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By : GraycefulChaos
  • From ANON - Jessi shmesshy on March 01, 2004
    I don't really remember what I tried to post now. *sheepish* Must not have been that important.

    But poor whores, 'specialy the boy, 'cause he doesn't seem to have done this as long as the girl, like it's only his second time or something. He doesn't seem too broken yet. ;_; poor broken Will. And poor stupid Jack, thinking that giving Will whores will make him all better. I want to take all four of them, and smooch them a lot, and feed them icecream and brownies, and.... *ramble*
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 01, 2004
    ' “Will, do you think I’m fat?”

    I bolted out of bed, trying to fully register what he had just said. “What?!” '

    *Grins stuy* Ty* That is so funny... and I am a dork, but I don't care.

    Please write more soon, I really enjoy the style of writing you are using (whatever style that is)...

    Okay, I'm gonna stop, before I make an even bigger fool of my self

    *Starts to sing ' I'm a fool, fool, for you...may take a while but I'll prove that it's true...'*

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  • From ANON - seraphina on March 01, 2004
    Ok, i must confess that i've been reading this from the very start and have not yet reviewed. Shame on me so i'm gonna make this a good one.

    First things first, keep doing what you're doing. Wonderful fic, great characterisation, perfect pace, just great.

    I'm not normally one for first person but here you've written something i can't walk away from.

    Will is fantastic...i think maybe a more realistic product of that sort of experience but then agian, not having been there myself, i can't really comment that much.

    I love the one sentence paragraphs you've been using as end of thoughts. They work really well and give me a wonderful pause to be able to scream at my family to 'shut the f@@k up, i'm trying to read art!'

    i love your sarcasm abuse, it makes me cackle wildly.

    Sometimes i wonder what Jack's response would be to some of the stuff Wil just thinks but doesn't say, the first section of chapter 7 esp.

    Can't express how much this just amused me beyond belief>

    /Once in a while it takes over, drowning out every other noise around me. I have to yell to hear myself. Jack doesn’t seem to like it when I do that. It bothers him.

    If it bothers him so much, you would think he would try to make it go away./

    Could probably do with longer installments but am happy with anything you give us...please give us more soon though!!!

    -the seraph


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  • From ANON - Jessi the SAD! on February 26, 2004
    OMFG and other such acronyms! I posted a whole lot more then that! *screams loudly* Why do you do this to me, adultfanfiction.net, why?! *weeps brokenly* and now I am too lazy to type it all again! waa*sul*sulks in corner, sniffles*
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  • From ANON - Mona Jessi on February 26, 2004
    *giggles at the mental image of someone's lungs popping out of their nostrils* Yeah, I know how loud snoring men are, tho'.
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  • From ANON - The Jess who doth be filled with cheeses on February 25, 2004
    *bleches and pats her belly happily* ahhh, nothing better then eating some pizza while reading a good slash fic. *makes contented noises*

    In other news, yes, I completely agree. Will ~should~ have Jack's babies. Think of how cute they would be! And after several several many years of longness, think of how sexy they's be! o.o Excuse me while I uh... go to the bathroom. Heh, no, I kid. But yes, I like how while you changed Will, making him "OOC" you did so rightfully, and according to the situation. I was a bit worried at first as I am with all fics that make charaters OOC that they'll be somewhat flat, but your will started with his steady charater developement in the first chappter, and little quirks of his (as in the mirror scene) keep popping up here and there, making him even more interesting and colorful. Wooow, I just became all serious and meaningful and junk. o.O. That almost never happens! Yeek! *flees*

    Lurv,
    Jessi
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  • From ANON - FireFlyLady on February 25, 2004
    I really like your fic. I've been getting annoyed with all the fics where authors turn Will into a crying baby too. If people actually paid attention to Will's character in the movie, they'd see that unlike Jack, he's rather quick to anger, kills without hesitation when it's necessary, and isn't afraid of danger. Well, Jack isn't afraid of danger either, but you get the point. It's nice to see a fic in which Will isn't a sniveling wimp. *nods*
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  • From ANON - roxie on February 25, 2004
    Still loving the emotional depth of Will. When Will said he wantedbreabreak something I had a horrible feeling that something was actually someone, namely Jack. Jack seems to be stronger than this, though.
    There really is an element of suspense because I have no idea what Will's little smirk in the last chapter meant. Is he planning to hurt Jack? I'll be anxiously awaiting the next chappie :)
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  • From hellborne on February 24, 2004
    This just keeps getting better! I don't think you'll let me down and make Will woosie! You're WAAAAAY too good to do that! Keep up the FANTASTIC work!
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  • From ANON - Jessi the MIGHTY! on February 22, 2004
    aaaah! o.o! Will just raped Jack! There are so many fics out there in which it's the other way around, that I must admit the change is refreshing, *giggle, snort* I wasn't expecting that to happen, which was also refreshing. And I also liked that fact that it wasn't complete rape like woah, as Jack didn't seem... too... upset over it. *looks around* Write more! quick!
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  • From hellborne on February 22, 2004
    I love it when Will isn't so much of a wussy-boy! Will raping Jack is HOT! Please continue!
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  • From ANON - roxie on February 22, 2004
    I don't know if I've reviewed yet, but I just wanted to say that I love this story. I love Will's voice; the apathy is very realistic and common to rape victims. And I love how Will raped Jack. Obviously Will has lost his morals and regard for others and is on his way to becoming a sociopath. And it almost seems like Jack can forgive him for what he's done. The fact that I don't knowt tht the next chapter holds is what keeps me coming back. Great job!
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  • From ANON - Kali on February 20, 2004
    I've been glomped, hee!! ^_^

    I really am enjoying this fic, hun. It's one thing to write about the events, but to get into the person's mind can sometimes be difficult ... well, doing it effectively, at any rate. So far, you've got a good handle on it.

    This is making me want to post my stuff now, and is also making me think of writing something dark (Kali's never done dark before, but, I've got the mind for it). Between you, Selene, me, and soon Sora, we should start our own fanfic club. ;)
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  • From ANON - Jessi (again! wee!) on February 20, 2004
    WowIamsocool. XD I started reading your fic again, 'cause there was a new chapter, but somehow stupidly managed to start reading the first chapter, thinking that it was the thrid.ot vot veeeery confused. "Oh my goodness, what is this, a flashback? o.O" the the smartest ever. woot. Just thought I'd share that with you. My smartness boggles the mind, it does.

    And anyhoohahs, unless you lose you plot, give Will magical Marysueish powers, and start using chatspeak in your story, I think you're safe. It will still be good. Haw, I sure told you, I did. *looks around*
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  • From ANON - Kali on February 19, 2004
    Ah, the beauty of first person narrative. Will has every RIGHT to be snarky. I'd be pissed if they didn't feed ME, too! ;) You're doing well with this, hun. And, I'll say it here, I like your other one too. SO THERE! Okay, I must flee now.

    Kali ~ the Uber Tired (and therefore a Bit Loopy)
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