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From Yakkorat on March 28, 2004
Lovely. Thank God. I have been looking for nigh 3 hours for just ONE halfway decent piece of Jack/Will fiction to read before I turn my attention back to work. Thank goodness for this one. And Jackfan2, if you're reading this, did you tell me about this one and I forgot? Or were you keeping this gem to yourself? Hmmm???? Or were you worried I would see the two parallels between this story and "Echoes" and stop writing "Echoes"?
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Anyway, you're doing a lovely job with this one! I loved Tim's reaction. "SODOMITES???" He might as well have said "Silly pirate. Dicks are for chicks." (I haven't heard that for so long. Hehehe) But I've got a great line for him. It's from RENT by Jonathan Larson and comes in the midst of a song in which the characters are raising their glasses to a number of things. And the line is "To sodomy. It's between God and me." Thought I'd share.
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And now since I'm babbling... I must cease and desist the attempt at intelligent discourse. Good night.
Love,
e-Rae-Rae
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From ANON - Jackfan2 on March 26, 2004
Ooohh. you can't stop there! Geesh.. That was a very good chapter, as they've all been wonderful. Pleas update soon. Gotta know how that surgery turns out.

Oh, and incidently, loved Jack's line about the swag in his leg before some pirate taking it for his hold...LOL.. very good. Very Jack-ish.

Ta!
Jackfan2
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From ANON - pendragginink on March 25, 2004
two things:
thing 1. The gold leg is going to be very heavy. heavier certainly, than pourous bone. Could will have bee clever enough to have put a spring mechanism in the heel? so that the skin is cushioned when he steps down and the spring recoiling would help push the leg back up? Thine 2. When Will took Jack from the tavern, why did he go to the trouble to dress Jack? Why not just wrap him in the blanket. Running carrying him is going to attract attention, anyway, a man in a blanket would not be more noticable than a man dressed. On the Pearl, Jack would have to be undressed again, though he is unconscious at this point, true. Dressing Jack would also take time they did not really have. what happened to Jack's hat? did it get saved as well?
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From ANON - Dead_Sparrow on March 24, 2004
I love this story. Please update soon. I can't wait for more.

Yours Sincerely,
Dead_Sparrow
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From ANON - Layne on March 23, 2004
Well written! I'm really enjoying it so far. Keep going!! =)
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From JennyPugh on March 23, 2004

Hmmm. Did they really go through all that preparation before an operation back then? It seems awfully like modern practice.
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From JennyPugh on March 23, 2004

Hehehe! Jack's going to end up all gold if he's not careful! One part of me hopes he doesn't remember the torture, but another part of me think's he's strong enough in character to deal with it.
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From ANON - Pendragginink on March 23, 2004
Jack's swag leg? Captains of the coast want to put him in their hold? What ever will we do if Caaptain Kidd decides to bury him? Kidding aside, I'm having a thought here. counting backwards from 10 is all very well with the ether and all. except for one tiny detail. The more tolerant, immune, and just plain used to alcohol one is---the longer it takes for the anesthetic to work. Jack drinks,oh lety, ay, at least a moderate amount of rum, as pirates go, so even if the doctor told him to count backwards from 100, well, it would go something like this----100,99.98,97........3,2,1,0.....what do you want me to do now, Abernathy? Hey Abernathy, yer going AWOL. Oh, yer back, wha...? No, Will stop..not the hammer....
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From ANON - Pendragginink on March 23, 2004
Excuse the multiple reviews. Some key on my computer has chosen to send the review in whenever I press the key. Leaves me with a blank screen so I do the review again. I finally got back to the review page and see that the reviews were being posted and not just eaten as I though. This is going to go on the wrong chapter but oh well. I still want to say that I was amazed that Jack not only admitted to being hungry, but that his *gasp* foot hurt. must berutirutiating then, because the leg on a plaque would get recorded as a superficial wound. Speaking of the leg-----if the center of the top end has a long extension --say 4 - 6 inches long and 1/2 inch in diameter, coming up out of a cup ---the extension can insert directly ip into the center of the femur--into the marrow of the bone coming from the knee--right up the center. makes for a very stable fit and is perfectly alright helps keep proper alignment and he will walk on it sooner--sooner the walking, sooner healing. Hips are shoved down in the femur this way, and the patients walk the next day. not willingly, but they do.
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From ANON - pendragginink on March 23, 2004
Well, appears some of us know good torture when they see it. The idea that they would give them drugs that would cause the hallucinations---eewwwh. One has to think that they knew what they were doing. Phsychological profiles indicate that some few inquisitors were sincere, but the big ones--well, some of them just liked toten ten and watch. Some very chilling phrases in here: the cardinal has never made a mistake before. ouch. that means tha everyone before Jack was forced into confessing---hey they are guilty! There are all kinds of torture and torment--witness Will's expression of annoyance--and Jack, that little snot, feeling good about. (Jack--not torment will anymore? But, its so easy!) And will telling him he would lie and say he was not in pain even if they handed him his leg on a plaque. Im laughing. Here I am, laughing at a torture fic. You see? great writing. Research, Not many people would guess that cardinals and popes commonly had their own armies. Thats what the three musketeers is all about. battle between the Queens' guard and the cardnal's soldiers. Jack notices every detail doesn't he. knows right off that there is something funny about his teeth. (nice touch using the buried abuse memory, but will Jack ever be able to go fishing again?), we do have ways of protecting our psyche) Oh, and if he wakes up and wonders why his mouth is minty--tell him *cough*--that and angel *cough* who watches over him a lot must have *cough* gotten in there and kissed him. *coughetty cough cough*
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From ANON - Pendragginink on March 23, 2004
Geez, the tension mou Tha Thank you for your lovely comments. Jack weighs 155 normally, and is emaciated and has been starved for weeks, so, if he weighed in the range of 100 lb, i think it would be reasonable. Yeah, I think you are right and that Will could do the baby carry. Its actually easier for women, because of the center of balance being in the hips. The wider and massive a man's shoulders in relation to his hips and butt---the more top heavy he is. Strenght and buffness also play a factor. Ever seen the party trick where you stand with your heels and hips touching a wall, bend over at the waist and lift a kitchen chair with your arms. Women do this easily. Men tip over forwards. always. hip to shoulder ratio. Some of us *cough* can lift a tank without falling foreards. good anchor, hips. Adrenalin would also enable will, now that I think about it--like the little grandmas what pick up the front of a car that has fallen on their grandson---adrenalin.
I see Jack is his old cranky self. Hes feeling better. And as Jack is often written as refusing broth and other convalescent foods, it was refreshing to see him demanding food on the hour. Im still laughing. You summed it up very well, that he really almost cannot take or accept orders from anyone else. especially an authority figure like a doctor. I loved the chicken leg bit, throwing it out the window was just mean of you, now wasn't it. He would have sent ANA out the porthole? but she wouldn't do that, would she? . LOL I could see Jack steaming. How did he get the chicken leg? Wait--has anyone seen Cotton's parrot lately?'
Historically they had no inhaled anaethetic until the 1870's, we all know this but this story calls for one (I want him to have the gold leg, but I don't want him to die of shock during the process) so I think this doctor, being one of the first scientiststhe the age of enlightenment--he is a visionary after all--no doubt has experimented with around with alchemy and has, after a few rough starts, learned whick gases will put you to sleep and allow you to wake up again--because methane kills you as does carbon dioxide. Some knock you out, but burn the throat and lungs. If the doc is using ether, he'll have to be careful with that rag--because it will burn Jack's face if it touches his skin to often, and it will wear off every 15 min or so. Let him breath the fumes only. please don't let it wear off. I also suggest that they tie him down because starving the body for oxygen makes the arms and legs jerk as the big muscles try to flex. There was also hitting you on the head, which was used, but too often, did't work out so well, the opperation was successful, but *ahem* the patient died,
as for chapter 6, I would be so honored if you could use any info out of that stew that I sent you--if you got the email that is, my email and my computer chose to be poopy about then so I don't know what went where.
I really like the way you have done Ana. Tough cookie
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From ANON - Mahie on March 23, 2004
Oh poor Jack,havio reo remove all his bones...how sad! :( I think Will could use some cuddle after the operation... ;) Anyway,I'll be waiting for J/W interaction just like ye promised. :) Well well I just wanted to say again how good this fic is and that it's great to have five chapters in,what,a day and a half? Wow! Keep writing please! Mahie
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From ANON - Frankenmuth on March 23, 2004
I don't know what to say...

*shutters at the thought of all that blood* There is gonna be a lot of blood, isn't there...you aren't...like, gonna go into it in detail...are ye? *twich*

I hope Jack makes it through...and that the doctor can do it...and that Ana doesn't barf...I would for sure...where is Will?

*mutters to self* it will all be okay...it's a story...it will be okay...it will be okay....
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From ANON - littlebird on March 22, 2004
>Unfortunately, the medieval church was generally of a mind
>to torture the person till they confessed,
> then kill them BECAUSE THEY WERE A WITCH, thus allowing the soul he che condemned to go to heaven.
I know that. Moreover, there are recorded cases in which someone was found guilty without confession because "nobody can endure such torture unless the devil helps them". So what point is there in withstanding anyway?
That is why I thought Jack should have confessed and confessed much more than expected: (allegedly) cursed places that the cardinal would want to exorcise. Caches of magical items. Fellow witches. (All made up of course.) And Jack would offer to guide the cardinal there, and he'd try to escape on the way.
I understand your explanation: First he was hoping for rescue, and then he could not think any more. But to me Jack loses much of his charm if he doesn't try to #talk# his way out of trouble.
But it's your story.
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From ANON - Pendragginink on March 22, 2004
Whew---poor Jack. I'm glad he didn't confess,---as you say in the AN, they would have burned him. You have certainly done your homework on the research. Interesting how you wove into the story the fact that the inquisition had ended by this time. Unfortunately, torture to get informn ann and/or to please the torturer did not, and in the hands of a lovely person like that sadistic cardinal, a captive had no chance. Crucifiction was a legal execution until 1800.

As Jackfan2 says, you kept the torture just about right. Now comes the healing. I enjoyed this fic up to the gold leg part, and now I am fascinated. I assume you hace researched this--but on the chance that I have some info that you do not----here is an informational lecture from a student of torture and ancient medicine up through the enlightenment. Western and Eastern. Ancient history and anthropology major as well as library degree. (brag brag)
And you have been right on the money so far. I am going to send you some info you might fond useful--but it iis informational and not review, so I will send it email. I worried a bit about if you would welcome it or not, but Jack told me to send it and I can't disappoint him

Not interested---dont read it. BUT, I like what you have done so far very much. Got so interested that it was like I was watching a movie instead of reading a fic. And now I am hot to see more of the story.

Only thing that I noticed as odd and which I never can swallow in stories is will running carrying Jack in his arms. On the shoulder yes, but I see this a lot in fiction of all kinds, and will is a smith and therefore very strong so no doubt it is doable if he held Jack nearly shoulder high and didn't have far to go. The faster he runs, the easier it would be, oddly enough.

So the churgeon learned like Leonardo did he? How did leonardo learn? I know Michelangelo made a deal with the priest who was in charge of the charnel house in Florence. He could sneak in there at night and disect the bodies all he wanted as long as he cleaned up the mess. He carved a lifesized crucifix for the local church to hang over the alter. He did this for a little more than a year in his teen years. Highly illegal, all of it. I assume Leo did something of the same. There was one legal disection per year for medical students, and that was it.

This is fiction, so we can do whatever we want, actually. I want Jack to have gold teeth so Im glad he has his back, and will made them. that's nice. If the doctor is really cool, he will have small silver cauterization rods from france, or will can make them, so he can seal the veins w/o burning a lage aes.

Very interested in seeing how this will turn out. Does the mean ccardiname ame after him? hope not.

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