this site. dammit.
    anyway, there was a bit about how good this story in particular is, what with the emotional and personality range of each character, and especially your very powerful and engaging OC; and then there was a bit about how i can't believe you can write so many good fics at one time; and finally there was a bit where i apologized for not reviewing and then yelled at you for teasing about the next part of this story.
    the point of all of that - and the trying again, even - was to get you to please, please, please update this so i can see what happens next! i'm always checking this site aeavieaving disappointed because your fics aren't updated: see how you affect my day? get on with it!
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  • From ANON - rose on May 30, 2004
    Not care, are you crazy, you just shot Jack and are writting one of the greatest and most imaginative pirates fics around, of course we care.
    Please update, please.
    Rose
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  • From ANON - Pam on May 30, 2004
    I really like you story. Hope you keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Jackfan2 on May 30, 2004
    NO NO NO NO!!! Don't you DARE stop posting ESPECIALLY AFTER THAT CLIFFIE!!!!NOOOOOOO

    I'll be good. I swear! I'll try harder. Every chapter. One review! But you must make Jack better! EEEP! Amazing chapter, love. I totally DID NOT expect this! MORE MORE MORE!!! Must make sure Jack's gonna survive..

    Must say, this is better than having his 'weewee' cut off.

    Ta!
    Jackfan2
    er...
    Cap'n Julie

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  • From ANON - Carmen21heartbroken on May 29, 2004
    Hey I really like this story I really like the Siren she knows how to keep men in check(ohh Piper'stwin21 wants to say sorry for her double review there she clicked the review button twice on accident) any ways love the story and hope that it gets updated soon.
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  • From ANON - Piper\'stwin21 on May 29, 2004
    I said it once and I'll say it again I really love this story so far plz continue!!!
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  • From ANON - Prolix on May 29, 2004
    Hey Hellbourne,
    This story is coming very well. I like to read what you write. In fact, when I see the name Hellbourne, I go, "Oooo, yea!" Constructive crit. - Is the captian albino? Cuz then she would have red eyes, and I don't seem to remember if they were. No big whoop.

    P.
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  • From ANON - Kinky Pixie on May 29, 2004
    YAY..........an update *happy me*. You know i want more, i NEED m Got Got to see little "Jackie" (love that, btw!) and the Turners get re-aquainted ;) Please let Jack be ok. I beg you pleeeeeeease.
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  • From ANON - Kinky Pixie on May 24, 2004
    Oooooooh, Jack to the rescue, how ever will Will repay him? *winks* But will Bootstrap be a distraction from the lovely Will? Hope not, but can't wait for another update. Wonder what The Siren wants from Jack tho?? hhhhmmmm This is good!
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  • From ANON - bittersweet on May 23, 2004
    meep! that was a horrible place to stop! well, actually, it was a good place, story-wise...but horrible because i wanna know what happens next!!! anyway, this is really quite an interesting story. i wanna know exactly what it is that Captain Hawk wants of her little bro - and why it is she makes him so damned nervous. and, geez, could Will BE any more freakin pure?! but, that does seem to be his character - ready to kill himself for other people and whatnot. i think you're doing a great job on this, so go and make more good chapters!
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